Rainbow Dash gets mad at her own mistakes and takes it out on Fluttershy. After apologizing she realizes the extent of damage she caused. She promises to never hurt her again. They soon discover their feelings for each other.
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Not to be rude or anything, but I've noticed a lot of grammatical errors in this. One of the biggest being that when you change between different character's dialogue, you're supposed to start a new paragraph. There's also the misuse of the word "to." When it is spelled "to" it is defining a direction. (ex. "I'm giving the leftover steak to Jeffery.") You seemed to be confusing it with "too," which is used to mean 'also' or 'as well' (ex "I'm going to give Jeffery some of the Salad too.") There were a few other's like saying "no" instead of "know" here and there; and the occasional use of the incorrect form of "there." But still a very good fiction, none the less! I'm looking forward to future chapters.
hey there,
i've been following this story for quite some time now on fanfiction, and i'm pleased to see that you have brought it over to fimfiction. I hope you can get the other 10 chapters uploaded soon :) once again i love this story.
Very cute ending there. Lots of feels even though the proofreading could have done a bit more to smoothen things out.
That end... How do those two not know they are way past what two best friends do each day...? Oh well, it makes for entertaining reading and I hope for more wingboner oriented silly fun to come in future chapters.
Celestia BUCKING damnit! Just lost a good amp!
Oh celestia, the whole massage thing was hilarious!!! Loved every word!
(Even the grammatically impaired ones!)