Something has come to Equestria. It has traveled the stars, finally arriving. What it is, is unknown. What it wants, is unknown. All that is known is what it brings: a new beginning.
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DarkPhoenix
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OH YEA! This is amazing... Obviously you have some sneaky plans for the future with characters and I can't wait to see what happens!
2313760 I will neither confirm nor deny having sneaky plans, only that I have plans.
Hmm... I must say that I'm not really sure where you plan to go from here. Pretty much everyone is dead. Will fav and keep reading but not really sure where you could go with this start that would have any hope. Any idea of what kind of time updates to the story will be made?
2317451 I've already started work on chapter 3, though I won't give out any sort of updating schedule because there's no way I'll stick to it. I'll try my best to get out new chapters without long periods of downtime.
Well, what have we here? A story by DarkPhoenix? I look forward to seeing where this goes.
2322303 I was wondering who the first person that I edit for would be to find my fic. Congrats!
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Roflknief was kind enough to inform me.
Wooo! Looks great and I love that ending!!
Yay the first glimpse of hope appears.
Great story . Keep it up
All those words... They so good...
I most certainly enjoyed the tones in this chapter. They were a pleasant change in pace and were executed well.
Well then...
Shit just got real, yo.
Felt kind of rushed, to be completely honest, but I'm still liking the idea of the story.
I'm really liking how this is written. It's not too short, not too cut-and-dry, but it's not wordy either. It's paced pretty well, even despite my previous comment in chapter one about it seeming to be rushed. I take that back: this is progressing rather well. I'm rather anxious about all the mysterious shit that was dumped on them just before Captain James Celestia Kirk hit warp factor "whut?" and sent them into the middle of ice-cream land. What is this gem with the intricate designs on its' surface? Is Princess Luna actually dead? And what of Shining Armor? I recall there being a slight glow about his horn before his "demise". Maybe he made the jump as well? These things and more will be read...
IN THE MORNING!!!
Cuz Ah'm fuckin' tired, yo...
I love how the snow scene played out in this chapter. It was so cute, I thought I was going to start coughing up rainbows or the fucking Nyan Cat.
Very well done, here, mate. 
Some interesting facts in here that i think should be in the series. Like the history behind the Everfree for example. Well made story :)
At last! I was wondering when the next update would come. I was beginning to think it would never be finished
This is a real edge-of-your-seat story. The tension is killing me /)^3^(\
It's also double the normal length!!
Totally worth waiting for...
i was picturing the ball of fire to be like the one in halo 4 that holds the didact
New favorite chapter
Please finish, this next chapter, I've grown quite impatient and I NEED to finish this one, I am counting on your success
4473122 The next chapter is almost done. It'll be to my pre-reader within a few days. Hopefully I can get it posted soon after that.
To everyone: Sorry for the delay. Real life has been keeping me very busy getting the book ready to go to print. That process is almost done, so chapters on both my stories should pick up soon.
4484423 got it!
4484423 Alright I'm cool, I just needed to know if you quit on us or something, thankfully that was a no
4573249 Nope, no quitting here. And the chapter is now in editing, so go poke my editor to get it out faster.
Well, as an editor, I can say that three weeks of the delay was my fault.
I don't have any qualms about making excuses though, summer classes are intense!
Still, I think this chapter is one of the best, there is just so much going on!
I hope you all enjoy it!
The first chapter was interesting, but I have to say, this one really disappoints me. Either you're a fan of FFXIV or you've watched their End of an Era/A Realm Reborn video for the game. This chapter was pretty much an exact copy of the first part of that video with the Mane Six and the Princesses being substituted in place of the video's characters. This really killed my interest in the fic considering the whole cosmic anomaly falling towards the earth and the events of this chapter was ripped from them.
5134868 I make no secret of that video being my inspiration. I can say that I've never actually played FFXIV. My knowledge of that game begins and ends with that video. Well, that and it was apparently so bad upon release that Square-Enix actually apologized for it.
However, I can also say that everything from chapter 3 onwards is original. At least to my knowledge it is.
If the first two chapters turn you off from reading the rest of the story, then I'm sorry to hear that. I value and appreciate all of my readers and their opinions. I would like it if you were to give the rest of the story a chance. If the reactions of my other readers is anything to go by, you won't be disappointed.
WOW! That was a long read. Haven't read anything that long is some time.
Very well written. I am looking forward to finding out the rest of the story(though I surmise it will be very lengthy with many more chapters and with take quite some time...years even
).
Quite the interesting ....alternate reality/twist...type thing....obviously set just before the end of season 3 (Twilight returning the Elements and becoming an Alicorn...etc).
This fanfic also would make an excellent movie...or movie series. Someone should totally make this a fanfilm LOL! (Of course, it's not kid friendly though.)
One question though.... what happened to Celestia's soul gem? Did Twilight take it with her on their journey? I don't recall it being mentioned after ch. 9.
Can't wait for the next chapters!
CAPITAAAN, we have CONTACT!
This story is to sad for me to read, but damn your a good writer. I had actually stopped after the first two chapters a few days ago, but I kept thinking of this story and had to read another chapter to get it out of my system. I'll leave you a thumbs up in hopes you're able to be shown around the site a bit more, but this story just isn't my cup of tea. Good luck writing it.
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Thank you for your feedback and compliments. It's always good to hear that my story can impact someone to the degree that they keep thinking about it outside of actively reading it. I'm sorry that this story isn't quite your cup of tea, though I do extend my thanks for reading even one paragraph, much less three chapters.
Thank you for the thumbs up!
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A fanfilm? I would certainly not be opposed to that.
As for the gem, I believe there's a throwaway line in there about Twilight giving it to Cadance to keep safe. I don't detail exactly where it went, but just imagine it has a place of honor in the vault.
And yes. I started this fic prior to Season 3's airing. In terms of canon, Seasons 1 and 2 are canon to this story, and I have nitpicked things from season 3 to keep canon, such as Discord's reformation, without breaking the canon of this story. Season 3's ending with Twilight becoming an Alicorn, as well as Season 4 onwards, is non-canon to this story. It's not AU enough to require the tag, it's just more due to when the story was started and the ideas it uses. If I were to include some canon elements from the show, such as Alicorn Twilight, it would break this story.
Thank you for your interest and feedback on this story! I hope you continue to enjoy it.
Chapter 5:
Chapter 7:
Either Twilight thinks Celestia is perfect, or she doesn't. Pick one. Having a character do a complete 180 on their view of something in just 2 chapters, especially when you use a dozen paragraphs on the subject, is extremely jarring.
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Oh man... Thank you for pointing that out to me. That is indeed a large inconsistency. Twilight's views in chapter 7 are the correct ones, and I have gone back and edited chapter 5 to represent that. Can't believe myself and my editors never found that.
Thanks again for the feedback!
Love your story!! :) It's so good!
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoy it.
Another excellent chapter! I really do like the bits with Berry and Twilight. She is sooo gonna have to adopt Berry after this is all over with.
"Were it so easy..."
Been a while since this was updated. Hope all is well.
I really like how, in your story, the plot features the Main 6 and how they react and deal with such a world ending threat and tragic losses. It feels very close to a cannon from the show and almost like it could be a script for the upcoming MLP movie. lol
This was the first long fic I had ever read. Since then, having recently finished Fallout Equestria...and just heard about the finishing if the side story FoE: Project Horzions which is 2x as long...I can certainly understand the enormity and dedication it takes to just to read through long stories...let alone write one.
At the current pace this fic is written in, I forsee it being very long with many more chapters...perhaps reaching or surpassing FoE in length. Understandably, a huge undertaking. It is a really good story and adventure so far, one that certainly deserves the chance to be rated up there along side of FoE for being "epic".
I really hope that this story continues to completion.....but its quite understandable that life and other things get in the way. It truly would be a shame to see this awesome project never finished or outright canceled, (as I have seen happen with a few other large fan projects and fics I have been following, sometimes simply because it became far more extensive and involved work then the creator/team had originally intended it to be and thus was no longer able to pursue it to completion.)
Best wishes!
I didn't realize I was at the end of the current posted chapters. I gotta have more. This is like crack cocaine of stories. I really hope there will be more. Keep up the fantastic work.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/25569/dominant-species
Same name, totally different stories.
Alright, so far so good. You have caught my interest.
Well...
Bloody hell.
Or...she never really controlled the Sun. Considering how this story is going, I will bet on the latter.
Well, at least they are safe. As safe as they can be with that star dragon roaming the land.
Well, they are safe.
For now, at least...
I accidentally skipped half this chapter and started to read the next one, so I already knew they had found everypony. Whoopsie!