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Inspired by Prince Luna's adaptation of the MLP VS...

Discord finds another realm, filled with powerful and unique creatures. So, what better option than to pit the six mares who defeated him against these monsters for fun?

Chapters (14)
Comments ( 60 )

0_0 you have them KILLING them :fluttershbad::fluttershbad::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry: come one just let them faint, FOR FLUTTERSHY

2451363 Fluttershy is going to have some VERY interesting battles.

2451410 still gawd can you atleast have a chapter were discord brings back all the pokemon they killed

I love this idea. Sad that they die, though. Give them Poke Balls!

I too have a problem with the death of the Pokemon, only because it goes against established Pokemon canon.

:rainbowhuh: Hmm... what a weird idea for a story. When I first read the summary I wasn't sure if the concept was more interesting or iffy. The only thing I knew for sure was that it would take a lot of effort and skill to get a story like this right... and for the most part, you didn't really mess it up too bad.

:ajsleepy: However, I do have some issues with it. You seem afraid to spend the space and time on adequate descriptions for things like attacks and the victim's reaction, which really trivializes their effect for the reader. Also, there is no pacing, and so far no real drama or overarching storyline, beyond the ponys lamenting the deaths of the Pokemon they were forced to kill.

:unsuresweetie: On another note, a lot of people seem to be taking issue with the fact that the Pokemon die, rather then just faint. Personally, though, I don't see a problem with this- really, it just amuses me.

2453320 Well, it's good to hear some criticism. I'll do my best to fit some of that into the rest of the story.

Great story so far, cant wait for more! Also, a few suggestions:

Twilight vs Alakazam
Rainbow dash vs Ninjask
Applejack vs Trapinch
Rarity vs Gardevoir
Pinkie Pie vs Ludicolo
Fluttershy vs Keckleon

Hope these help! :twilightsmile:

Darkskarr X

2455847 Not bad. But that sounds more like Pokemon they'd befriend rather than fight. But I'll keep those ideas in mind. I'm open to suggestions.

gawd ok dude you have gone TOO FAR look just. make. them. bucking. faint. you have caused fluttershy to cry you will be disliked into oblivion

2456292 <sarcasm> Sorry about that. </sarcasm>

2456282 you know what they say though. Keep your friends close, and your enemies closer. I paired them up like that as it would seem like more of a challenge to the respective ponies.

2456532 Interesting. I think I'll give something like that a shot.

P.S. How is a Trapinch like Applejack?

2456570 Tbh, AJ was hard to pair. I was thinking of using a fighting type (e.g. Machamp) but they seemed too stereotypical a match.

2456605 I think AJ and Fighting types go pretty well. With all the Applebucking she does, I wouldn't be surprised if she uses some kicks for combat. Maybe a Hitmonlee or a Breloom.

2456617 Gallade maybe? Anyways, look forward to see what you come up with, should be fun:pinkiesmile:!

2456691 I don't want to tell any spoilers, but I will say Gallade is my favorite Pokemon.

2456710 Great minds think alike. I may make a crossover myself after this involving my 6 fave pokemon being trapped in equestria.

2456730 I've actually planned to include my entire party in this story.

2456749 Cool i'll keep tabs on your story then.:pinkiesmile:

Good chapter, cant wait for the next one! :pinkiesmile:

Alrighty... that's one. Great. I didn't expect Rarity to be the first to break.

When does Arceus show up, whip Discord, and send them all home?

2480608 Well, I'll say this. There's a reason I added the Celestia character tag.

That sick fuck...I like it *cough cough* nevermind

2480716 when do legendaries come into play so you can maybe have say like twilight vs. mewtwo??

If the mane six start facing ledgenery pokemon they will die they to op

2592499
Nope. Legendary Pokemon are op in pokemon, but were talking about a crossover of the elements of harmony vs Pokemon, ad harmony is similar to love, the legendary Pokemon may stand a chance considering they're from another world. But there's not enough information for me to go by.

"When have I ever made sense? What fun is it?" Discord said.

Making sense isn't fun, is it discord. But I'm afraid that you're doing it wrong. I don't make sense, probably because I'm a figment of my creators imagination (I broke the fourth wall the first time I was created) yet I use it to save people from my realm/dimension/world and others alike.

Pokemon don't die, they faint. Fluttershy is going bro have a hard time, and are any of the Pokemon characters going to have a apart in this? How about pokeballs?

No comments, being that I don't make sense (see my comment in the Prologue) I must break this silence so...

POOTIS

Some of the Pokemon are sentient god dammit. Killing sentient beings is even worse than killing non sentient ones. For a fact you shouldn't be killing anything at all! I may not be able to alter the course of history, but I can sure as hell make a new one!

Dude, dude, dude. You need to involve the humans at least, maybe ash and the gang help to stop Discord? And Team Rocket appears in certain chapters? Etc.

2460966
You're not a brony! Get the hell off fimfiction.net before its too late!

I cannot find any words to say. I want to hate you for making the ponies kill the Pokemon, but I also can't be bothered looking for another Pokemon and pony crossover. So instead ill dislike your story and keep reading till I find something that makes me like it. Like ash and the gang (HINT HINT)

Status of characters:
Discord: Unharmed
Twilight Sparkle: Regretting her actions but determined nonetheless
Rarity: BROKEN!
Applejack: Feeling pain from memories of Winowna
Pinkie Pie: Pinkamena Diane Pie: Not having fun
Rainbow Dash: Feeling guilt, regret, among other things
Fluttershy: Her innocence has been wounded

Warrior Kitten does not approve

Status:
Applejack: angry, worried for the others

NO! YOU HAVE MISINTERPRETED DISCORD! DISCORD WOULD NOT DO THIS! HE IS THE GOD OF CHAOS! YES HE WOULD WANT REVENGE ON THE MANE 6 BUT HE WOULD NOT DO THIS! YOU HAVE NOT ONLY DESTROYED FLUTTERSHY BUT YOU HAVE NOW DESTROYED DISCORD!

Status:
Fluttershy: BROKEN!
(Fluttershy was saved by a mysterious force, Discord?)
Rarity: BROKEN!

2670023<sarcasm> Yeah, that'll totally happen </sarcasm>

2670253
Y'know, you need to be kind to the people that give you suggestions, I mean at least we read the fic. You don't have to be an asshole about it.

God dammit, so many stories I'm following and only one story updates in 3 days and the chapter is smaller than any chapter I've ever read. :ajbemused:

I'm not saying I have a problem with the story I'm just frustrated. Anyway, on to critique, the battle was hastily done there was only 1 hit for pinkie to finish the serperior, pinkie was also a bit fast to believe the fact that Fluttershy killed, if anything pinkie would deny it and never accept that fact.

But thanks for the update.

Oh, almost forgot

Pinkie, caught of guard

Should be off, I could have sworn there was another mistake but I can't find it anymore.

And here

A dark fluid dripped from Pinkie's bite mark

This can easily be mistaken as pinkie having been bitten by the serperior, you should change it to something else e.g. a dark fluid dripped from where Pinkie had bit the Serperior or something similar to that.

So... I'm not dead.

Why would you be dead? :rainbowhuh:

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