The Pyro.
He is misunderstood. Judged by those who cannot see past the mask.
Sociopath, Pyromaniac, Unstoppable killing machine.
He is feared and hated by all that cross path's with him.
But what would happen if he encountered someone who doesn't hate him?
(Guess what everypony! You can decide what happens in the story! Explanation is in the story.)
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Jeez dude
he just wants a friend
There should be no apostrophe. You did that in the title as well.
Something about this story doesn't feel right. I'm not sure what, but it doesn't.
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I will fix that.
And I am curious to know what's causing that feeling. is it the mood of the story, the writing style etc?
I care about what people think about my fic, and if there is a problem with it, i WILL fix it.
You have my attention.... O.o
Give me blood. Charred blood. Charred blue blood.
Fluttershy didn't hear zecora's description of the monster, what if she finds the pyro while he's not burning things and thinks he's another everfree creature? Well, rather than something that burned down her house and almost killed her friend, but, still.
luna meets pyro. pyro Burns city hall add chaos then He runs burns her tail and runs away to get away but fails
sex................. JK good story so far. oh yes, blood, lots of blood. mayor must get torched too.
make it so we see thigns from the pyro POV and then the ponies but unlike the trailer the view is swapped. ergo the Pryo seems him/herself committing nothing but mass bloody slaughter with fire, while he is infact doing nothing but being kind to the poines
This does capture my interest, I really love the idea for this story! I think that, however, this story could benefit from a different sentence structure, style, and vocabulary. This is the kind of story that begs for abstractness, I felt everything was so straight forward. Take this for example:
"She was going to talk to Twilight and get this settled. Fluttershy knew she would probably be awake. The librarian was a night owl. After making sure that Zecora would be comfortable on the couch Fluttershy started to make her way to Twilight's when Angel latched onto her leg, silently pleading for her not to leave.
"Don't worry Angel, mommy will be right back." Angel wasn't convinced."
Maybe the wording could flow a bit like this:
"Above the enchanting fog was the whispers of light creeping from the windows; etched with wood wiring and steady frames. It lied there, moaning and weeping forward with an ambient wail. Fluttershy took a deep turn and from the fog crept the tangible shape of a librarian's pent house. Twilight had to be awake, the lights were a dead giveaway. She scuffed the floor, stiff as a statue, rubbing a thin line like a chunk of chalk. The doors creaked, the silence ached, deep breaths... deep breaths... (Yes I know this is obviously a scene ahead, I didn't notice until half-way through)."
Not trying to be a grammar nazi or anything harsh like that...
but this story would seriously go great with some stylized horror flick-type dialogue from the third person. Just saying, regardless, this story is great so far! 
The Pyro comes rushing out of the forest, does the taunt with the flamethrower, and tries to burn everything, but the mane six kick his butt, and then Fluttershy sees he was scared of crazy or something or other. Also have somepony say, "One shudders to imagine what inhuman thoughts lie behind that mask... what dreams of chronic and sustained cruelty...."
Thanks for your suggestions everypony, i saw many good ones, and i will use elements of the best ones in the story! Keep giving me ideas! I love them!
nice going on jumping ten likes in one night
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thanks!
I honestly didn't think that people would like this so much!
Faster! Faster! FASTER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Was it intentional that you're first chappy has 666 words in it? Kinda ominous if ya ask me.
2819450. ...maybe...
2819551 Nice little easter egg ya got there
now THIS is what I'm talking about! I love the disjointed nature of the third person thought process, works incredibly well! One little nitpick... if Pyro sees sunshine and rainbows from gritty and disturbing things, what will he see from the colorful, pleasant Ponyville?!
I love how you deviated strictly from your previous writing pattern, giving it more of an abstract nature to better acomodate his unusual thought process. Details like "Massive pillars of black smoke towered into the sky and the ash fell like snow, blanketing the ground." give the world you created such a lush sense of scale, I adore this chapter!!! You've got one happy customer here mate!
P.S: Thanks for the Fav, Like, and Follow; really means a great deal to me
2816760 You never know until you try, I for one love this story!
2819984 I very much appreciate your comments, they were a lot of help! I would love to see more of your stories as well! As for the fave and follow, you've earned it son (pins cardboard metal to chest and salutes)
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I'll get more stories done eventually.
Pyro gets attacked by the Mane Six and the ponies: He shows no mercy.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
idea!!!
fires the elements of harmony at him.
uses air blast to bounce it back at them
be afraid mane 6, be very afraid... muhaha!
The first chapter has exactly 666 words.
How fitting.
New chapter(s) coming Saturday morning!
How about this:
The Pyro and Pinkie Pie meet. Being Pinkie Pie, she can understand him. She finds out that he didn't know what he had really done, that he was just trying to do a favor, but ended up hurting others and just wants to have friends and didn't mean harm to any of the locals.
2822210 FUCKING GENIUS! Let's play airblast dodge ball with the elements of harmony magic rainbow ray beam friendship thing!
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MOAR MOAR MOAR...
P.S.: Thanks for sparing Rainbow Dash!
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But the question is...
DO YOU BELIEVE IN MAGIC?!
Rainbow Dash charges at Pyro. Pyro airblasts. Rainbow hits Luna.
When the ponies attack and get curb stomped, Pyro shall scream:
"BURN IT! BURN IT ALL TO THE GROUND!! RAZE THIS LAND UNTIL IT IS NAUGHT BUT ASH AND SHATTERED DREAMS!!! HAHAHA!!!"
but they'll hear:
"MM MM! MMPH MM MMPH MM MMPH MM!! MMPH MM MMPH MM MMPH MM MMPH MM MM MMPH MM MMPH MMPH!!! HMMHMMHMM!!!"
when can we expect the next chapter?
Fairly soon, i've been pretty busy as of late
If anything, I'd like this story to really hit home with all the Derpy lovers.
That's right.
I want to see the wall-eyed pegasus burn.
Along with her daughter.
3085560 Any chance of update?
So much for the update coming out soon.
add more i am fan girling over this
Please update new chapters.
2837517 lookie, lookie, me name
know what I find stupid, they think the Element latch to one user, while the Element are used on ponies with a high concentration of the element, Kindness for example, Fluttershy has a high concentration of Kindness, and someone else could have that concentration, AND BE ABLE TO USE THE DAMN THING. WHAT THE ABSOLUTE FUCK PEOPLE?!?!?!?!??!?!?!???!?!??????????????????????????!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
GGGGAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ffffUUUCCCKKKKIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG HASBRO, AND YOUR DAMN UNINCLUDED DETAILS STOMPTYJNBOI5YIRNIRJNGIJRTNBIR3NGBJNIOWROJBMRGOFKVDMWFDGSOKDVMS4EF54H
Its offical this story is dead
EVERYTHING MUST BUUUUUUURNNN
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not big surprise