"Why is everything different now? What's happened to me? What do I do now?" If you were in my situation what would you do if you turned into a pastel coloured pony?
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Again this is simply another good chapter. I really like how your character is developing and it was cute and touching with your interactions with that filly. Even I wanted to hug her. It is nice that you included some lighter material. You are coming along fine as an fanfiction author. Please keep up the good work and I honestly can't wait to read more of what you create in the future.
Damn for almost making me choke up a bit emotionally especially for the final part because you caught me slightly off guard.
Keep it up
-Frost
I loved this chapter! And the state the filly is in is unfortunate, I just want to hug her!
You earned a fav good sir. Your story is emotionally ground breaking and heart-warming at the same time. You seemd a little indecisive with how the story's mood would be like in the beginning, but you established it firmly with the last two. Good work .
The feels man you have brought them
All of the D'Awws
I have to say, the third chapter has vastly improved on the first and second chapter. Maybe just rework the first and second chapter a bit, remove all of the unnecessary elements, and maybe draw out the transformation a bit more.
That said, the plot is still kinda all over the place.
I think, in the end, this story is trying to accomplish more than its author's skills permit.
if nothing else, I will concede that you have some ballsy ambition with this story, even if it didn't carry through. definitely come back to this story later, it has a lot of potential.
you are epic for that last song!!!
Cute, really cute.
that bit about the mask? exceedingly true. nobody i know in person actually knows me. no one on this site knows me. forever the outsider.i do have a group of people i hang out with but i am the expendable one. no one notices when i'm gone. also what is a "sugar and ice" personality?
too much cuteness for me ;w;
Love this chapter!