I'm back with more poems that I took the time to rewrite as stories. I've decided to leave the super dark crap outta this one, so enjoy the lighter poetry. However, leaving dark out DOES NOT mean that I'm leaving the sad feels out. Though not dark, this stuff will be bittersweet as 67% cocoa dark chocolate. Lots of sad d'awws and happy crying.
Volume 2: Dedicated to a few of the shippings within the Mane 6. At least, the ones I like. o3o TwiShy.
Poem 1: Far Away: Twilight's been a Princess for a while now, and she really misses Fluttershy. So much, in fact that she's been watching her every night through her faithful telescope.
Poem 2: Lonely Valentine's Day: Being a princess gets pretty lonely. Though surrounded by ponies constantly, Twilight learns that being alone is not the same as being lonely.
Poem 3: There Will be a Day: Fluttershy's been depressed lately, but has been hiding it too well. She's now planning to risk absolutely everything and tell Twilight of her feelings. Before she goes off to do so, she takes a moment to look back at her rough past and look ahead to imagine a happy future. THIS WILL DIRECTLY CORRELATE WITH THE NEXT POEM/STORY.
I like the rhyming scheme in the opening. The whole section made the story come to a surprising full circle in the end. Got invested enough to think that if I were Fluttershy, I'd have been moderately creeped out... sufficing to say it ultimately made sense in the end. Kewl
so lovely and brilliant, poor twi
Poor Twi, she misses her little butterfly so much
Ooh, there's more to come. Hopefully Twi has the good sense not to be quite THAT forward if she summons the courages to admit her feelings
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Again, this is by far my proudest poem. It means the most to me, and it was a defining moment that made me write this. The repetition of 'Far away' was the part that really makes this poem strike home.
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Not all ofthis is TwiShy.There will be other pairings in it, andthe story bits in this volume are meant to stand on their own as individual stories. I probably will not revisit this or expand upon this, but if I get all of my current crap out, and have no other ideas, I'll come back and continue it as its own story.<3 DarqFox
Again, it seems, my poetry is ill received. Why did they downvote? They make me sad for not leaving reason...
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most probable reason for down vote is they has no love for TwiShy
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I've read sometimes people down vote a story without leaving an explanation because it has an element or two they don't like. Downvoting sometihng for being what its supposed to be I just don't get
I try to reserve downvotes for stories which are poorly written, poorly executed, or obvious pleas for attention
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I stand corrected. I've now changed the devotion to solely TwiShy. However, it will not be coherent. All of these stories are meant to stand alone entirely.
<3 DarqFox
I'm into this story, and very much hope to see it continue. I think you do have a gift for poetry.
The one minor quibble I might make is that, after reading this (and Volume One before it), I get the sense that you're very fixated on the whole "Twilight is trapped in her royalty" thing. And while this can be an interesting theme, it felt a little heavy-handed at times (at least to me
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However, a small flaw in an otherwise great fic.