The Battle for the Weak

by Wisp_Flare

Taking Charge

The town of Ponyville was a small establishment compared to home. There were many different shops and stands selling all different types of items and foods.
"There are lots of unicorns in Ponyville but what do you need them for?" RaindowDash asked from the sky. I frowned not sure as to how to answer her.
"I..um need to ask them about magic."
Rainbow looked at me funny.
"What about it?"
"Wait now one minute, I thought ya said ya had something to deliver?" AppleJack said in suspension.
'They'll catch me if I directly lie to them.' I thought.
"I do but I can't deliver it yet with this wing." AppleJack looked at me with a raised eyebrow. Looking ahead I watched as a white unicorn lifted a basket of food with her magic and started walking contently along the road, that is until I trotted up to her.
"Excuse miss but by chance do you happen to know any healing magic?" She reared a little startled by my sudden appearance.
Frowning at me she gave it thought as she looked me over.
"Well hi to you to," she rolled her eyes. "If you mean to fix that wing I don't have enough magic for that, only gifted unicorns that service the princess would know top of the line magic like that. Your best bet would probably be to go get it looked at by a doctor and pronto." Her worried expression shocked me for a moment until I remembered she mentioned a princess. Before I could ask though AppleJack interrupted and the unicorn hurried away.
"I'll catch you gals in a bit I got somepo...er I mean errands to run around town. I'm pretty sure Rainbow and FlutterShy can help you around until I get back though Shower."
"Actually I have a few weather jobs to do real quick. FlutterShy take care of Shower for now maybe grab a bite to eat." Rainbow finished.
'Well this is awkward...' I smiled at FlutterShy sheepishly as the other two mares rushed off.
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"Twilight I don't think you understand, something is really off about this pony." AppleJack stressed as she followed Twilight into her kitchen. Twilight sat at the table content on finishing her oatmeal. As she went to take a bite she noticed immediately that the once warm and full bowl was empty. Looking around she frowned as she saw Spike licking the remaining oatmeal from his fingers and placing the spoon in the wash.

Sighing Twilight turned to AppleJack.
"I don't know AppleJack, from what you guys described she just sounds like a lost Pegasus."
"But what if she's a evil lost Pegasus?" Rainbow said dramatically landing next to Twilight.
"I'm awfully worried about her wing mainly..." AppleJack mumbled.
"And she has this weird amulet thing. She really starting freaking out when it wouldn't work." Rainbow ranted in worry and suspension.
At the mention about her wing and an amulet Twilight looked up in alert.
"Ok wait wait wait, so a hurt, lost Pegasus with a magically amulet? I don't like the sound of that.."

"I think I agree with Twilight, AppleJack. I know we've had our share of evil amulets before but to top the cake she's looking for unicorns too." Rainbow Dash stated.
"Unicorns? Why unicorns?" Twilights ear flattened at the sound of that.
"Maybe it's so she can drain them of their magic and refill her amulet!!" Everypony jumped as Pinkie Pie came out of no where and pretended to suck the magic out of Rainbow.
"Rainbow don't forget she did save FlutterShy from the Alicorn she saw." AppleJack glared at Rainbow as things were starting to get out of hoof.

"Hm...maybe I will write the Princess just in case. In the mean time you guys bring her here. I'll talk to her."
"Twilight, are you sure that's a good idea?" Rainbow asked in worry. "I mean she did ask for the strongest unicorn we know..."
Suddenly all of Twilight's friends were looking at her in worry. Her eyes widened as a blush came to her cheeks.
"It'll be fine guys, I promise. Spike? Spike! I need to send a letter!"
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I picked at the hay fries awkwardly as I watched FlutterShy eat her salad. Suddenly being left with the pony who's house I destroyed was not a good idea, especially if it was a pony as shy as FlutterShy. I also didn't have any money so she had to buy my meal. I sighed at the thought. How could I possibly ever pay FlutterShy back when I couldn't even handle my current given task. Looking down at the orb I frowned more. I had no luck finding a talented unicorn as the first one said. They were either too young or not talented enough to give me the treatment I needed. I knew no earth pony doctor would be able to help me either. At this rate I'd have to be totally honest with them, I was getting desperate. Every second here anything could be happening back at home. The tyrant could have destroyed everything by now for all I know.

"A..are you ok?" I heard a small voice from across me. Looking up at FlutterShy I felt a sting in my eye as tears were falling. Quickly I wiped them away and shook my head willing myself to focus.
"Y..yea I just miss home." FlutterShy smiled at me.
"W-what's your home like?" My eyes lite up as I grow still.
"It was beautiful.." I said smitten with a small smile.
"W-was?" She questioned with a polite glance.
"Uh..y-yea I mean is." I grinned as I recalled the beauty of my home world back from when I was a little filly.
"The forest are huge,plentiful, and bursting with life. The plains are wide and miles long. There were so many flowers, and plants and beauty. The farms were amazing, corn, wheat, apples, peaches, tomatoes, rice you name it we had it." My grin grow as I saw FlutterShy looked just as excited as I was.
"Oh my that all sounds lovely. I hope I get to see it one day.." She said shyly. My eyes widen as I realized the dream in my head and the world I lived in now. My ears dropped as I recalled reality and what my world was now like.
"Anyway..FlutterShy I just wanted to tell you sor-" I jumped as RainbowDash landed on our table knocking my hay fries to the ground.
"Shower Rain, come on we have a pony we want you to meet!" She smiled as she jumped off the table. Standing up I got another scare as a pink earth pony jumped out of no where and started talking 100 miles per minute. Try as I may I couldn't catch most of what she said and looked at FlutterShy for help. She simply shrugged.

"Pinkie Pie you can talk and introduce yourself later." Rainbow said as she pulled Pinkie away.
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RainbowDash's eagerness to get me here was kinda suspension but what could happen?
Stepping through the door of the tree I could tell it was a library right away.
Once the door closed behind me AppleJack and two other ponies I didn't know came into the room from the study. They both were unicorns.
I grow nervous at the number of people in the room. There was six in all.
"Um...what is this about?" My body grow tense looking at all of them one by one. Rainbow had said something about meeting one pony not three. Glancing at the door behind me I noticed Rainbow was already in front of it. FlutterShy looked worried as she stayed by my side.
"Hello, my name is Twilight Sparkle" The purple unicorn stepped up to me nervously as she introduced herself.
"U-um..I'm Shower Rain.." Her mark stood out to me, it was a star surrounded by littler stars.
"My friend's told me you were looking for unicorns..?" She paused not knowing where to take the conversation. I was hesitant to ask her anything. Surrounded by this may ponies, they must be suspension of me. "They also told me that you wouldn't give them any clear reasons as to why.."

I sat there for a moment panicking. It was my own fault I was in this situation now.
"If you want my help..that's fine but you won't get it until I feel I can trust you and how can I when you've been lying to my friends up until now..?" She said seriously.
I gave a heavy sigh as I let myself relax.
'Wisp...what should I do...?'
As I felt the orb around my neck move I reached up to my head and pulled the leather hat off my head for the first time since being here. I whipped my white mane out of my face again and then watched as the orb floated off my neck and in to the center of the room. It glow weakly for a second then a very faint transparent figure appeared out of the grow. Leaving everyone in shock.
"My name is Shower Rain...my friends call me Dodge and this..this is my companion and best friend FlareWisp. Please...we need your help." I stood tall and looked at Twilight with dead serious eyes.

Comments

[Nolongerposting]

Hi. I've noticed all of the negativity this story has been getting and I wanted to say to just ignore it. I have really enjoyed this story and I think that you should continue. I would also like to help you and point out a few mistakes you have, the biggest one being names. Almost everypony else spells the main six's names like this: Rainbow Dash, Twilight Sparkle, Rarity, Pinkie Pie, Applejack, Fluttershy. And going on this pattern I believe that your characters' names should probably be separate like this: Shower Rain, Flare Wisp. These are however your choices and you don't have to change the way you're spelling the names. It is just a suggestion. I have also noticed a few errors throughout the story. They are small silly mistakes that would probably be caught if you read through your story once or twice before publishing a chapter. For the most part you just left a small word out or a word or two got mixed up and were in the wrong place. I did notice at least once you seemed to have forgotten the suffix on a word. Again these are little mistakes that would probably be caught with a read through before you post the chapter. I have also noticed that you only have one chapter up to the public. I don't know if you're aware of that or not, it was just something I noticed because I read the rest of your story before and I enjoyed it but just having this chapter up makes the story hard to understand because of the missing chapters. This is all supposed to be helpful and not hurtful. I am sorry if I have hurt your feelings in anyway but I really hope that you continue this story because I am eager to learn what will happen next. And if I hurt your feelings I am truthfully sorry.

[Wisp_Flare]

2301720 oh lol no you haven't hurt me at all i'm a writing after all (hope one day to be a author) I thank you for your help and no I didn't know my chapters weren't up lol i'm still getting use to the format of this website so i might of hit something by mistake idk I'll try looking into it right now thanks again

[Nolongerposting]

2301966
No problem. I'm also aiming to be a writer. I'm also getting used to the format and I've written the entire chapter 2 of my story but haven't posted it because it's in a notebook not online and I haven't attempted to try writing anything on my story cuz I'm currently using my phone and not a computer. I am aiming on tackling that problem in a few minutes. And I'm glad to have helped out. And remember that no matter how many negative comments or thumbs down this story gets I'm still gonna be reading it.

[Wisp_Flare]

2301980 lol thank you so much that encourages me I just wish the people that gave me thumbs down would tell me why so I can write better lol. Its harder to get better if just a click of a button decides your fate. lol

[Nolongerposting]

2302124
They probably just didn't like the ideas behind your story. And unfortunately they felt like they had to dislike it. Probably they were expecting something different and were disappointed by that.

[Wisp_Flare]

2302142 shrugs probably lol

[Brutydude]

Idk why people dont like it.
I like it
So please keep going

[Wisp_Flare]

2302502 thanks lol

[Brutydude]

2302988
Lol np

[HypherRanger_04]

After seeing the first, i began to like it. So keep it up^_^

[Wisp_Flare]

3719080 oh ty lol