Derpy Hooves isn't the happiest pony. Sure, she means well, but when all your social interaction end in failure or destruction, it's hard to be happy. Luckily, she lives in Ponyville, home to the best six ponies to ever solve a problem. With their powers combined, the Mane 6 put their unique talents to work to help Derpy overcome her condition. But when her dream comes true, will she be truly happy?
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Dis is good. Very good. Keep it up! Me like! MUSTACHE ATTACK FOR AWESOME SAUCES!
I like it.
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Oh good, people like my story.
I got about half-way through chapter 2 right after I wrote this one, but I ran into writer's block. Recovery is imminent, so more incoming.
First thing is first, DERPPPPPYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!! BEST PONY EVER!!!!!! I think you would like my Derpy fic, Melting a cold heart, it's a very different take on the crossed eyes mare. You done quite well even though it seems.....normal. I'll still read on though
Derpy Hooves is in every single one of my stories, major or minor, period
Wow....this is more sappy then the show itself (if that's even possible) normally, I very much hate sappy and loveable stories like this, I'm very realstic but for Derpy, I'll give anything a chance. I understand that her birth defiect (spelled that wrong) is serious but for ponies to be THIS cheerful, makes me want to either laugh my ass off or puke, not sure which, no offense
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Not every story is for everyone. Just like everyone has a different favorite episode, everyone is going to have a different favorite story style.
The story is going to ramp up a bit, but I'm on story burn-out right now.
2488345 no words can be more true, seriously you are correct. It's tough sometimes..I feel like watching some ponies now
I understand that, shit we all do
Not bad Pinkie being Pinkie
Glad to see it got serious though, makes it more realistic, damn, can I kill Rarity now?
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Rarity means well. Again, I'm trying to make it like an actual episode, and I can totally see Hasbro having Rarity over-zealously force fabulous-ness upon somepony.
I've got a similar condition, my left eye won't move to the right very far, and won't move to the left a all. So I can cross one eye and look straight ahead with the other one, it freaks people out! So I feel for you, Derpy. INSUFFICIENT OPTICAL TENDON LENGTH FTW!!!!
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Now we just need some magic to repair that. Now where did I leave my amulet?
Shit, I'll be honest and say it would be odd to see Derpy without her eyes acting all crazy, it's who she is.
Ha, Pinkie Pie!
I like that, new muffin. Poor Dinky, I feel her pain
Wow.
What a selfish little shit Dinky turned into in this one.
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That's a...different way of looking at it, but I guess that's true.
3408166 Here she is, her mom's managed to finally get medical treatment for a disability (And let's face it, the way it was portrayed here, it WAS a disability), and here she's going "Noooo! I liked you better before! You're just changing to make other people like you!"
"Nooo! I liked you better in the wheelchair! You just got spinal surgery because it would make people like you more! Go jump off a bridge and wreck it again!"
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Are you sure it was portrayed as a disability? The only time it was ever described as such was part 2, when Twilight was making a correlation between Derpy's condition and a real disease that affects animals. That's it.
There are plenty of stories of deaf people who don't want to get cochlear implants (which would allow them to hear) because they are who they are: deaf and proud. Sure, it's fixable, but that's who they are. If you want to take this as "Don't fix your abnormalities because we like you broken," then I guess that's your analysis. I'd hope you'd see it as: "You don't have to change to make friends."
But cynics will be cynics.
3408599 Well, yes. It is portrayed as a disability. You show it severely impacting her ability to function as normal.
This isn't like 'not getting a cochlear implant because they're proud of who they are'. This is like someone getting a cochlear implant, going 'Oh, wow! This is amazing! I can do so many things! I love this!' and then going home and being guilted into getting it removed because 'she's changing so people will like her'.
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I'm glad that you are sticking with your analysis. It shows that you have read my piece, and you have gathered your opinion.
I leave you with your opinion, as my discussion does not seem able to change your mind. I wish you best of luck, and I hope you will read my next story, which I think will have significantly less whiny kids and more explosions.
Derpy!!!
This is good, interesting start and no problems that I could see. But when someone says "How hard could it be?" you know something is going to go bad. I'm going to continue reading.
There you go Derpy, be who YOU are, which is best pony. I love it, it's very simple and sweet, you done an amazing job, I enjoyed this
La Barata is right. Dinky is extremely selfish and the whole ending is...well... flat out ridiculous. This wasn't about ponies liking her it was about being able to live a life where she wasn't damaging property, about not having to rely so much on others, and not making her friends lives harder simply for being her friend. It was 100% for her own reasons and had nothing to do with wanting to be liked. She already was liked by a few ponies and your own dialogue and situations made it very clear that she wanted her eyes fixed to solve the problems I previously listed.
Yes! You showed her very clearly being affected in a way that made it difficult for her to function in life.
disability
noun
1.
a physical or mental condition that limits a person's movements, senses, or activities.
You showed how her crossed eyes limited her activities. And not once did you show that she was made fun of, or hated because of her eyes. You showed she was disliked because of her clumsiness which I cant blame the ponies of Ponyville for. If someone causes damage to you and your personal belongings you aren't really going to want them around, even if they are a nice.
First off, this is two totally different situations. An inability to hear is rather a simple disability to live with in comparison to a visual one. Not that I would want to live with a hearing disability or be able to handle it as well as others but it is doable and a lot easier than trying to live with a visual impairment. Second, most deaf people were born deaf, or at least were deaf for most of their life, so the idea of suddenly being able to hear can be a scary thought. What to expect? What if it doesn't meet my expectations? What if I was happier being deaf? In Derpy's case, she can see, she just cant see well. The deaf person is used to not hearing while someone like Derpy is in a situation where it isn't really something she can get used to as is made clear by your own story.
You keep using disabilities as if they are akin to someone having a big nose, or hair that's the wrong colour. A disability seriously effects a persons life and wanting to be "fixed" isn't them saying they are ashamed of themselves. Its them saying they have a hard life but there is something they can do about. They are taking control.
Your conclusion is forced and ridiculous. You clearly showed that Derpy was happier, not because ponies were liking her, but because she wasn't making her friends lives harder, and she would be able to function better. If Derpy had crossed eyes, could see well, but was made fun of for it. Then sure, your story would work better. But through your own words you made it clear she had a serious disability that was detrimental to her well being both mentally and physically, and that it was affecting her friends which upset her.
She had friends already who cared about her. She changed for herself and her own happiness. You forced her back for your own warped sense of right.
Good day, sir.