Blood On the Moon

by sentinel28a

Epilogue: The Best Laid Plans

Far away, in the Smoky Mountains, a unicorn stared into a scrying glass. There were places in Equestria where even Celestia’s hoof did not stretch, but this unicorn knew that there were places even in Canterlot itself where Celestia did not know.
The unicorn sighed. It had been a simple thing to manipulate Trixie into attacking Twilight Sparkle. It had been she, the unicorn, who taught Trixie her new offensive spells. It had not taken long: Trixie already knew quite a few, acquired from living alone on the road, but the truly devastating ones were acquired in the mountains. This unicorn had learned them elsewhere, after leaving Canterlot in a rage. Some she learned from forbidden books in forgotten libraries. Some she learned from no less than Chrysalis of the Changelings. In return, she had shared what she knew of Canterlot’s defenses. That plan failed too, but then she had never really expected the overconfident Chrysalis to succeed.
No, the unicorn thought, Twilight was a means to an end. Had Trixie done her job and killed Twilight, the Crown of the Elements of Harmony might have been wide open to take. At the very least, it would have stabbed Celestia to the core. Celestia had hurt this pony, and the pony wanted to return it tenfold. It was not enough to hurt the Princess of the Sun; she wanted Equestria. Had Chrysalis succeeded, the unicorn would’ve led a counterattack to retake Canterlot, and she would have been the heroine of the hour. Unfortunately, that had not worked out either, but these things happened.

“Oh well.” The unicorn tossed her mane, turned her back on the scrying glass, and instead regarded herself in the mirror. She checked a clock. “Almost time to go back to the other world.” It would be awhile before she could get back, but that gave her plenty of time to plan. “When that day comes,” she mused to herself, “Equestria’s mine, Celestia. I’ll have technology your mind can’t even fathom. Your magic’s going to be useless. And I’ll step on Twilight and Trixie just as hard, just to hurt you. I’ll force you into a war you can’t win.” She grinned at her reflection, liking the evil she saw there. And why not? Good had never done anything for her. “You’re going to regret the day you spurned Sunset Shimmer.”

Author's Note:

Okay, now it's over.

Comments

[Acespadez1134]

[RTStephens]

I got through reading this and gave it my upvote. The idea is sound and liked how things worked out, but I had issues with the execution.

Way. Too. Much. Telling.

This read more like a synopsis than a story. You really could have expanded on the Luna and Trixie interactions, showing scenes were Trixie was struggling with her changes for the better. I would have liked to see Trixie teaching a class of foals, having dialog with Celestia and gradually earning her trust. I'm being told these things while all the characters' thoughts are laid bare. The last scene with the main cast was better, as you show the reactions they have in seeing Trixie again, so try to do more of that. A little subtlety goes a long way.

Anyway, I liked the resolution and the possibility for a sequel. I'll be keeping an eye out for it!

[Flaring Dawn]

do i smell a sequel?

[Lunar Black]

Dat ending. xD Totally didn't see that coming.

[sentinel28a]

2900318

You have a point, but it would've taken probably two more chapters. I wanted to wind this up, and I really thought I'd written too much exposition!

I might do a "Teacher Trixie" short in the future.

[Camlio]

Well, it does seem like that epilogue has several bulbs on it shining sequel doesn't it? Perhaps taking place after EQG? (I think that's how it's spelled.) Where Trixie is literally dragging Sunset in front of Celestia at the start. (It could involve Trixie being sent there to keep tabs on Twilight for Celestia though she entered off camera.)

[Dainn]

Alright, Sunset!

[xTSGx]

I’ll force you into a war you can’t win.

And then Discord snaps his fingers and Shimmer's teleported into the sun. The End.

[sentinel28a]

2913645

Or Celestia burns her down with the laser attached to her frickin' head. Hey, no one ever said that Sunset Shimmer had thought her cunning plan through. Maybe she thought Celestia was an easy mark, or Equestria would fall before her brilliant intellect...well, Hitler thought invading Russia was a good idea, too.

I actually thought of that line in a discussion on TVTropes. Sunset's plan (apparently) was to gain control of a mind-controlled army of human teenagers, then send them through the mirror to attack Equestria...I guess. Anyhow, maybe she thought that Celestia would balk at using her Bigby's Crushing Tacnuke spell on humans not responsible for their actions?

Of course, Discord would mow the humans down anyhow, or turn them into ballet dancers. Or into his own army of Discorded humans. Hmm...

[xTSGx]

2914413
Shimmer's whole stupid plan is one of the main reasons I dislike EqG. I'm gonna go with my headcanon that she was just using the high school mind control as a "practice" and, if it was successful, was then going to go to UN Headquarters and use it on the General Assembly during their annual meeting (which occurs at about the same time as the Fall Formal). And then promptly get shot to death by the guards outside of the Headquarters when she tries to force her way in.

[sentinel28a]

2914527

I accept your headcanon.

[sentinel28a]

2937851

I missed that--it's now corrected. Thanks for letting me know.

[sentinel28a]

2941727

Um, okay...not sure what that was about...

[themanesix]

ok......that was really good, I am surprised this is not part of some groups because you did a great job at capturing the emotions involved in this.....looking forward to a potential sequel

[sentinel28a]

3074779

One of two things would happen:

1) Nothing. Celestia's so powerful that the Amulet would be useless.

2) EVIL CELESTIA.

[Rocka Leone]

Is there gonna be a sequel?

[Ratmandango]

OH SNAP

[Gremory]

that moment when you realize the fic is 3 years old and there's no sequel.

[Russian Bank Teller]

Sunset Shimmer won’t get the human yeh anyway. Hhahahaha

[Yubella]

From the summary I wouldn't mind if twilight died but I never get my wish an normally choose the losing side. Trixie

[Yubella]

Well, maybe she can finally kill one of my two nemesis