Chapter 12: Light the Skies
Hard azure eyes narrowed, peering past the semi- obscuring coverage of a heavy metal helm. The wearer's head darted from side to side, following the crackling flicker that shot through the skies beyond a luminous golden barrier. Each flicker was followed by a crack of lightning from another direction, bolts splashing along the shimmering surface.
Damn, this dragon was fast. Even Flash's keen eyes could barely keep up with it. Even though its body glowed with bright violet arcs of lightning it was difficult to follow. The heavy helmet covering half of his face and line of sight really did not help either.
Flash was pulled out of his frustrated thoughts by a pained groan behind him. His focus on the enemy shattered, and she was suddenly very much aware of the heavy weight of the charriot behind him, and the steady thumping of his wings, echoed by the fellow Royal Guard that hovered beside him. He grunted slightly, shifting the bar strapped to his side as he glanced over his shoulder. Sitting steadfast in the gilded chariot they flew was the tall, imposing figure of Princess Celestia. Her long horn lit with golden light, and her wings splayed wide behind her. The powerful appendages seemed to almost glow themselves in the light of her magic. However, her face did not mirror the majesty her posture would make one expect. Her brow was furrowed in exertion, lavender eyes leering beyond her veil as ragged gasps puffed from her muzzle. When a particularly loud and powerful bolt struck the barrier, her breath hitched in a sharp gasp.
The very sight of their ruler in such a state brought a low spark of anger deep in the back of Flash's mind.
Celestia's eyes clenched shut as she hissed out, ''Flash Sentry. Swift Seraphic.''
The guards' ears perked as they both looked to the princess, her eyes slowly opening. A splintering crack rang out as fractures began to spiderweb across the field around them. ''I can't hold this for much longer. It has taken all of my strength just to defend up from these attacks.'' She winced as another flurry of bolts struck one after another. ''When the Violet Dragon breaks through, it will be time for the two of you to act. Swift, I want you to protect me in my vulnerable state.''
The ivory guard beside Flash nodded, ''Yes, Princess.''
"And Flash Sentry..."
"Yes, Your Majesty?" Flash answered.
"You are officially relieved of your duties in my personal detail. As one of my chosen warriors, you are to engage the enemy at your discretion," Celestia commanded.
Flash gulped audibly, a pit forming in his stomach. Fight a dragon that was about to break through a barrier forged by Celestia herself? Could he really do something like that? "But Princess," he objected, "How can I fight against a Lord and a Dragoon?! I knew it would be difficult when you said I would be fighting the White-Silver Dragon to become its Dragoon, but I won't stand a chance out there as I am now!"
Still working hard to keep the spell going, Celestia shook her head. Pointing a hoof down to the ground far below, she directed Flash's gaze down to see a large plume of dust rising from the ground. Several magenta flashes strobed within, followed by a small dot of purple that was sent flipping out. Straining his eyes, Flash recognized the blur as none other than Princess Twilight, and as she skidded to a stop in the grass, he spotted the faint gleam of Casts on her hooves. She was fighting... amazingly. He knew alicorns were strong, but he hadn't expected to see the Princess fighting like this.
As he watched on, somewhat slack-jawwed, Celestia explained, "I know my student well, and the last thing I ever wanted to do was force this battle on her. I told her and everypony else that I was selecting a candidate for the White-Silver Dragoon, but the truth is that I expected her to try to take that role for herself." Eyes wide, Flash turned his gaze back to Celestia. Confusion was evident on his face as she continued, "I had my reasons for picking you, Flash, and I want you to protect Princess Twilight and her friends to the best of your ability. This is the duty I entrust to you. The one I had planned for when I took you back from the Crystal Empire."
Flash was undeniably concerned. Did he really have what it took to fulfill Celestia's expectations of him? He didn't have any time to think about it, as a violent sound of shattering glass filled his ears. The shield broke apart as an enormous triad of bolts struck from above, piercing the defence under their combined might. It was then that Flash felt a presence note above him. His eyes shot up to see Celestia's powerful frame flung over them. Her entire body was glowing with her golden aura.
The lightning fell in a split second, colliding with the light and igniting in an explosion. Flash clenched his eyes shut, expecting to feel the force of the blast strike him, but nothing came. He only felt the rush of wind and smoke around him, his lungs starting to burn with every breath. He also felt much lighter, as the explosion ripped apart the charriot he and Swift had been carrying, yet when he opened his eyes he saw the two of them were unharmed. How shameful. He was a Royal Guard. He was supposed to protect the Princess, not the other way around.
His heart sank even further when a ripple of the smoke moved between him and the ivory pegasus, giving way to the falling form of the Princess. A spark of anger coursed through him, and his gaze met Swift's across from him. The two of them shared a nod of understanding, and Flash felt his doubts fading away, replaced by absolute resolve. He didn't have time to doubt himself when his very destiny was being challenged. He was a protector. A guardian of others. He had sworn to defend others for all his life, and that was what he would do. Even if it cost him his life!
The two pegasi moved in unison, shooting downward with a single beat of their wings. They plummeted out of the cloud of smoke just in time to see the small lightning dragon come up on the falling Celestia, charging a spell in its sparking claws. That spark of anger in Flash grew stronger. There was no way he was going to let this happen right in front of him. It was time to make good on the name his parents gave him.
Bringing all of his focus to bare on Celestia and the dragon, he thought of nothing but his duty, his very nature. He would catch up with them!
He accelerated faster, and faster still. He could feel the strain on his body as he approached his top speed at a rate that he hadn't pushed himself to in a long time. He caught up in an instant, flying right between the princess and the dragon.
He would protect her. He would protect everypony!
He could see the startled expression on the dragoness' face at the intrusion, then the anger that replaced it.
She hissed and thrust a claw forward, releasing a blast of lightning. Instinct took complete control of Flash as he thrust a hoof in front of the bolt. He called forth the Carts that Celestia have him, the domed, egg-shell shape wrapping around the front of his hoof and traveling up his forearms to cover nearly the entire length. The lightning splashed off of the silvery surface of his trusted barrier cestus and coursed through his body. It stung all over, and his whole body tingled, but he could feel the power coursing through every part of his body. It felt different, stronger than natural lightning, but he would make it work. He HAD to make it work!
He had to be quite fortunate to be facing the Lord of Lightning, out of any he could have faced.
In less than the span of a second, he felt a familiar snapping feeling inside of him, and with a single flap of his wings, he had moved himself right in, almost nose to nose with the Violet Dragon.
"What the-"
Before she could react, he reared his forehoof back. The same violet sparks danced along the smooth surface of his cestus before he smashed it forward. He felt the weapon crush into the chest of the diminutive opponent, and focused as hard as he could in that instant. A shockwave formed as he discharged a large portion of the power he had absorbed. A loud burst rang out and the dragon was sent plummeting straight into the earth far below with a violent crash, sparks flickering out of the small crater.
He heard the rush of air behind him as Swift moved as he was ordered, catching and protecting Celestia. Swift had that duty, and Flash had his. Dispersing his Casts to the innactive state, he bit and pulled at the straps of his armor, then grabbed the plated and threw them aside. Armor was important, but his opponent was fast, and he needed all the freedom he could get to keep up with her. His Casts would have to be his armor. The last piece coming off, he tossed aside his helm and flew in closer to the impact zone he'd sent the Violet Dragon into. He watched as the small dragon pulled herself out, clutching her chest and giving him a venemous glare through pained wincing.
“Who in the name of Soa are you?!” she coughed, zapping back up into the air.
He answered by lifting his forehooves up, activating his barrier cestus Casts in twin flashes of light. “Dragoon Candidate, Flash Sentry,” he declared, raising his hooves to guard himself. “And I won’t let you get away with attacking two of our beloved princesses, you scum!”
"Dragoon Candidate, huh?" the electric dragoness spat. "Don't get cocky just because you caught me by surprise and got a lucky hit!" In an admittedly intimidating display, she clenched her claws and flared her tiny wings, electricity shooting from the wing tips and freezing for a second in the shape of much larger, more powerful wings. The boasting dragon cackled, "Well, Flash Sentry, I am Surge, the Lord of Lightning! Don't think the same thing will happen again! I have enough power to fry you to a crisp a thousand times over! Be sure to remember my name when I send you to the next world!"
Flash readied his guard as Surge swept her tiny wings back, but felt his blood run cold as her gaze fell away from him, looking at the earth behind him. "Better yet, I'll send Celestia first!" she roared, rushing down and zipping only inches off of the ground. Lightning trailed behind her as she moved at a breakneck pace.
"No!" Flash screamed, wings flaring wide and snapping down with an accompanying spark of lightning.
Channeling every last remaining bit of the power he had taken into his wings, he reached his top speed in less than a second. Surge didn't even see him coming as he crashed his Cast down onto her from above, cracking and upheaving the earth as he smacked her down into the dirt again. He ground the smooth, bashing surface of his weapon into her back as his own momentum pressed down on her. She had to feel that one. Even his muscles and joints were screaming in protest at the sudden halt.
He must not have done as much damage as he thought though, as before he could pull himself up, a huge current of electric force raced through his Cast and into his body. Such overwhelming power! It was all Flash could do to keep it contained in him and pour it into his wings as he flapped once more, shooting into the sky with excess lightning crackling painfully along his body.
He couldn't let himself show that he was in pain though. The charge he could hold wasn't limitless, especially with Surge's lightning, which was more powerful and volatile than any he had felt before. He had to keep in control and make it seem like he had the advantage.
Surge shot up from the crater in a streak of violet, leveling off in front of him. The leering intensity in her eyes was frightening, even with the faint trickle of blood falling from the corner of her mouth. Flash's body wanted to shake in fear and pain, but he kept steady with every ounce of willpower he possessed. Instead, he forced a cocky grin across his muzzle.
"Nice try there, Surge, but thanks for the charge. It'll be fun using your own magic against you," he taunted. To demonstrate, he smashed the ends of his weapons together, releasing arcs of Surge's own power from one to the other.
He had pushed too far. An unmistakable twitch and pained wince came out as the painful sparks danced across his body.
A sadistic smirk replaced Surge's glare, "Oh? You sure surprised me, pony, I didn't think there was anyone in the world that could absorb my lightning and use it for themselves. I'll give you that much. You may actually be a fun opponent, but I can see that it's hurting you. You can't absorb as much power as I can put out, and it's tearing you apart already just trying!"
Not good. He was found out. Flash really hoped that Swift was taking Celestia far out of sight right now. He didn't dare take his eyes from his enemy, lest he give her an opening to strike. Without his armor he was able to use his speed freely, but all it would take was one clean hit to cut him wide open. Thankfully, Surge seemed pretty cautious now too, and wasn't taking her eyes from him either. They stayed like that for a long while, hovering in place with light flaps of their wings as the sounds of other battles raged in the background.
In fact, one of the battles sounded close. Really close. Right on top of-
"Whoa!" Flash shouted, barely skirting to the side as a gleam of deep green shot past him from behind.
The new arrival barrelled through the sky and was narrowly avoided by Surge before it came to a stop. Broad, powerful wings, the likes of which he had never seen, were spread wide and glowed with an ethereal teal light. The spherical orange gem set in the breastplate of the armor glinted in the faint traces of overcast morning light. As the figure righted itself, he saw it was a female griffon warrior wearing the Dragoon armor of the Jade Dragon. If he recalled what he had been told correctly, Jade's specialty was wind magic, not a good match-up for a pegasus. The pony fighting her had to be very good to be giving her such an evidently hard time.
Said warrior arrived only a moment later, a rush of jettream nearly knocking Flash out of the sky as a pegasus mare with a bright cyan coat and a prismatic rainbow for a mane and tail stopped beside him. Along with a set of triangular Cast blades, she was wearing a strange shimmering cyan outfit that didn't have a single scratch on it, despite the small lacerations that covered every exposed part of her. The last thing he noticed was a faint rainbow glow that surrounded her, but began to fade away quickly.
He had seen this mare before, when he had been in the Crystal Empire as part of Cadance's guard. She was Rainbow Dash, the Element of Loyalty and one of Princess Twilight's friends.
He didn't have time to be starstruck, even if he, and just about any guard he knew were ecstatic at the chance to see one of the famous ponies. Guards were strained to remain composed at all times.
"Nice flying there, buddy," the mare chuckled, glancing over at him. "I don't know what you did, but you've gotta teach me how to do that someday."
How could a day be so simultaneously horrible and amazing? On one hoof: griffons were attacking Equestria; Celestia was injured; and he was fighting for his life and that of countless others against a freaking dragon! On the other; he had never felt so exhilarated in his life; he was fighting harder than he ever had, and all for the sake of others, what he was born to do; and he was now fighting alongside an Element of Harmony, one of the most important ponies in the world!
He reprimanded himself in the back of his head. He had to focus. "We can discuss that after we drive them out of our home," he answered back. He certainly wasn't trying to act cool or anything, but if he did by accident, he certainly wasn't going to complain.
"You two should just give up now!" Surge growled. "No one can be match us one on one! It took an entire squadron of griffons to take me down and claim my Spirit!" Lightning danced along her barbs and blades as her body trembled. The snarl on her face only grew more vicious as she gathered a large amount of power and prepared to lunge forward.
Flash felt his wings stiffen, crackling with lightning, and his hooves raised instinctively.
dddyyyyyy
Before Surge could launch herself forward, her path was obstructed by the Jade Dragoon's battle scythe. The look of venomous frustration she shot to the griffon was downright terrifying. "Don't get in my way, Gilda! Princess or not, I will rip out your-!"
"Shut up and listen!"
Surge, and even Flash and Rainbow froze in shock and did just that. They listened through the roiling storm around them and heard a long, growing noise.
nnnaaaaaaammmiiiiiiiicc!
Gilda's eyes snapped wide open, and her wings swept down in an attempt to move. Before she could budge an inch, a rush of pink hurtled in from her side. A hard hind hoof struck her full in the side, followed by a jubilant scream of, "ENTRYYY!"
The happy shout was followed by one of pain. The unfolding scene was borderline comical as a rather goofily posed pink mare with a poofy mane and tail in a dancer's dress high-kicked Gilda in a total blindside. Gilda was sent screaming in pain into an equally surprised Surge, knocking them down a long ways to the ground far below before they caught themselves.
"Woo! That was fun!" the mare he recognized as another Element, Pinkie Pie, shouted. The energetic mare bounced and weaved through the air, accompanied by a rhythmic thumping sound. A closer look revealed that the Casts Pinkie wore had a rod running along them that spun rapidly, keeping the earth pony airborne.
"How the hay-"
"It's Pinkie Pie," Rainbow Dash stated simply. "Better to give up on making sense of her. Smarter ponies have tried and failed miserably."
Despite the seeming seriousness of her tone, Flash could see a smirk spreading across her face as they watched the flambouyant pony weave through the air. The feeling was surprisingly infectious, and Flash soon felt a smile spread across his face, even as Gilda and Surge charged at Pinkie from below. She seemed blissfully unaware of the incoming enemies, and Flash was about to move to help her, but it was his turn to be stopped as Rainbow held a blade in front of him.
Surge rocketed ahead in a streak of electricity, reaching Pinkie before Flash could object to being held at bay. Wrist blades raked through nothing but thin air as with a deft flip, Pinkie evaded. A moment later, a flourish of green shot up, and Gilda swept her scythe in a deadly arc. Again, Pinkie merely twirled to the side, narrowly avoiding the razor edge. Most stunning of all to Flash was that she dodged every blow with her eyes shut tight! Despite himself, Flash could still feel his smile getting wider, and the trembling in his overcharged limbs started to lessen.
The griffon and dragon stopped high above and glared down at the seemingly blissfully unaware Pinkie Pie as she opened her eyes once more. With a joyful grin that seemed out of place in the middle of a battle, she stopped her aerial dance and waved up at the two of them. "Hiya there, grumpy Gilda! Nice to see you again! Though you really shouldn't be going around making my friends all pouty and sad when you stop by. You should try being nice and making ponies smile, like me!" Pinkie jabbered casually.
"So this is the pink one, Gilda?" Surge hissed through clenched teeth. "I can see why she pisses you off so much."
Pinkie tilted her head to the side a bit, her smile softening a bit. "Aww, I just wanted to make Dash's friend more welcome. I didn't want to upset her," she answered, absently tilting her body to the side just in time for a bolt of lightning that singed an end from her curly mane. Flash tried to fly forward to put himself between Pinkie and the attacks, every instinct screaming for him to protect, but still Rainbow held him back.
"Grahhh! Why can't I hit you?! I should be stronger than this!" Surge screamed, her entire body sparking violently.
"By the way, Gilda," Pinkie cheered, "congrats on becoming a Dragoon! You armor and wings and magic are sooo cool! I want some too! Pretty please?"
A sneer passed over Gilda's beak as she and Surge flew higher and farther back. Their bright colors stood out as they silhouette of the griffon battleship loomed behind them. "You want some magic? Fine! We'll give you some!" she shouted down from above. An enormous feeling of dense magic gathering suddenly swept through the air as three swirling bands of glowing green light circled around Gilda. Within each band were dozens of luminous runes that orbitted her faster and faster as the magic in the air grew denser and denser. It wasn't just gathering from all around, it was also flowing in excess from the Jade Dragoon's body.
Floating alongside her, Surge's body was surrounded by deep violet bands of the same runic light. The magic was almost suffocating, and Flash felt his already labored breathing becoming heavier. Whatever Gilda and Surge were preparing, it was big. So why was Rainbow Dash still holding him back from helping?
"Huh?" Pinkie merely blinked at the the enemy. "Oh! Silly-willy Gilda, I wasn't asking you!" she giggled.
"What?" Gilda's brow twitched.
As she hovered in place with her whirligig tonfas, Pinkie took an odd stance, holding one hoof pointed behind and below her, and letting the spinning weapon come to a halt. Her other hoof she held at an angle in front of her, keeping her afloat. When she was positioned, she shouted loud enough to give Princess Luna a run for her bits, "Gummy! Can I be a Dragoon? Pretty please?"
A loud roar shook the skies in answer, and a huge gout of water shot from the earth below, striking right into Pinkie from behind, and right into her waiting hoof. The stream consumed her completely, but didn't do anything as it merely receded, leaving Pinkie dripping and sopping wet. Another roar followed immediately after, and Pinkie giggled, "Oh Gummy, you're such a silly dragon. Of course I can beat them, with Flashy and Dashy at my side!"
Huh. When had Pinkie ever learned his name? Flash looked to Rainbow, hovering beside him, and saw an equal level of complete confusion on her face.
"Why-" he opened his mouth to say.
"What did I tell you?" Rainbow interrupted his question with a deadpan stare.
"Umm... Don't question Pinkie Pie?"
"Good boy," she beamed, patting his mane with the flat of her blade.
Flash grumbled for a moment before protesting, "Well then why aren't we helping her? You can feel how strong those spells will be!"
A mysterious smile spread across Rainbow's muzzle. "Yeah, each one is almost as powerful as a blast from the Elements of Harmony."
What?! How were they supposed to beat enemies that could put out that kind of power?
"I don't know what you thought you were going to accomplish, Pinkie," Gilda shouted down from above. She began spinning her scythe in front of her rapidly, bringing the winds around her into a dense mass. Grasping her weapon in both armored claws, she raised the weapon over head. The rings of magic surrounding her and Surge vanished in unison, and the dragon hollowed suit by raising a clenched claw, the entire bladed appendage shining with countless arcs of lightning.
"It doesn't matter anyway, because now you die!" Surge cackled. She opened her claw with a flash of dispersing energy and screamed, "Thunder Kid!"
"Gaspless!" Gilda acted right after, swinging her scythe down to cut through the dense mass of winds, sending a trail of magic at an angle down just below Pinkie Pie. As a tornado began to form rise from the point the magic stopped, dozens of little lightning sparks began to rise around Pinkie. She was stuck in the center of two spells without any way out.
Flash could only blink in utter confusion and soul tearing frustration. He hated not doing anything to protect others, and more than that he hated being prevented from doing so. Pointing his Casted hoof at the mare in imminent peril, he shouted, "That's your friend over there! She's going to die!"
Rainbow Dash's smile only grew wider as the tornado enveloped her friend. Winds harsh enough to tear through flesh and bone had to be battering Pinkie from all sides, but still Rainbow didn't so much as budge.
"You're completely right, Flash. And you also couldn't be more wrong," Dash said, a smug look on her face. "I trust Pinkie. She's one of the best friends I've ever had."
The rising sparks of lightning flashed brightly, and one after another began firing bolt after powerful colt into the tornado. A growing violet ball of electricity built up, being the obscuring winds as they began to contract and pull together, forming a steadily smaller sphere of gale force death.
"She's totally ridiculous. You'll never find a more confusing mare in all of Equestria, all just to make her friends smile. But she's not as ditzy and airheaded as she seems," she continued. "I trust that she knows what she is doing, because she'd never do anything to make her friends sad. She'd sooner make the impossible real than lose a smile."
Flash watched in a mixture of frustration, horror, and awe as the sparks gathered above the sphere of winds, the electric glow in the center at its brightest. High above, Gilda swung her scythe back, the blade overlapped by an enormous blade of pure wind magic. Beside her, Surge slowly clenched her claws back together. The spells, cast in unison, then ended the same way. Surge snapped her claw shut, sending an enormous bolt crashing down from above. Gilda swung her scythe, releasing the enormous crescent blade of winds down, cleaving the sphere wide open.
The wind magic shattered apart violently in the same instant that the huge bolt struck the nucleus of the sphere. The resulting flash of light, deafening explosion, and rush of wind from the dual spell pushed the two pegasi back with the intense force released. Flash didn't know how anypony could survive something like that, even with Dash's reassurance. Heck, despite her own words, even she looked a bit worried as she strained to see through the smoke.
The rushing winds cleared the view quickly, and every fighter saw what remained at the center. A large crystal. Or rather, when Flash felt a shuddering of cold air on the tail end of the winds, he realized he was looking at a giant, diamond shaped piece of ice. And in that frozen container was Pinkie Pie, eyes closed, and holding an icey blue crystal sphere in her hooves, clasped tightly to her torso.
Flash blinked once. Twice. Thrice in bewilderment. Then one last time as the seafoam color of the gem washed across the light dress Pinkie wore, replacing the dark pink shade it once had.
Pinkie opened her eyes and looked up to Gilda and Surge, an excited intensity behind her gaze that replaced the simple cheer she had before. A broad smile spread across her muzzle as she called out, her voice traveling as though the ice wasn't even there, "You've attacked Ponyville just to get at Spike. You've hurt my friends. Made them frown. Made others cry."
Gilda and Surge inched backwards, unable to grasp how their spells could have been stopped, until they saw the crystal she held.
"The Blue-Sea Dragoon Spirit?!" Gilda growled. "When did she-"
"Now it's my turn, Gildy-Gilda!" Pinkie shouted. Flinging her hooves out to her sides, blue light exploding from from the Dragoon Spirit, forcing large cracks to spiderweb across the surface of the ice. "Haaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!"
Flash squinted against the blinding light refracting from the frozen prism. He muttered, dumbstruck, "Did she just become a Dragoon by asking pretty ple- oww!"
Rainbow's elbow made painful contact with his ribs as she chuckled, "I told ya, she doesn't make any sense, but the last thing she was going to do was let something like that kill her. The Dragoon Spirit is a surprise though."
"No kidding," Flash agreed.
A loud crack followed his statement as the ice burst outward with another bright flash of magic. Wings wrapped tightly around her, she let out one last shout as the majestic, magical pinions stretched wide. She spun in place before facing Gilda and Surge in a battle posture. Her full transformation was on display as bits of shattered ice fell gently around her like winter snow.
Her new form was as simultaneously terrifying and beautiful as Gilda's. From the powerful wings that seemed to be part of the very armor itself, to the flowing lines and markings that flowed across the light blue plates, guiding Flash's eyes to the green gemstone set in the center of the breastplate. Her Casts had also changed a bit too, the once blunt, metallic tonfa bars running along the sides of her hooves were now flat, razor sharp ice blades that led to pointed tips. But perhaps the most frightening was Pinkie herself. That look of excitement in her eyes had grown to the point that her blue eyes were practically glowing with what Flash could only call a battle fever. Her grin was wide and filled with mirth, as though this battle were the most exciting thing in the world to her.
"Sorry Gilda, but I'm gonna have to beat you down and send you back to Griffonaria!" Pinkie hollered. Turning to look at the two pegasi, she giggled, "You with me, Dashy?"
Flash could see the same energetic grin spreading across Rainbow Dash's face. She nodded and flitted over to Pinkie's side, holding up and crossing her own blades in front of her. "You bet I am, Pinkie. Let's show them that he they mess with Equestria, they have to deal with us!"
Their optimism was infectious, and Flash was starting to really believe they could do this! With a Dragoon on their side now, they could win! There was no way he was going to just stand by either.
"You with us, Flash?" Rainbow called out.
These mares were really something else, weren't they? Then again, it only made sense that the Elements of Harmony would be some of the bravest, strongest ponies he had ever seen. They were supposed to be the most exceptional ponies in the world, after all. Even if he was out of his league though, he was going to fight. It was his mission, it was his nature, and for some reason right now he felt like he could do anything!
"Yeah! My barrier cestus and I are at your service!" he shouted back. A zap from his wings brought him over to Pinkie's opposite side, letting the energy he still held crackle along his body painfully. It didn't matter how much it hurt, he would use this power.
"One Dragoon won't make any difference!" Gilda jeered as she lowered into a ready stance.
"We'll kill you all, take the Spirits, and dump your bodies at Celestia's hooves before we take her life as well!" Surge added, doing the same.
The three glowing runic rings of a spell formed around Pinkie, spinning rapidly. She lifted a hoof straight up and started to shake uncontrollably. "Hahaha! Good luck trying! In five minutes it will all be over!"
Only five minutes? Such confidence was certainly admirable, but also confusing. And what was with the shaking?
Dash seemed a lot less confused. A knowing grin spread across her face as the spell built to a climax. "A doozey, huh?"
"Doozey?" Flash echoed.
Rather than answer, the rings around Pinkie dispersed into the air. Twirling her hoof over her head, a dozen huge chunks of ice started orbiting her, launching at Gilda and Surge with a thrust of her hoof and a shout, "Freezing Ring!"
Like the fall of the starting flag in a race, the release of the spell signalled the beginning of the most intense battle of Flash's life. Not that he had a lot to compare to. He knew he was a good fighter, but since Equestria hadn't been to war in centuries, he had never fought to the death. Sparring matches, training in the Guard, and childhood scraps were the extent of his fighting experience. And nothing... nothing compared to this battle... this fight.
The two groups rushed each other in the dark skies, Flash pulling ahead in a streak of lightning. His burst of speed was matched by Surge, who shattered and cut through Pinkie's icey magic, but not without her arms and blades being gloss over by a painful sheen of chilly ether. A loud boom followed shortly after, and Rainbow Dash shot ahead in the blink of an eye, leaving behind the spectral contrails of her Sonic Rainboom.
The clash was fast and furious. Everything happened one instant after the other as when Dash would slash, Surge would dodge. Surge would move in, brandishing her claws, only for Flash to block it and take another painful charge into himself. A wide-sweeping scythe would descend on the pegasi from above, only for it to be knocked aside by a whirling tonfa blade, the other striking her back against her armored side.
At any point Flash couldn't begin to say how much time had passed. He heard only the violent clamor of combat in his ears, saw only blurs of color and flashes of magic spells as they moved to and fro under the dense canopy of storm clouds. His only thoughts were to dodge, punch, block, and weave his way between and around ally and enemy alike. Whenever the enemy was about to strike down Pinkie or Dash, he was right there in a burst of lightning, his trusted shields meeting claw and blade. In turn, when he was in trouble, one the mares would protect him from what could have been fatal blows.
It wasn't all perfect though. Cuts and gashes accumulated across his body. First one across his side, then two across his hind legs, more and more built up. The only one making any clean hits on their side was Pinkie Pie, but between Gilda's Dragoon armor and Surge's scales, not much headway was being made.
Was all of their confidence for nothing? Even as he fought with everything he had, with every shot of electricity he felt ripple through his body, and every blow that smashed into his defences, he felt the pain and fatigue grow steadily greater. Rainbow seemed to be faring no better, her wounds steadily catching up with her. The one that was holding up best was Pinkie. Her energy seemed limitless, and at times he felt her fighting spirit was the only things keeping him going, like some post of push between his wings. It told him that he couldn't stop.
Those five minutes felt like an eternity, but Pinkie's prediction rang true. Just before the moment came, the pink mare rammed headlong into Gilda and Surge, knocking them back with a hard buck and soaring up high. Stopping just below the dark clouds, she raised hooves glowing with azure light up to them. The clouds were gone. Just like that, they disappeared. Though the sky above seemed to be oddly wavy and shimmering.
And suddenly very wet too.
A huge wave of water crashed down on them all, drenching them to the bone.
Pinkie shouted, "Light'em up, Twilight!"
Princess Twilight?
The fight was brought to an abrupt halt as a brilliant spire of white light shot up from the ground near the library. The luminous tower faded with the beating of large, powerful wings, giving way to Spike, fangs bared and eyes glowing with white light. Astride his glittering frame, standing on his back on her hind hooves was Princess Twilight, wearing opal white Dragoon armor. Her own wings unfurled, her eyes eclipsed with the same white light as Spike's.
"Only one pony has ever been a Pinkie Sense doozey," Rainbow Dash laughed. "I knew she could do it. These guys are gonna be sorry now."
"Damn it!" Gilda cursed. "Those bastards couldn't even kill a pathetic pony princ-" A glowing white arrow struck her in the breastplate, shattering on impact. The attack sent the griffon reeling back with a pained screech. The origin was Twilight, her Cast expanded into an elegant arch of light, forming a bow which already had another arrow at the ready.
"Damn it, we failed," Surge spat. "His Majesty will not be happy with this."
Holding the arrow drawn back and ready to fire, Twilight's voice reverberated through the air as she shouted in what was unmistakably the Royal Canterlot Voice, "I am Princess Twilight Sparkle, the White-Silver Dragoon! Princess Gilda, I demand that you take your warriors and leave our lands! If you don't... I will destroy every last one of you!"
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I was trying to come up with someway to describe how I felt about this chapter but I couldn't be gin to describe the levels of awesome I feel.
And now the tables have turned! All thanks to Pinkie Pie, the handsome devil of Ponyville!
This seemed fitting for Flash's resolve/intro to the battle
3556757 Then you sir are a milestone comment for me. One of my many milestones as writer has been giving feelings of overwhelming awesome to a reader, and you are the first to have shown me that I succeeded. Plenty of 'dis gonna be good' equivalents, but no unspeakable awesomes.
May I ask what your favorite part/s is/are?
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If you couldn't tell I channelled as much Hotblooded Pinkie as I dared once my Pinkie went Dragoon.
And any story with a fighting powerhouse Pinkie that doesn't do a dynamic entry is just wasting potential, in my opinion.
3556833 Oh, and I was very tempted to have Surge say "What's a Nameck?" At that point, but I refrained.
3556834 I'd have to say it's a tie between Pinkie asking Gummy for the dragon spirit nicely or Flash's reaction to Pinkie's Pinkie Pie-ness
3557184.
Good. Good. Most excellent.I hope I have struck a nice balance between Canon Pinkie and the Hotblooded variety. I don't want to go full hotblood. It just wouldn't fit her in this story, but she definitely has some of it in her.
... and she may have a hidden anime stash.
Well now, this was just plain awesome in a can. Lots of awesome stuff happening this chapter. I was waiting for this for the longest time and it was worth every second of waiting. Seriously, I love this fic, and it'll always get an upvote from me! Great job Drac! Keep it up, FOR GREAT JUSTICE.
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Glad to hear it, buddy. I was a little worried at one point that the fight may get boring, but I guess I was imagining it.
Holy jesus this is getting intense.
Great chapter! Kind of interested to see how Twilight did that, despite the ascension being off camera..maybe go back to that when the conflict is over?
Also..I believe it's spelled "doozy", not "doozey", same with "icy", not "icey"
He called forth the Carts that Celestia have him
Bolt after colt
And one or two other small mistakes like that were in this chapter. Keep up the good work, and at least Flash seems to be trying to redeem himself.
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like some post of push between his wings
I have no idea what in the nine rings of Hell that sentence means.
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'post' was supposed to be 'sort'
I wrote this entire chapter on a flip phone and texted it to my email for copy-pasting over to gdocs. I'm honestly impressed there weren't more errors.
3569732 I know the feel. I just downloaded a swipe based keyboard for my Nook, and it takes every third word or so and completely changes it. I once wrote "Alike sighted as he sassy bank in his chapter" instead of "Spike sighed as he sat back in his chair." I'm still getting used to swiping on such a big screen.
I just wanted to say that this really is a phenomenal story. There aren't nearly enough good TLoD fics out there, let alone pony crossover fics. You truly are blazing a new trail, and having a grand old time of telling an amzing story while doing so. I offer you all the support and encouragement in the world in continuing this story to its conclusion. In the meantime, please allow me to replay the original game for old times sake... For what will now be the tenth time. :P In all seriousness though, you truly have created a work of art. I wish you luck in bringing it to completion.
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Thank you kindly for the sincere vote of confidence. It just kicks my drive to write even harder when I hear such kind words. Heck, the constructive criticism does the same thing.
This really is my pride and joy story right now, with the most thought and effort put into it. I will keep plugging at it (though my inspiration, fickle as it is, may flitter over to my other stories at times) and I will make it the grand epic that it deserves to be.
3637092 Yeah, I know how that goes. I've been working hard at a story of my own for quite a while now, but between school and personal drama that never seems to end, I feel as though I never enough time or energy to write nearly as much as I should. And when I get a bad case of Writer's Block... It ain't pretty, how little I manage to get done. Either way, we should both keep working hard at our respective stories. Heck, maybe the two of us could do a collaborative piece one of these days.
We could make all the references. All of them. 
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A Gem Hunter's Emerald
The following review is brought to you be Zero Punctuation Reviews.
"Dragoon Wars; Seven Lords Rising" is a tale with too long a title that's a crossover with some manga creature that I've never heard of. This review is something of an occasion for it marks my first official review of 2014, the end to my two (three?) month long vegetative absence, the first 'crossover' fanfic that I have ever read AND its my tenth review. Double digits, motherfuckers. So, after half-heartedly reading the Legend of Dragoon video game wikipedia page and declaring myself a connoisseur of the universe and all its etchings, I dived right into this overly-titled titillating tale of terror and triumph. Check out that alliteration, I've still got it!
The story begins as you'd think it might: there's this big, unknown evil that's been hibernating in a big, unknown storing-ancient-evil facility and all the bad guys gather to release it because what else are the bad guys going to do? Open an overly priced lemonade stand? Anyhow, as ancient evil is all released and shit, we cut to Twilight Sparkle being totally fine before becoming not so totally fine, then the cast is gathered and it turns out Princess Celestia knew all about the recently un-hibernating unknown evil and dealt with that evil thousands of years ago before sealing it away but now can't do anything about it now because of reasons so now its Twilight's problem and everyone starts talking in very long run-on sentences. Such a premise seems par for the course in these "adventure" stories, and Mr. Cliche is a hazardous guest to invite to your wonderful story-telling party.
I jest, my true criticism is thus: The opening all just kinda happens with off putting haste, as though it was thrust out as an easy cornerstone to get to the whole plot part of the story-cross-over dragon thing moving. The tracks for this grand story train were laid down a bit too quickly, I think. The opening didn't so much draw me in as slap me about and push me into exposition. The exposition wasn't handled that poorly, mind, but I feel it came at me rather fast. Of course, such a move could be utilized to discombobulate the mind of the reader, making them feel the rush of action taking over the characters and understand how overwhelmed they are before pulling on the choke chain and allowing things to settle down and be immersed in context.
Yet "Dragoon Wars; Unnecessary Subtitle" has no such pacing. After being smacked in the head with the giant inflatable whack-a-critic hammer of the story's opening, I was too quickly shoved into a world of character action, subplots, sacrifices and a lot of dialogue without any context or understanding. Characters just started to do stuff with such unbearable haste that I couldn't keep up, it was like watching Hamlet after all the actors have taken speed, drank 3 liters of Mountain Dew apiece and began speaking in long run-on sentences.
I'm being hyperbolic, of course, but I feel like "Dragoon Wars; Lots o' Shit Happening" was so excited to be running thru its plot and locales that it forgot that I was there and now I'm feeling alone and left out like a sad kid on a swing looking down at his feet. Characters should drive the plot, and while it's nice for characters to make actual decisions that affect the plot, it feels more like the overall story is happening at them rather than been subtly crafted around them by the active choices of the cast.
Two of the characters are interesting and well-rounded, more on them later, but most of the folks being swung about this particular plot - returning or otherwise - feel like their close to being actual characters but are just not quite there yet. Pinkie Pie was particularly off putting for me. I get she's the happy one, but do you really need to have her bouncing around all excited while everyone's preparing for a fucking war like the only things she ever ingests are pixie sticks, soda pop and cocaine!? The cast - exceptions noted - all lack the subtle personality quirks and self-awareness that really give them the illusion of autonomy. They all feel like slaves to the narrative because that illusion has been beaten, broken and is currently sobbing on the floor in the fetal position, you monster!
On to that exception! One thing the story actually pulls off quite nicely, if you'll excuse my sojourn into happy-fun-sunshine-smiley town, is Twilight and Spike's arc. I actually felt myself becoming invested in them as characters, and suddenly all the shit they were doing was filled with context and emotion - I cared. The circumstances they find themselves in and the active choices they make fuel them as characters and make the plot unfolding around them stand up tall with the big, flexing arm muscles of interest and agency, as opposed to the antics of the other characters that are about as stern and interesting as my flaccid, impotent cock. The story is above average overall and really has some neat ideas in its head and a few very interesting moments, it just piddles about in piss-drinking, pipe-clogging puddles of pointlessness for… ptoo plong (Still got it!). Its like for every chapter where neat, well thought out shit happens, the story has to take a chapter and a half to slap you in the face and call you a fag.
But do you want to know what really boggles my bonkers? Despite the earlier tangent on the story's frantic pace, it still takes too long to get going! Despite being titled "Dragoon Wars; When do the Fucking 'Dragon' and 'Wars' Parts Start?" it takes 8 mind-boggling chapters for a dragon to show up. Jesus, what's the sleeping evil been doing this whole time - stretching and warming up? An its not like the plot is doing anything really noteworthy in those 8 chapters, besides the well-thought out and neat Twilight-Spike-Armor segments. Its like for everything Crystalis McCloud does right (interesting main character, neat character conflict, neat ideas, the fact that Spike gets an active role rather than sitting around fingering his dickhole the whole plot, etc.), there are two things he/she/it does wrong (cliched main cast, great evil conveniently locked away then conveniently freed, Celestia's-dealt-with-this-shit-before cliche, not tapping into the potential of the aforementioned 'neat ideas', specific magical war-fighting maguffins all scattered around in convenient 'break in case of war' boxes, etc.).
May I mitigate the prior blows with the gentle reassurance that "Dragoon Wars; Hope You're Patient" isn't bad, and I slash at it because I love it and want it to be the beautiful story that I know it can be. Seriously, if some of the dabbling-about motherfuckery was swept up under the rug and the narrative maintained a tight focus on Twi & Spike's very interesting arc then it could break through the lukewarm chains of "not bad" and transcend up high into the empyrean plains of "pretty good". Until then, you've a frantic but well-meaning piece that shifts incredulously between fucking awesome and fucking boring. Closing simile: "Dragoon Wars; Out of Subtitle Gags" is like a fast food hamburger; it’s technically a meal and has some really tasty mouthfuls, but its overcooked and leaves you with the churning opinion that a painful shit lies in your future. Still got it!
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THANK YOU! That's far more in-depth analysis of the flaws of my piece than I have ever gotten. I hope sometime in the future I can pick your brain about ways that I may fix up the problems with my first 8 chapters, likely trimming, compressing, and merging some of them. In retrospect the first few chapters really are especially rushed, and I need to find a way to fix that.
Thankfully it seems that I have done much better with the initial pacing of my other crossover, Equestria's Strife Online, and between that story and this one, it does seem like I have a particular strength in writing for Twilight's perspective.
You are very welcome. If my brain is ever any help in the future, feel free to pick at it.
3792584 Thanks.
Oh, and I wasn't able to get a good impression of what you thought of the story after Chapter 8. Were there any particular problems with that later portion that you could point out? And I'd especially love to know if you have any criticism of my portrayal of Flash Sentry.
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I apologize for how long it took me to respond, my charger broke and my computer died!
Anyhow, my overall opinion of the story extends further into its latter half: interesting when we're riding along with Twilight Sparkle and Spike, and pretty dull when we're riding along with others. There needs to be a stronger focus, and characters like Gilda, Mayor Mare and Flash Sentry feel like they show up just for the sake of having familiar characters (and OCs like Bowser. Really? Bowser!?) rather than being key members of the plot. Flash Sentry himself isn't that bad, but I didn't really care to see things from his point of view because he doesn't get any plot-driving decisions. Switching points of view is okey-hokey but attaching us petty-audience types to characters that lack the agency and autonomy that folks like Twilight bring to the table is a bad decision - like eating the leaves from a delicious apple tree.
As for the presentation of the 'War' part of 'Dragoon Wars; All Minor Characters Invited', it's not terrible but I wish that you'd focus more on the action then the thoughts of the characters witnessing the action.
best wishes,
twitterdick
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thanks!
Hey there! I’m La Barata, and welcome to…
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Apologies, as this one's definitely taken a while, as various things such as exams, family issues and the like kept cropping up, but here it is! So! Before we get into it, I’m gonna tell you a little bit about how this is gonna work. There are going to be three sections to the review: Literary, Technical and TL;DR.
The literary section is going to be the story, plot, characters, character’s pets, their dandruff, etc. Basically, all the things that make a story a story. I’m going to be focusing on the story you’re TRYING to write here, if that makes any sense at all.
Next, the technical bits. That’s where all those fiddly little things like spelling, grammar, making sure you know a sentence from a lamp post, all those things fit in. I’m going to go over all the fiddly little things your grade three English teacher
would beat me with a belt forwould want you to correct. Punctuation, indents,not punching David Pinkoski in the face, all those good things.Finally, the summary, or as I like to call it, the TL;DR version. I’m going to summarize all the points I made in the past few paragraphs, and add in a few notes and personal thoughts that I didn’t believe really fit in anywhere else.
Right then! Let’s dive in!
First, the characters. Even just ten or twenty lines into the prologue chapter, I can see that you’re doing pretty well on the characterization. I’m actually quite fond of the way you put that together, but I’ll get more into that later.
Discord’s just as insufferable and amusing as ever, Sombra’s grumpy as anything, Chrysalis is an excellent shade of irritated at just about everyone, and you manage to carry across exactly what’s going on and what the dynamics are between them. You’ve managed to give yourself some rather well done villains, and they’re fun to read.
Moving on to the Mane 6, the first thing that I noticed was that Twilight and Spike’s relationship is very well done. Spike’s quite in character, from what little has been shown canonically. Definitely concerned with Twilight’s welfare, despite the fact that she might not always be. The playful back and forth banter between the two at the beginning makes you smile, and you make it obvious, just from how they act around each other, that they deeply care about one another. In addition, their reactions to one another and the situation as a whole once the
hits the fan are quite good.
Twilight’s a complete sweetheart, eager to please and genuinely excited by the prospect of learning, but also a bit quick to get wrapped up in her own neuroses. She takes things rather seriously here, and it’s quite endearing. She really wants to make sure that Spike is brought up right, and is doing her best on that front. As for the others, they’re pretty close to in character, too.
Applejack’s stubborn and obstinate when it comes to some things, greatly overestimates her own abilities in some situations, but is still down to earth enough to admit when she was wrong.
Rainbow Dash is… Well, Rainbow Dash. Impatient, gung-ho to do stupid things without knowing much about them, and entirely irritating. Kudos to you, you got her down pat.
One character I'd like to talk about in more detail, however, is Pinkie Pie. First and foremost, she seems to be on crack. Now, I’m a bit of a stickler when it comes to Pinkie. The trick with her is to remember that she isn’t, in fact, tweeking on meth. I think you really need to calm her down at points. The thing about writing Pinkie which a lot of people don’t seem to get is that she’s not ALL HYPER ENERGY ALL THE TIME HEY LOOK AT ME WOO LOL HEY ARE YOU LOOKING AT ME NOW MY DADDY MADE ME PUT GLASS IN MY VAGINA ARE YOU PAYING ATTENTION TO ME YET?! all the time. She really needs to mellow out some. I’ve seen stories that I absolutely loved up until Pinkie showed up absolutely ruined by her, and while she’s not obnoxious enough to ruin the entire fic, she definitely manages to drag it down some.
Fluttershy’s another one that needs a bit of work. I know that she’s always decently quiet, but with how quiet you’ve made her, she’s basically a nonentity. She honestly might as well not even be there with how little you tend to do with her. If you’re going to have her in a scene, you should really do more with her than simply plop her down as window dressing.
Now, let’s take a closer look at Spike, who you’ve turned into the emotional center of the story. You’ve turned him into a tough little guy, but you still haven’t lost that sense of childishness about him, He’s been taken and transformed by a bizarre magic he doesn’t understand into a completely new form, and things are spiralling far beyond his control, yet his first thoughts are for his family and friends. He’s noble, caring, and the perfect knight in shining armour. You’ve managed to perfectly capture the essence of the little guy and make him into so much more.
Moving on! Time for part 2 of our delightful little exercise:
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That’s right! We’re going to take the train to Grammar Germany, with stops along the way at the Comma Concentration Camps and the Apostrophe Auschwitz! Choo choo! All aboard!
Right, so. First, I’ve got to let you know: You’re riding the train as an officer, not a prisoner.You’ve actually done a very good job, and there’s not that much for me to point out. There’s really no torture to be had, except for the inhumane stretching of this bloody train metaphor that I should really stop now.
The first thing that I notice is that you seem to have a strong fondness for exclamation points. You’ve used them rather liberally throughout the story, I’ve noticed. The thing about exclamation points, though, is that they’re like a spice. A dash is great now and then, but when you start to add it to every meal, you start to become desensitized to it, and can barely taste it at all soon enough. I’d recommend taking a few out, and just bringing it all down a notch, especially in non-dialogue sentences.
The next thing I want to bring up is the prologue chapter, in and of itself. More specifically, the way you’ve structured all the dialogue. Even more specifically, the way you’ve actually done a really good job of it. You’ve gotten yourself a chapter composed solely of dialogue, and you’ve managed not to lose me. It’s easy to tell who’s saying what, especially considering your excellent sense of character voice that I pointed out earlier. You’ve not made any slip-ups structure wise that I can spot, and you’ve made it all fit together quite well.
And we’re in the home stretch! The last part of our little adventure together. This is where I give you my personal notes and a TL;DR of the review.
First, let me say this. My first and most popular fic was about Spike. It was rather well regarded, as it happened, and it actually made it onto EqD. The reason that I’m saying this is that I need to take a step back and tip my hat to you. You’ve written an absolutely spectacular Spike, one that I fully admit is far better than I could do. You’ve carried his character across perfectly, and expanded upon it to flesh him out to an excellent degree.
As far as the TL;DR list goes, normally it’s designed to be a quick reference guide to anything you need to fix during your editing. However, there’s really only one grammatical issue that I noticed that was big enough to even mention, and that was the simple fact that you’re overly fond of exclamation points. Character wise, you really need to work on both your Pinkie and your Fluttershy, as the former seems to be on a cocaine bender to rival that of Charlie Sheen and the latter is such a wallflower she might as well not even be there for the most part.
If you want a real TL;DR?
You done good, kid. Keep it up.
~La Barata, W.R.I.T.E.'s Drunken Scottish Priest
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Wow, thanks for the review. I am glad to get even more confirmation on the things I've done right, and a bigger glimpse at my failings. I definitely need to do a little more with Fluttershy in the scenes I have her in.
And I guess with Pinkie Pie I really haven't accomplished what I set out to do with her yet. I wanted to make it seem like she was actually trying a bit too hard to be silly, with a few moments of characters noticing that she's being unusually pensive. I was trying to make it that she was trying especially hard to keep everyone cheered up and hide her own worry over her little Gummy situation that she had hidden from everypony. I guess I also didn't completely accomplish the tonal shift for her that I wanted to when she started fighting. I need to work on differenciating her trying-to-hard hyperactivity and her serious but still somewhat goofy Hotblooded side for battle.
3890839 Yeah, Pinkie definitely needs some work. The biggest issue is that it doesn't seem that /she's/ trying too hard, it really seems that /YOU/ are.
You're doing a spectacular job, though. Keep it up!
You know Rainbow Dash should become a Drgoon
[qoute]A Legend of Dragoon Crossover Fic.Aw hells yeah! Best game ever IMO. Apparently, I have this favorited already, huh. Don't remember doing that.
4039428 i could see her relieving glida of her spirit and becoming one that way
Can we have an update, please?
next chapter please!
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I have to ask before i read is this story going to continue or are you done with it. I see this story's last update was 2013 it is now 2020? I f your not interested, or lost interest please change the story status to "cancelled" so i'm not left wondering when i finish reading what you have wrote and uploaded.
P.S i just finished reading up to what you have. Firstly you caught me by surprise in making Pinkie the Blue-Sea Dragoon and secondly i wish you showed how Twilight and Spike became bound to each other by the White-Silver Dragoon spirit instead of having 3 chapters dedicated to the first clash of this new war. Should've done it after Twilight and Spike became bound by the Dragoon spirit. It would've made this first clash more significant as it would've showed Twilight learning how to weild her new power
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Been ages since anyone commented on any of my stories. Well, I set it to cancelled. There's always the chance I could get inspired again someday though.
I think you had a bit of a misconception regarding Twilight as a Dragoon though. When the battle started, she and Spike had yet to go through the ritual to create the Dragoon Spirit. It happened mid-battle, off-screen from the chapters focusing on Flash, Rainbow, and Pinkie's fight.
It was intended for the next chapter to step back to Twilight's perspective where I had last left off with her, and show how she fights off the enemies and finally decides to create the Spirit with Spike. That would lead to her first transformation under these dire circumstances, as shown at the end of the last chapter.
So it's not that she and Spike already had the Spirit and I skipped over training time using it or something.