you ever thought of getting a professional writer?

Fantastic story so far!
Can't wait to finish this!

Dude... Just... Wow. I don't know what to say, this is just brilliant. You have a new fan now, I look forward to reading more stories of yours.

". Big Macintosh looked at the young Applejack" - Why is there a period in front of this? e.deviantart.com/emoticons/moods/surprise/confused.gif

This story needs to have more views... Like, yesterday!

That was a beautiful chapter. I think this could use a sad tag at some points.

This make me cry like Rarity and Fluttershy ...
At the same time

Christ, there's, like, a branch or something in my eye. I'm ok.

That rainbow lead her home once. Looks like she's getting to find her home a second time. RainbowJack is my OTP.