A type of disease known as the 'Pony Plague' is ravaging Equestria. It doesn't really physically harm the ponies, but they go into a deep coma that, without a proper cure, is nearly impossible to wake from. This disease doesn't discriminate either, as it will effect not only ponies, but alicorns, minotaurs, dragons, and pretty much any organism that has life other than plants. Twilight is the only pony who has a disease resistance to it. Along the way she learns of her ancestors who had cured Equestria of it long ago. (This story takes place after 'Magical Mystery Cure')
Chapters (1)
Good story, but there are some thing, that might off to a reader..
the plague: it spreads too fast.
There is no describtion of how it spreads.
It is air, water, blood or something else.
The time require for the Plague to take effects is not really describted.
And finally genetics as a source of the plague... Really? Sorry but bad genetics can't spread except to children...
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Hmm, I never thought of that, thank you for the constructive criticism, it makes me happy to see people tell me the REASONS why the story suffers instead of just saying 'it sucks.' This is actually an honor for me as the only criticism I've ever gotten from others were two simple words: 'This sucks.' So thank you again, and I might rewrite this later on as sort of a second chapter.
2388898 happy to help.
I hate those guys too, or the one who just downvote...
I just read your fic and thought, it could be some much better, if it had a little more science. So I gave some science to work with
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Yes, thank you, when I get time I will most likely do the rewrite, is it ok with you if when I do the rewrite, I send it to you? I really only have one brony friend I know in real life and you seem like someone who is good with advice.
Right now I can't really start, I got some popular fanfics I'm working on reading right now, finished My Little Dashie and... that OTHER one which we will not name in this point at time for the fear of even MENTIONING the name could get me banned. I'm sure you know the one I'm talking about...
2388926 sure why not?
the other fic is cupcakes?
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Yes that's the one, I just have a natural fear that the admins are watching over talk of it, as it IS a pretty infamous ones, for obvious reasons...
2388934 don't worry... there are much more worses one on fim... like Sweetapple Masacre...
also there are like dozens of versions of cupcakes on fim....
and did you like MLD?
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I am not really one to cry, but MLD had me on the verge of bawling like a wee little baby. I have never read Sweetapple Massacre, but I know what it's about, I like how it sounds, not because Applejack dies 9though, that IS a plus, well, kind of.) But just the thought of Big Mac going crazy and killing everypony of the Apple family just sounds funny. As for right now, I'm trying to trudge through Rainbow Factory.
2388944 why do you force yourself reading all those gorefic.... WHY?
also thanks for the watch...
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Well I'm not really FORCING myself to read Rainbow Factory, I just haven't gotten to the part where people say stuff like 'Oh, I'm disgusted!' or 'OMG, why Dashie WHYYYYYYYY!?!?!?!' in the over dramatic sort of way. I am enjoying it, but I am the type of person who stops every time there is a quote, and make sure I say it to myself in the tone the character would say it in, because I like to feel like I am watching an episode.
Ah yes and you're welcome for the follow, thank YOU for the follow on me.
2388963 i try to avoid gore fics... just not good with it...
and now to the mandatory question.. PLEASE READ MY STORIES!!!!
and mandatory selfpromote is over..
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Any specific one you think I should start with?
2388978 don't care... what you like more
got some more concepts with completely different ideas, as what i have now...
2388979
Hmm, okay, I will check them out, it may be a while before I can give you feedback as I am not particularly a quick reader, for reasons discussed earlier.
BTW: I keep forgetting to mention this, but I like your pic of Vinyl Scratch.
2388984 VINYL SCRATCH IS BEST PONY!!!!!!!
which is so hard to get if you read my profile... my story.. and see my pic
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Yes, I like Vinyl Scratch too, but something about Derpy is just so intriguing, maybe it's the eyes...
Then again, I DO like me some Pinkamina Diane Pie. (And yes, I do refer to her that way... a lot.)
2388994 who does not like Psycho Pinkie
?
better like her, or she will find you..
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That episode was GREAT! One of my favorites, right behind the Super Speedy Cider Squeezy 6000, of course. I remember that was the first episode I talked to my friend about when he brought me over to being a brony, and the psycho Pinkie one was the very first episode he used on me. That was about a month ago when I didn't get why the show was so great to him, then the season 3 finale happened, he was pissed, and curiosity got the better of me. One week long marathon of the three seasons later, I was a brony and to this day I can't help but laugh at the whole psycho Pinkie bit.
2389006 lol that's a nice way to join the herd.... which sounds extermly wrong
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Yeah... I told one of my non brony friends about that, and he just thought I was crazy... But he still enjoys anything pony related I show him. Which is funny seeing as how he acts like the show isn't too great, but he will join me, yes MUWAHAHAHAHA!!!
Oh yes, and I have started on your first fanfic about Vinyl, and I must say that the part about him being too drunk to use his phone was pretty amusing, as I was chuckling about it for a while.
2389019 WE ARE ONE STEP CLOSER TO RULE THE WORLD! MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA
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MUWAHAHAHAHA!!! *hacks and coughs* Ah jeez, my doctor told me to lay off the evil laugh...
2389023 I am german, so being able to laugh evil is genetic.
MUHAHAHAHAHAHAAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHA
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LUCKY! Man, I wish I had that ability! All I have is the ability to make some of my friends laugh, which is weird because I don't really find a lot of the things I say to be all that funny.
2389029 all you need is training...
i just have a unfair advance... like german beer, we have the best beer
2389032
I have heard good things about russian vodka, so I guess I have two things in my life I still need to try.
Well that's your opinion, I have tried different types of alcohol, and every single one has never tasted too good, though I might have to give that a try, as all I have ever tasted was the cheap american crap that my dad has. He may like it, but I honestly almost puked when I tried it.
Dammit, how did we go from just one simple constructive criticism type comment, to using this as our own personal Facebook?
2389042 dunno. happens alot around me....
which is a good thing. Most if my story ideas are born from random stuff.
I think once I went with a friend from talking about features to clop to random stuff....
2389052
Lol, that happens around me, not a lot, but it does happen, I just like talking to people. When I was younger I didn't really like human interaction, but nowadays, I crave conversation. I actually wasn't intentionally trying to start an all out conversation, and I am sure later on someone is gonna see this really long conversation of about an hour or two, and wonder how bored we were.
Man, they need to add a 'Brohoof' emoticon, that would be cool.
2389058 i know there is something like it, but i forgot how it goes....
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Hmm, oh well, hey I finished chapter one of your first fanfic and I must say it's pretty good. But then again as long as it is funny I pretty much think anything is funny. I saw the author's note saying to point out any errors in grammer, would you like me to PM you a list? I would feel like a total dick if I put a list, whether it be long or short, pointing out mistakes.
2389073 just post it in the comments on the story...
I consider it as advice or critism, which is always good.
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Okay, but if you ever need help with that sort of thing, I can always be there for you, we bronies need to stick together!
2389085 You're a good guy... unlike other people, who call themselves Brony...
If I need help, I will asked
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(What's funny is, I used a Rarity emoticon, but she's only one higher on my favorite pony list than Applejack. Applejack being my least favorite.)
Cool, I think I will show your story to my friend who made me a brony in the first place. I think he would rather enjoy it.
2389100 I don't like the Mane6, expect for Pinkie Pie....
I like fan characters much more... especially Vinyl Scratch and Octavia
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I actually consider Fluttershy, Pinkie Pie, and Rainbow Dash to be pretty high up on my list out of all the characters in the show. My top ten favorite ponies (Pony only, so only Alicorns, Earth Ponies, Pegasi, and Unicorns)
1.Derpy
2.Snowflake
3.Pinkie
4.Fluttershy
5.Flim/Flam (They are both pretty much the same)
6.Vinyl Scratch
7.Rainbow Dash
8.Cadence
9.Trixie
10.Big Mac
I think those would be the first that come to mind if I was ever asked.
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my top ten... uhh
1.) Vinyl Scratch
2.) Octavia
3.) Snowflake
4.) Nyx
5.) Dusty Spearhead (OC from a friend)
6.) Psycho Pinkie
7.) Normal Pinkie
8.) Trixie
9.) Doctor Whooves
10.) Mollestia
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Hmm, I somehow forgot about Mollestia, but that kind of says she isn't one of my favorites though, doesn't it? As for Nyx, I don't believe I remember ever hearing of that fan-made one. Another one I like would be my OC who my profile is named after, Trey, who I just made up as a plot device to help Discord break free and try to take over Equestria. I already have been told what's wrong with that one, and there is a simple, two word answer for that: My transitions. I didn't notice until it was pointed out, but yeah, now that I look back, my transitions for that story, Galloping Grand Prix, are pretty sudden. I mean, look how sudden this is:
Applejack was bound to find out if every pony had been lying so she decided to go find Applebloom. If there was one thing she knew about her sister, it was that she may hide things from her, but she would never lie.
She arrived at Sweet Apple Acres and found Applebloom
(I know I used an Applejack part, but that was for the sake of the plot, and that was the main one my friend pointed out)
2389146 lol sounds like a good plot device
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Yeah, I'm just trying to work on those transitions, but right now I am dissecting your fanfic, giving the error, the fix, and advice (as much as I can) for future reference. I am only one paragraph through, as I am usually trying to be very thorough with my advice.
2389166 thanks
2389175
You know what I just noticed about the website? A lot of the pictures you can scroll through on the banner at the top look sort of like how they would do art for a Magic card.
2389181 never noticed that...
a MLP edition of Magic.... that would be awesome
2389185
That WOULD be awesome! Good thing there are card generators online!
2389189 some people on deviantart made a lot of serious MTG cards with ponies..
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Lol, The last time I made a Magic card was when I first got into anime...
2389193 lol never made one... they would be to overpowered.. like
Twilight Sparkle 3BB
Alicorn
draw X number of cards, when Twilight Sparkle does damage.
Twilight Sparkle's strenght and defense are X, as X is number of cards on hand.
Limit on cards on the is removed...
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I usually either have a serious approach, or a completely stupid, all for the lolz approach. examples would be.
serious:
Discord XBW
Draconequus
Indestructable
Discord comes into play tapped with X year counters on him, where X is 5 times the amount of extra mana you paid for him. at the beginning of your upkeep, triple the amount of year counters on Discord. When he has a thousand year counters, untap him and he loses indestructability, and becomes a 10/10 with protection from all creatures, enchantments and otherwise except for Princess Celestia, Princess Luna, the Main 6, or the Elements of Harmony.
Now here's what a joke card would be.
Derpy 1WW
Pegasus
Flying
'I just don't know what went wrong' (When Derpy attacks, flip a coin, if you win, Derpy attacks as normal, but if you lose, Derpy stuns herself for a turn and deals five damage to you and any allies you may have.)
5/5
2389219 o.O Discord.... is OP.
Man if Derpy were a bird, I wuold put her into my Birddeck
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You have a bird deck? Hmm, I wonder if zombies like the taste of bird. Also yes, Discord is OP, but come on, it's Discord. It's pretty much impossible NOT to make him OP, or at least in my opinion it is at least. If you're making a serious Discord card, he pretty much HAS to be OP, plus there is the downside, as he can't attack or block, and you still have him out of comission for a while, as putting him out, you will probably only start with 30 counters (6 mana x 5)