It's Twilight Velvet & Nacht Licht's (German for Night light) B-days & for a coincidence, are right next to each other! But due to political duties, the princess of friendship's magical bond cannot attend! So, she will be substituted by everypony's favorite dragon! Well actually my favorite dragon is Red Dragon Archfiend, but you know what I mean! This is my 3rd story.
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this is random
shall continue then rate
needs more stauncher and plot just too scattered
Ok. So. Please don't be mad at me, but I am going to point out some of your flaws. Overall, I liked the idea, but it couldn't have been executed much better:
1-don't refer to chapters. It makes it sound weak. Instead off saying "it was just like chapter 2" say "the party was just as great as the night before" or something along the lines of that
2-the characters seem to be completely out of character.
3-you need to be careful about your grammar and punctuation. You're missing quite a few full stops, and the verb after a character says something (eg. said) should not be capitalized)
I hope this helps
Aaaawwwwwww...
So I know this is weird to ask but why was Shinning grounded? Was it just because he was clopping or was it because he got the pictures of those girls plots?
I choose anti-Pink , nerlizer, and teleporter gun. Blocks Pinkie with blocker, erase her mind, and teleport her back to ponyvile.
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