Back to Normal
Chapter 15: Back to Normal
I awoke with five ponies standing above my bed, in the hospital. I looked around and groaned.
"Not again..."
{It's not that bad.}
Hey! You're back!
(Well, duh. It takes more than a stab from a feeble knife to kill us.)
I instantly remembered when the consciousnesses were talking after I thought I died.
How cheesy.
(I know, right? I only did it because I was paid money to sound wise and shit.)
I looked around at all of the ponies standing around my bed. The Princesses, Derpy and Dinky, and Pinkie Pie. Dinky smiled and winked at me.
(That girl is creepy.)
She then frowned, hearing what Anger just stated.
"If Bumble is still wanted, I am going to kill myself right now." I said.
"No, you revived Pinkie Pie, which we still can't figure out how, but, nonetheless, the bounty is called off." Princess Celestia explained. I sighed and laid back. I noticed Derpy couldn't contain herself, and she hugged me, breaking into tears.
"I thought I lost you forever!" She cried. Pinkie Pie, from the side, looked as if she had a sudden idea.
"Oh! OH! We should have a party! I'll invite everypony in Ponyville, and there will be balloons, punch, oh! and cake-"
"LIES!" I yelled suddenly.
(Portal reference FOR THE WIN!)
"I mean, a party sounds great." I said, Derpy still hugging me.
About a day later, I was allowed to leave the hospital. The doctor said that I was in the clear, and for some reason, everything was healed. No cuts, no bruises, no nothing. Except for a pink scar where Bumble stabbed me. I was heading towards my house, and there was an invitation for Pinkie Pie's party. It said to make me come to Sugarcube Corner at 8:00 tonight.
I wonder if Bumble will be coming.
[He should, it should be fun.]
(If by fun, do you mean totally fucking awesome?)
{Yes, I'm sure he should be able to.}
Let's swing by Rainbow Dash's house, maybe Bumble will be there.
I arrived at Rainbow Dash's house and knocked on the door. She opened it up, and smiled.
"Hey Stargazer! What brings you by?" She asked, sounding incredibly happy.
"Why are you so happy today?" I asked.
"Bumble became my coltfriend today." She replied.
That early?
(What's with all the relationships right now?)
"Um, where did Bumble go, by the way?" I asked.
"Oh, he went to a friends' house." She replied.
"Okay, see you later." I said, walking away.
"Wait." She grabbed my arm.
"I want to know how you beat me when Bumble was being chased, and how there were five of you when we cornered him in Sweet Apple Acres." She said.
Uh, oh.
{Persistent one, isn't she?}
"I can only tell you one of those stories right now. You see, when you were all chasing Bumble, I turned to fight. There's this little power or something that kicks in when I have a vengeance or am trying to protect something. Thus, making me twice as better at fighting." I explained.
"Yeah, right." She said back.
"Listen, all you know is that I beat you, that's all there is to it. I need to see a friend." I said, and pulled my arm away.
"Well, I want some answers later." She said. I flew off, ready to see Derpy.
I knocked on the door, and she opened it.
"Hi, Stargazer! Can I help you?" She asked.
"Okay, Derpy- No, I'll call you by your real name. Ditzy, you have been in my life for about 3 years now, and we work together. As news from Dinky, you have been very depressed until you met me, and well, I feel just about the same. So, will you be my marefriend?" I attempted.
(Dude, you're screwed.)
She looked around.
"You're not very good at this, are you?" She asked.
"Honestly? No." I replied. She pulled me into a long hug.
"And that's why I love you. Because you don't plan for anything, you only do something when the time is right, and you trust your friends." She broke the hug.
"I will." She said. We then pulled into a loving kiss.
[Awwww!]
{Yes, they do go well together.}
(I can only agree. Even though this is really cheesy. If this were a movie, it would be a mare-flick.)
<Eh, they love each other. Why not?>
I hope this day never ends.
(Well, its about to get better. Look at the time!)
I broke the kiss and asked,
"What time is it?" She turned and looked at the clock, she gasped.
"7:55!"
"Let's go to the party." I said. And we walked off, to Sugarcube Corner, to start this party.
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(Now that we're out of that lovey-dovey stuff, lets move on to something more important.)
Hey! That was important!
(Nopony asked you.)
{Anyways, we seem to be a... little short on main characters right now.}
[Yeah, we need more.]
<So, advertisement!>
(Would you like to be part of this pathetic, love-filled story?)
I can edit you out of the story anytime I want, bitch.
{Well, you can be a part of it.}
[You can send us your OC's, characters, anything! We need more characters.]
<While we do have some planned, we need more.>
(So, in the comments, or by PM, send us a message about your character, and maybe a picture to go with it.)
{The most likely chance, it will be in the story.}
[Make sure to send tons of info, name, cutie mark, human name if they are from Earth, etc.]
<The best way is to use a picture.>
(And the best part, you will be credited in the story and shouted out in the chapter your character arrives.)
{So yeah. Basically it.}
I will be waiting. If you choose to, that is.
(SEE YOU LATER!)
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Alright, alright, I see. I apologise.
I just want to help you, or at the very least give you some tips to improve your writing. Let's just put that out in the open where everyone can see it.
Now I'm not gonna accuse either of you bad story writing. Personally, I love it when two authors work together to write a story, each told from their own perspective and style of writing. I'm also not gonna tell you to give up, because that never helps anyone. However, I just feel that you shouldn't need to resort to an ass pull to get your character out of a problem. At the moment he's basically God.
Try giving him some limits, or flaws, or a problem he or any other mary sue can't solve on their own. Also resist given him any new powers without an appropriate amount of foreshadow.
And to Brony4Ever, I don't have the time to read your story yet, but I'll get around to it. I assume you're doing a good job, so I'll just say "good job, mate.".
Finally, Importing other peoples OCs. This has the potential to be either really great, or end really horribly. I would recommend you be careful.
Slightly calmed down
Nazkan
P.S. The "Don't like it, Don't read it" while a valid option, makes you seem the tiniest bit childish. I'll decide when I want to leave this story.
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Okay?
Okay.
I am a child. 11 to be exact.
Bitch 216461
I am going to italy tomorrow because I was told this morning
I am feeling so much better
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We will miss you A LOT.
Have fun, though!
Warmest regards,
Burritoburger.
Plus, I have never been out of the country.
WHEN I GROW UP IMMA MOVE TO CANADA.
Sound like a plan, eh?
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I think so eh? SO what do you do for a living eh?
I drive plans eh? What kind of plans eh? This one eh? Oh thats great eh? O_O
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Ya think reading my little dashie would be a good idea eh?
But seriously, I was on the verge of tears at the very end.
That is the best and saddest story I have ever read.
And so, once my parents got home, they noticed that I looked sad, and they asked,
"What's wrong?" And I replied.
"I just read the saddest thing ever." And my mom asked,
"What was it about?" And I simply looked at her.
"The love between a man and his daughter."
You finaly read my little dashie eh? Took you forever eh? Its pretty much one of the most popular stories on this website and you haven't viewed it until just then, Im mad at you eh?
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Actually, I looked at it on google docs, got visit more than one site, eh?
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Your complicated, I like that eh?
On the first day of christmas my true love came to me! A beer!
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On the second day of Christmas, my true love came to me, two turtle necks
and a beer!....
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I like how you knew that! Ever watch cowbell?
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FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU
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Derp derp much? lol
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No, my badass brother showed me it.
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It didn't show up derp derp derp derp derp derp sonic derp fooL!
Also, no new chapter today, I was busy watching ponies on MAD.
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Everything makes sense, and will be approved, as soon as I understand one thing:
What is a falut?
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OH WAIT!
Were you trying to say, Derpy's Fault?
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So, is he a relative of Derpy? Or is he part of Derpy's story come to life?
That I don't get.
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So, he came out of Derpy's story? It sounds like he either magically came out of a story or is related to Derpy somehow. Which is it?
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Okay, I will just make up a reason why he is there.
hey dude, you already kow my charecter, and feel free to add my OC at any time you want, its totaly cool with me. but you can only use my OCs on one condition, I get to use Stargazer and Bumble in one of my stories. peace little brony.
hey dude, you already kow my charecter, and feel free to add my OC at any time you want, its totaly cool with me. but you can only use my OCs on one condition, I get to use Stargazer and Bumble in one of my stories. peace little brony.