It is magnificent , I hope there will be more to come?

2731093 Thank you Moonlight. Appreciate the enthusiasm and I hope to keep your interest until the end!

2731120 and you shall.

And I still Continue to read this beautiful story I am in love with already

2769166 Daaawwwwww, shuckins. Thanks

Usually i dont read hie fics but due to its most impressive beginning and good start into characterization im going to probably read it all the way through again i must state that dialogue should only be found at the beginning or end of a paragraph but do not fret im guilty of this mistake as well and also it looks nicer to the reader usually when you double space in between each paragraph as well the story looks less cluttered

2892371 this one gets pretty dialogue heavy I'm afraid to say....more mistakes to come. I know people like double spacing, but I am old....I like traditional format. Looks like I need to edit this thing for the dialogues....oh dear, thank you again for the constructive criticism. It will be nice to read more of them in the next chapters.

Hmmm.... The reveal was a lot better than I had expected it to be, but still held to that cliche 'dark and mysterious stranger' persona. Not much else to say here. The chapter was mostly dialogue, but the 'tell' aspect was still there and rather bothersome.

This was certainly enjoyable to say the least. I'm only sorry that I haven't read this sooner.

I know I read the third chapter. I'm not crazy!!