After being defeated by Nightmare Moon, Twilight is transformed into a puppet of darkness called Lunar Eclipse. But when she starts to have flashbacks of a certain baby dragon, she realizes that there may still be hope for Equestria.
Will Lunar Eclipse be able to see the error of her ways in time?
Will Twilight survive?
Will Equestria be saved?
Read on to find out!
Credit goes to Giuliabeck for the photo which gave me inspiration for this story.
The sequel to this story 'For Want of Eternal Nightmare' is out and can be accessed quickly via the link. Its a lot longer compared to this and has higher quality writing. It's worth the read, trust me.
Chapters (12)
The short chapters are all I complain about...
It leaves me chewing my seat cushion fluff...
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I hope to gradually increase their size, after all this is my first fic.
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I guess I am just spoiled with some of the stuff I read
2681151 Me too. Your writing is very good but not really a fan of the short chapters. Unless it's a very short story that'll be ending soon, then I guess it doesn't matter. I like anyway.
They can indeed use a bit of fat to them.
Never did like short chapter fics. (Save for Imploding Colon, but he's a different story)
~Skeeter The Lurker
You really need to put some detail into this, bro. Show, don't tell. That and keep an eye on your formatting.
WHAT!!!??? i just woke up to a pleasant surprise of 128 views =)
too short chapters but further it is a good story
NEW CHAPTER YAY!
I don't want this to sound harsh because I really do like this. That said I'm a bit disappointed. Most of these chapters could be, and should be combined into a single chapter. Unless you were intending to make something that can be read in bite sized pieces, in which case you hit the nail on the head hard enough to scare the screw. The small chapter size is really my only gripe, though you did make a few grammatical errors. Nothing too big (casted should simply be cast). Keep up the good work and I look foreword to more.
2693191 wow, i thought i got overexcited by new chapters. never saw the author get excited by an update in his own story
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this is short...
I've gone over how much of the plot there is left to the story and to my surprise, it doesn't seem like a lot. When i started this story i didn't want it to be longer than 10,000 words as its meant to be a short story, i keep telling myself things like 'oh its halfway through you've got thousands of words to write' and then once its done i'm like wait
I'm going to be fully honest at the end of the day. This story seems so short because its my first ever proper story that I've written (stupid essays that I've written in the past don't count), but then again its not half as short as some of the other chapters of peoples fics that I've read. so i'm probably going to wrap this story up soon and plan another for a few weeks, which i hope shall be longer, e.g. 1000 word chapters, because at the end of the day, all i can do is build up my chapter length bit by bit.
After some thought and much needed rest. I've decided that there will be 4-5 more chapters to the story, they will be up before Friday. I hope you guys will be as excited as i am to read the finished product
Wait...
you wanna know how the story ends? 
Don't make me laugh, thats my secret until it's finished 
Tell you what... i'm gonna start writing a chapter now, as i have 4 of the 5 chapters already planned out. *inaudible mumbling*
I better get credit for this. Wait did i say that out loud? 
Um, yeah, you didn't hear that 
Better get writing
bye!
Still not a fan of the VERY short chapters but it's still good. Continue.
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Like i said before, it was meant to be a short story. besides its being wrapped up by the end of tomorrow. Cause i'm going on holiday, which gives me 2 weeks to plan a new story. God i wish i had a laptop sometimes, instead i'm stuck with a gaming rig.
slight change of plans. the story will be finished tomorrow before i set off on holiday. the reason for this, is a few unforeseen technical issues. 2-3 chapters left i think
Wow. I love this story. Personally I would love to see Nightmare and Lunar rule equestria in Darkness. Can't wait for the next chapter!
changed the characters to add luna. Got rid of twilight from list, seeing as she is one of the mane 6 anyway, don't need her in twice.
also... IT'S FINISHED, YAY!
now i can read it properly =)
Good read.
Now go back, and fatten them up.
~Skeeter The Lurker
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Can't do anything when I'm on holiday right now lol.
This story was (obvious dashie quote in 3..2..1..)SO AWESOME
So, i get back and the first massive problem i have is that i can't think (imagine, etc) of what i should put for my Bad ending, but... i'll always think of something
, even if it kills me!
Edit: **** the bad ending, writing a sequel... Sequels are always better!
200 chapter views. less than 2 hours? F**K YEAH!!!
These chapters are wicked short.
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It was my first story. Its pretty much the first of a trilogy. When the whole trilogy gets finished, I'll come back to these and see what I can do to improve them.
well that escalated quickly....
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When I finished it, I shrugged it off and used the excuse "Meh, will be an epic prologue"
Now all I can do is this when I read it.
3195114 While I'm bugging you...
Princess Celestia literally hands the elements to their respective bearers?! WHAT THE VREK!?
....
Screw it, I liked this story. I really did. I would have written it slightly (ok WAY) different but that isn't my place. Seeing as this was/is your first fanfic, I applaud you.
Now if you'll excuse me, I have a sequel to read.
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I spent about 3 months planning it and thinking it will be epic, but then it turns out tiny. Oh well
life's a bitch sometimes.
I have to say i'm really amazed by this story, keep up the good writing.
The author's note would fit better if the chapters were longer.
What feedback? What chapter? You mean this short block of text?
The premise is good but the overall story? Not so much. The story moves WAY too fast. It also feels like it needs more exposition. Not bad but I'm withholding my like/dislike for the end...
That author's note....
That bit with Pinkie Pie... You've got her pegged.
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This story = (100% honesty) Crappily done prologue which is either going to get a full blown remake/rewrite or made longer. although I think the first option would end up a lot better for me. I rushed those last chapters because I was going on holiday... to be honest, I now feel like a complete chump for doing it.
These chapters are too short and too fast paced I like the idea but this should have been at least reached 10 thousand words by this chapter and should have reached a minimum of 50k words total.
Sorry but I have to read like 50 other stories so this will have to go on my back burner to finish
Why does chapter 6 have 666 views.
*phone rings*
I wonder who this is.
"Hello" began the voice, "I'm the devil."
As good as this story is so far, I have to agree with brony2008 in that this is so tiny.
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I've said it countless times before and I'll say it again. This story was meant to be a prequel and seeing as I'm a good amount into the second instalment of this trilogy, I'm going to wait until the trilogy itself is done before I go back and expand on the extremely short chapters of this. It pisses me off that I wrote them that short as much as it pisses off you guys. It will be fixed, just not now. Hell, if I don't finish the trilogy by my one year anniversary on this site, then I might extend on a few of these chapters. I'm surprised at the view count considering its shortness.
Its getting to the point were I might edit the description and put in big bold letters THIS IS A PREQUEL!
I found this story and I remembered I loved reading it before I had an account.
Instant Follow
Flame bolt I like your OC.
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thanks
Like Brony2008 said, this does seem a little fast paced and the chapters a little short.
If what you said in the last chapter's ANs then you could have put several mini chapters into one not so mini chapter.
good story, but had hope there be some nightmare rule the world for short while. with evil twilight by her side. before twilight goes back to good.
7071202 Check out the sequel, you might find it interesting. It's of higher quality than this. Don't know when i'll get around to continuing it with the crazy amount of university work I have to do.
I love these small chapters! All these dang long chapters in other stories are too dang long!
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LOLPTCD.
Eh...slow it down and it may be a great story! Detailed descriptions could make chapters longer, but like my teacher always said, "it doesn't matter how much writing there is, just make it great." 🙃