The excessive use of the Alicorn amulet has had an unfortunate after-effect on the Great and Powerful Trixie now that she is no longer wearing it, even the smallest uses of her magic causes her body intense pain and crippling migraines as well as being haunted with the guilt her past actions under its influence.
Passing out in front of Ponyville's hospital, she catches the attention of a Nurse Redheart as well as The Doctor both of whom desperately trying to restore her body and her confidence in a trip to the past.
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Very interesting premise. Felt very 11th Doctor, the way he cheerfully waltzes into someone else's life to help them while acting like he's crazy. His approach to the Ursa was uncharacteristically callous, though. This is the guy who will extend an offer of aid to even his enemies - even if it was incurably rabid, he'd at least feel sad about having to put it down. Trixie felt rather somber, but it fits seeing as she's supposed to be depressed. Interesting touch with bringing along Redheart. Made sense, particularly in case Trixie collapsed from the exhaustion. Plus, you know, another person to play the sane one against the Doctor.
The story could use a lot more filling out, though. As it is, it's pretty bare-bones and rushed. You could probably add more description to the scenes, show the ponies do things besides talking, and so on. Slow it down a bit.
Other than that, an enjoyable read. Worth the time.
Trixie and Doctor! INSTANT SAVE!!
This was really good. But it is also really rushed.
While I'm generally disinclined to read anything with Dr. Whooves in it, I read this one 'cause Trixie.
I was surprisingly entertained by it. Good job.
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I write it like that because it was an idea I had in my head for a while, but I understand and I'm sorry.
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I'm not proud of admitting it, but yes-it was rushed because I wanted to complete a contest-which I failed at completing.
So, I would like to apologize for writing it likes this.
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I'm afraid that any additions would only make the story worse.
Sorry.
Always liked Trixie
The story is far too rushed to have any entertainment value, the whole plot of the story is a forced and failed attempt at making the audience both feel sympathetic towards and redeem her in their eyes.
The inclusion of the Doctor is once again forced in this regard as she could have gone off and defeated another Ursa Major without all of this time travel BS.
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Technically, you're comment about how the
is actually incorrect. Three years ago would've been before her first appearance in Ponyville. That means that, according to this timeline at least, she wasn't lying in the episode "Boast Busters" when she said that she had vanquished an Ursa Major. Just felt that that should be pointed out.
i love Trixie, and any story with her in it. im glad the doctor could salvage her self confidence. I love to see her saved. she reminds me of lyra, and luna. they all have some tragic aspects in their lives, and need friends so desperately. I love the twixie ships.
Here, 'ave a mustache!
