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Idiotcornball


I like girls with dicks, if you couldn't notice. Also stories that are stupid but amusing. And stupidly amusing stories involving girls with dicks. And sometimes without dicks.

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Singed #1 · Jun 4th, 2013 · · 4 ·

Potion Master? I beg to differ. :trixieshiftleft:

They would all be carcasses if they were this careless around me with chemical brews!

So in character it hurts!! :rainbowlaugh:

I suppose there's nothing left to say; I don't have anything else to do today...

Now, I'm not very capable of forcing rhymes (I can't write Zecora for shit, obviously), but try this instead:

"I suppose there's not much left to say; I have nothing else to do today."

Flows a little better and makes slightly more sense since she actually does have one more thing to say.

Otherwise, love it. Could have used some penetration, but still hot as fuck.

2673276 Yeah, I think you're right about the rhyme. I'm terrible at rhyming.

Also, the reason there's no penetration is because in the picture it's pretty obviously a handjob. Growing a dick is one thing, but having them go from actual sex and downgrading to a handjob? Willing suspension of disbelief would be shot to hell. :rainbowwild:

Pretty interesting... though I must admit, not often I read humanized Equestria fics, but had to read this one (so I didn't waste a comment, asking about something and got enough piled up in Read It Later and elsewhere :facehoof:).

Was a bit confused by some of the dialogue or actions (and maybe how old everyone is here, but it's clear it's not cub/foalcon), not to mention not being sure if like in the pic or not, they actually had balls as well or just a cock in addition to normal female human anatomy. However, I suppose I did enjoy this one, it was pretty interesting... know you probably would've said so in the description, but was this written with (or for) Bronystories? Just cause, while I haven't read much of his work, I DO know recently, he was kinda talking about wanting to do a fic from this picture and wanting to see more ZecoraBloom.

Zecora's rhyming did seem a bit stilted, but I suppose can't really fault ya, as supposedly, a lot of people do have issues with that... heck, I'll probably have some of my own when I start writing pony fics one of these days with her in it. Was kind of funny with Babs and AB's arguing between each other over who's got better goods and such, I suppose. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Applebloom_lolface.png And a little suggestive with the implications of incestuous stuff, though I'm guessing this isn't gonna turn out like that later on... and not really sure how you plan to continue it from here, since it's marked Incomplete (which I think should answer my question about if this was with/for Bronystories or not). :rainbowhuh:

Was quite a little story and the sex wasn't too bad, even if it was kinda quick, but I suppose being new to the spell/having dicks would leave them kinda premature. :twilightblush: Anyway, maybe I'll check this out for future updates. :twilightsheepish:

And one more thing, why would the going from actual sex to a handjob make for disbelief? If someone bases it off the picture itself only, rather than doing/adding anything hardcore, sex-wise. Since not sure why that happened, even if I know this was based off the pic in question in the cover and description.

2673569 Whoops, this was actually intended to be a one-shot, although the idea of a dick-growing does leave it open for further development. Haven't decided yet whether I will.

And while I am aware of Bronystories also wanting to write a story based on this picture, it wasn't written in conjunction with him or anything. I just stumbled across it and decided to throw out something short. I have a tendency to ramble, so I actually tried to keep this one from getting too long.

I'm honestly not a huge fan of incest either; this is about as close as I'll ever get to writing any. I figured that even if they're cousins they aren't that close.

Comment posted by moltendaniel deleted Jun 4th, 2013

I am reading more and more foalcon everyday, specifically, BloomxBabs. I'm beginning to question myself...

You fuckin' jack hole! Why didn't you put the "Futa" trigger warning before the link in the description?

Eh, oh well. This story was still pretty good.

2673325 Who said they couldn't go from a handjob to full-on penetration. Nopony said they only have to come once.

Acquire sexy picture.
Write shameless clop fiction story.
...Welp, just another day on FimFiction.
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*looks at picture linked* da fuq? :twilightoops:

Well, someone finally wrote a fic based on that picture. Time to read.
EDIT: Well, that was fun. Have a like.

Alright! Someone wrote it! Bronystories is going to love you, will read right now!

Phew! That was HOT! I came. Loved it! :heart:

2674730 Yeah... what's up with that, eh?

2672679

Only if they were dumb enough to chase you :trixieshiftleft:

2674655 Eh, I suppose I should note that; I forgot that most people who stumble across it on the new stories page probably won't be familiar with the rest of my work.:rainbowwild:

I love you Cornball. :pinkiehappy:

2673894

I figured that even if they're cousins they aren't that close.

Hey, that's what my cousin said as well!

All of that aside, please continue this story... Busty Babs' Bouncing Boobs have so much potential...

I don't know why but the expressions on Babs and Apple Blooms' faces made me think of this.

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Picture link is broken.

2674655 "chicks with dicks" wasn't enough of a warning for you?

Do you like incest? Do you like foalcon? LET'S HAVE BOTH!
Funny, you'd think there'd be more Babs x CMC member fics than there are.
Also, broken image is broken.

2676529 2676598 You talking about the derpibooru link? I just checked it. If it's broken, the problem must be on their end. If they don't get it straightened out I'll try to find somewhere else to link it from.

2676628 the cover pic is there more to it:unsuresweetie:

awesome as always my good man!

2676529>>2676598>>2676628>>2676704

Here you go everyone:
NSFW WARNING

2676704
Not like there is a link in the description or anything.

Oh wait.

2677380
Of all ponies... actually, I expected this from you.:duck:
Thanks Cadence.:twilightsheepish:

2677415 :ajbemused:I asked if that was the full pic or if it was cropped:ajbemused::moustache:

2677458
Meh, I couldn't tell if I had the right one because I just google searched the key words and that was the only one I could find.

2677480
I much prefer the one you posted. The whole futanari thing doesn't make any sense to me.

2677480
You know... I've seen you around before. Didn't you talk with Gamer Luna and Celestia, your aunts, before?

2677553
Yes, but I don't RP unless it's for a humorous comment.

Contains chicks with dicks.

2677609
Oh.
Well... how about Shining Armor? Isn't there an RP-er for that?

2677458 Yup, that's the picture. Derpibooru is apparently having issues today, so I added it as an alternate link.

2677380 That version is also awesome.:rainbowkiss:

2676628 I think the site is just down... Link still works

2674655
>Description says "Contains chicks with dicks."

2676586>>2678103 To be fair to derpboom, I added that to the description later; it wasn't there when it originally went up.

2678068 That's what I thought.

Well, you beat me to the punch. I'm debating whether to read this now, or finish my own version of this idea before reading yours.
:trixieshiftright:

[Adds to read later list.]

Congratulations on making the feature box. :twilightsmile:

2678747

"I probably could've made it a bit longer,"

"That's what he said." :unsuresweetie:

Pretty good! Don't worry, I'll try not to step on your coattails when I release my version. The one I'm working on will have a little more... meat to it. Your story closely followed the imagery of the picture. I'm going to stray slightly from the source material. After all, what good is having a cock if you don't get to stick it in something?

My piece of constructive criticism is that you don't have a full grasp on Zecora's speech patterns. Her lines have a fairly specific cadence to them, and they're generally written to not sound like a native English speaker. For example, her line "I did not think you'd pass this way, but you're right that it is a lovely day!" doesn't have the right number of syllables in it. You can hear it if you just read it out loud, and it also sounds too much like something an American would say. Off the cuff, try "I thought not you would pass this way, but indeed it is a lovely day." It holds the musical flow of her voice better, and has that "technically correct but not quite right" English that she usually speaks.

Also, I'm going to echo 2678945 in that your stories tend to have a lot of banter and tangents compared to the length of the actual sex. This isn't necessarily a bad thing, but when real people get horny they tend not to get derailed by etymology. Don't be afraid to get a little purple when you actually get to the dirty bits - that's why the readers are really here. Stretch things out and flex your creativity - try to remember something crazy a partner's done with you, and think "How would I one up that?" (Don't rely on porn for this; there's subtle things you won't see in porn because it doesn't translate well on camera.)

That said, I still enjoyed the read. I'm being critical because we're all aware there's not nearly enough of it on this site.

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