The Legend of Thunder

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During a thunderstorm, Derpy comforts Dinky by telling her the story behind the legendary pony causing it.

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Batbrony

Batbrony #1 · Nov 12th, 2013 · 1 · ·

Oh, this needs more views right away! Lovely one-shot with my favorite, muffin-loving mare!!! Great work SparkBrony!!!

SparkBrony

SparkBrony #2 · Nov 12th, 2013 · 1 · ·

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Thanks! Glad you enjoyed!

The DJ Rainbow Dash

The DJ Rainbow Dash #3 · Nov 17th, 2013 · 1 · ·

I think I've read only one story that had Derpy in it before this. Not sure why really.

Anyway, the creativity and flow of this whole thing stood out for me the most. I loved how you wrote out the whole story Derpy told about Lighting and Thunder, it was original and enjoyable. I could see that maybe turning into a story of its own.

Your description usage is done well too. I especially like how with time Dinky got absorbed so much into the story, that she actually completely forgot about the thunder itself.

Overall, nice job! Definitely deserves more likes than its recieved.

DJRD

SparkBrony

SparkBrony #4 · Nov 17th, 2013 · · ·

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Glad you liked it! Thanks for the comment!

RedRaven

RedRaven #5 · Nov 29th, 2013 · · ·

The weird thing is, my ocs name is thunder, and he causes thunder when he flies...Its called a sonic ThunderBoom...

SparkBrony

SparkBrony #6 · Nov 29th, 2013 · · ·

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Wow, what a coincidence! :P

AlfieTrotter

AlfieTrotter #7 · Jan 7th, 2014 · 1 · ·

As someone who grew up with an intense fear of thunder and lightning, I can relate very strongly to Dinky's fear of the storm; the story itself was sweet and endearing, I loved Derpy's characterization and the slight mythological angle given to the Thunder Legend, well written indeed!!

Foxler

Foxler #8 · Apr 3rd, 2014 · 1 · ·

There is nothing wrong with this fic.

Everything about it, is perfect for what it is.

THIS MUST BE SEEN!

SparkBrony

SparkBrony #9 · Apr 6th, 2014 · · ·

4177903 Thank you very much!

Nitronus Prime

Nitronus Prime #10 · May 5th, 2014 · · ·

As someone who tends to take fanfics a bit too seriously and critic them harshly sometimes... How do I say this?

That... was EXTREMELY adorable. Though I do enjoy Derpy being, well, derpy; I really like it when she's portrayed more as a ditzy, silly, and caring mother for Dinky. The interactions with Derpy and Dinky were very sweet and well done. The story in the story was actually pretty interesting and unique.

The only things I can possibly complain about (and these are very minor nitpicks) are: maybe you could have not used the muffin card as much, and there were two parts I noticed with missing words. Neither of these really detracted my enjoyment of the story though, so take a like and fave.

Leo Pachino

Leo Pachino #11 · Dec 3rd, 2014 · · ·

Now this is a good story, really opened my eyes up the the possible lore of Equestria.
The relation between Derpy and Dinky as the story progressed is very strong.
I especially like the way you parallel it to the Slave era of America (or the Roman Republic, both are similar), similar to how I parallel The Legend of The Ghost Pony to the Western/Pre-Industrial Revolution era. Great minds think alike I guess.

SparkBrony