Equestria is a land of no crime, of no suffering, a land held in balance by the cosmic sisters for as far back as any historical records go. Yet when a new creature is found and brings a new kind of thinking to the land, the elements find themselves faced with one of the most dangerous creatures in existence in their very town.
Or, at least, that’s what Celestia is telling them.
(credit to Canas-Dark and Amante for editing. Any feedback is appreciated) (Picture is still in progress so I have another character from the story as the picture.)
Chapters (5)
It's good so far, wasn't expecting a re-write though.
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Personally I didn't feel that the pacing of the original was very good so I'm gonna try and be a bit more realistic in the character of Kori and the pace.
(Looked up this story on a whim)
......Why does it only have one chapter?
Anyways, it is really good. I am looking forward to more chapters being re-worked.
I also think that the changes to Kori make him feel sort of darker, that is not a bad thing though.
All in all, the re-write is an improvement.
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I'm in the process of re-writing the original (which was around 200k) so I've only got 2 chapters.
Hi!
Just posting to say that you had the fox's language in italics last chapter and it would be a good idea to continue in this and future chapters.
Had to stop reading about half way, but still very good so far.
Keep up the good work.
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I forgot to. Thanks for pointing this out to me and I will fix this as soon as I get the chance.
I do have his language in.....
Edit: fixed it
MY THIRST IS NOT QUENCHED, I HUNGER FOR MORE... MOAR I SAY
that's if you don't mind
*insert cute flutter shy face here*
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.... There really should be a cute Fluttershy pic.
Working on it
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That should work. Just can't do it on an iPod.
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so cute!
*squeals loudly*
Got bored and made a image that I actually have copywright over for the cover image.
Not quiet sure how I'm feeling about it.
Hi, just popping by to say that I had an idea that I think would be interesting.
This is not saying that you HAVE to add the idea, just something I think would be cool.
Just sitting and thinking and for some reason foxfire jumps to mind. Not like the glowy-mushroom things, but sorta like fox magic.
Then I did some research and found this page.
And I would like to say good job for your choice of name, but I just think it would be cool if there was something like the magic they are described as having in lore.
This is just an idea that I believe would be cool, if it doesn't fit with the story that is fine.
Good job so far and I hope for more updates soon.
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Thanks for the idea and for reminding me that webpage existed. 
While I have Kori's magic set as something for a reason I do have a few other foxes who will be involved in the story that would be great for that kind of stuff.
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Love the chapter like how I always do :p
I was going to add a video where a guy exclaims
"ITS BEAUTIFUL" but curse this infernal mobile
So have a moustache instead
And a new update....
Perfect.
Had to read the initial encounter with Chrysalis twice.
Purely because I didn't realize who it was until her name was said.
Because of my suggestion, I am not sure whether or not the other fox was real or not.
I had been wondering about Kori's magic, now I know.
Bleh, can't find a good meme.
I await updates
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All shall be revealed in due time.
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I should make a game of identifying references... Meh, maybe next time.
...Sure, seems good enough. However, I have a quick thing that's bugging me. How did Vinyl know that Kori was at Fluttershy's house previously?
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Where do sick animals go other than Fluttershy's place?
I think that you forgot to italic the fox language again.
Is the paragraph arrangement supposed to be like that?
I can't proses words other than poems in that format.
I just realized that I sound like I drank a red bull then got jacked up on sugar.
This is me giving feedback. I usually don't speak like this.
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Also thanks for the feedback, it really helps in keeping some extra quality in the story. 
Now how'd that happen? Fixed. Note to self, check center commands often.
I actually didn't put anything in the fox language that was translated "The italic speach from Kori" As for the paragraph format, I'll see what I didn't different from the others and fix whatever it is I did.
Edit:
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Would that happen to be his legs?
If not then what?
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Also, does he have a british/aussie accent 'cause thats all i think of when i hear him swear. ;P
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Nope, it's something that my editor and me found so think of items mentioned on him during the chapter that aren't mentioned again