Join Noble and his team as they explore the mysteries of the latest game, Equestrian Earth!
There will be troubles ahead as they face monsters, enemy ponies and the trials of thier own friendship. Will they survive or not?
Original story belongs to ChaoticNote! Check him out everypony! Cover Image is by Deltorafann001 give her a look my ponies!
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Well I wasn't sure if I was going to like it but I certainly did, I also havn't really seen any major problems (Well I sometimes had the feeling that the story didn't go as smooth as it should have gone but it was readable and enjoyable). Anyways, I would suggest simply keep continueing this story and I'm sure the writting will improve greatly ^^ (After all, practice makes perfect). You're a good writter and if you update regulary I'm sure this will become a great story.
Oh and am I missing a prequel orsomething?
2347314 Well thanks for the feedback it's greatly apreciated.
I will only be able to update when I feel the chapters are ready unfortunately. 
Also...prequel? What makes you think there is a prequel?
2347481 I wasn't sure if I simply had missed a prequel and that the characters were refering to it
.
And that's too bad
, but I suppose having chapters that are good but take a while is better then rushed chapters.
2351579 oh I see..sorry about that. I uh, tend to make everything I write look like a story came before it.
of course now that I think about it...
hmm 
Well anyway, yeah I also tend to be a perfectionist at times. Of course I do need a pre-reader or editor...
by the way the second chapter is almost done.
Twitch choking on a digital fly..... you've made my day xD. Great story man, you updated pretty fast too
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2357919 it helps when I had the second chapter halfway finished before posting the story...
still need an editor though. I think I made a mistake somewhere in ne of these chapters. 
I just started the third chapter and may have it out in about two days, at least.
The thing I like the most about this story is the character interactions with each other. The amusing banter and nicknames are very entertaining.
I think the Nubs/Lyra relationship moved kinda fast, but is not that big of a deal. Speaking of crushes, I found a error.
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thank you. thank you for being what I needed. Feedback and corrections on my story is exactly what I ask for and a god amongst us has given unto me my.... oh wait ...uh this is awkward.
thanks for that bro.
2358798 I would love to be your editor, however I'm afraid my english is not good enough to be of any help (Sure I can take out spelling mistakes if necessary, but I don't think I'll spot minor gramatical errors)
2380057 eh, it's cool bro. Google docs loves to correct my words(it likes to tell me celestia and manehatten aren't words.) All I really need is someone to like say...read it and then fix the way it's written...? wait, that's a pre-reader isn't it?
2381092 You mean like, telling you about the weird/ not smooth written sentences? because in that case, that is a proofreader indeed.
2381104 yeah, that!
I needs one.
2381127 Well it shouldn't be too hard to get one I suppose, maybe you can ask in the Equestrian earth forum for one?
2381140
derp. ok then.thanks.
Enjoyed it like always. Also Heks Blad? xD Pretty interesting name. Oh and ofcourse, Twitch gave me a laugh again ^^
Love it, I really do! I would've commented on the others, too, but i just registered. keep up the good work. my favorite is Big Mac
2447079 Heks Blad is an interesting name isn't it? I'm glad you liked it.
Twitch made you laugh again? can't be a coincidence.
and thanks for the fave.
2447437Just registered huh? Well then let me be the first to welcome you to FIMfiction! Where authors go to flant their awful stories.
By the way my pony bretheren. There is a reference in this chapter. can you find it? I'll give you a hint. names...(may be too big of a hint and I may be terrible at this hint stuff.
)
2448455 I also liked she was dutch (Dutchman here
), anyways, I assume you know what Heks Blad means?
2452336 Heks Blad means witch blade. Google says so.
2452349 Blad means leaf xD, Zwaard or Sabel means Blade
2452360 So its witch leaf?
stupid google
2452422 Believe me, keep it, Heks blad sounds actually pretty cool. It's way cooler then heks sabel or heks zwaard. Yeah, witch leaf might sound weird but Heks blad is pretty good like I said earlier ^^
2452446 yeah, you're right
. I like it and I can even work with the translation to make something funny or have an awkward moment.(not sure if going to actually do this though.)
It's not that bad, and i'm interested about Heks Blad and her family, though you could've lead onto that a bit more slowly. Anyway still a great story and i will be awaiting the next chapter.
2783292 I could have? Care to explain a bit more?
Edit: Wait, no nevermind. Sleepy brain finally got it.
Pretty good. How long until the next chapter?
4503867 Sorry. It's currently on hiatus until I can figure out a proper direction. I hope I haven't upset you or anyone else, but I have to figure this out. I wrote this mainly on a whim and I realize that was a bad idea. Please be patient, okay?
4504422 Come up with an antagonistic hacker. Make them summon a bunch of glitches into the game. Have your characters need to find a way to stop the hacker by leveling up and stuff. That's pretty much the best direction you'll get with a video-game story like this.
4504462 I could do that. I just need to get my thoughts straightened out and I could possibly get back to work on this