Hope you enjoy! Based off of Eternities end by David Larson. Twilight visits back to the graves of her old friends.
Watch the video first!!!
http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=xgxf_zV_nfc
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I have seen the video. It was so beautiful and it made me cry
This is a read later for me!
It was pretty good I guess, Though I would have done it differently... There were a few lines that repeated similar lines like "Then she turn... ect." also I caught an AN that needed to be an A in there. Can't find it now. Also the lines of dialog should be there own line, not crumpled together in the sentence. Still, good job.
2294530>>2294561 Thanks. I'll look into that, and it also didn't help for the fact that I literally only put an hour or two into this.
Wow this touched my heart
wow this was sad but mostly happy i personally dislike stories surrounding the immortality of twilight but this one was great. just the some grammar errors someone else already pointed out. good job not bad for a 2 hour work
SHUT UP AND TAKE MY FEELS YOU EVIL PERSON I'm Gunna go cry nows
2296209thanks I probably should've taken longer on it though. I may start making poems and songs to fanfics now! Idk I might...
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. the music that inspired this story is great btw really carries the feelings of this story.
no problem. to me it was good but to an author when the work is done he will always feel that they should have done more. like i said you did a good job with the time you invested on it and you should give it a go with the poems, you'll never know till you try
I've seen the video on YouTube at least on hundred times and cried at least a million tears. Goodness, I just wanna go die in a hole.
your story is great, but also sad. 
But the elements of Harmony can never die!
2307477>>2310626 thanks Alicorn!
And iMac sadly, they cannot last forever but their memories and actions will be left behind. Whoa, a little philosophical there.
2310753 But I feel that the elements of Harmony should have long life spans like the princesses.
2312600 Well I'm not too sure, but no one really lives forever, unless they are given eternal life. Everyone eventually dies. I guess they'll get replaced....Maybe they were called for that specifically because it was their time.
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Everything has it's time, the fun part is seeing what it does until that time.
Finally made a little time to read. It was pretty good. Not quite as powerful as the video, and a little cheesey I have to admit, how she walked up to each of their graves and gave a monologue, but still very sweet.
Favorite line; When Twilight was at Spike's grave:
So nice job here man.
2347916thanks. I wasn't really trying to go towards cheesey, but that's just how it is! Either way, at least it had one good sentence in there!
lol i just tricked my mom we wer gonna watch the Incredibles but i switched the disc with MLP:FIM she is gonna be sooo mad! but i bet her face will be soooooo worth it!
scootangel:
2320632lol i just tricked my mom we wer gonna watch the Incredibles but i switched the disc with MLP:FIM she is gonna be sooo mad! but i bet her face will be soooooo worth it!
2862477 lol wut?
2862670 i was putting "The Incredibles" into the DVD player and switched it with "A Cantorlot Wedding" and I was right, she got sooo mad! but it wasREALLY funny! haha!
