Waking up in a dark, dank, tunnel miles away from home isn't the first thing Reign wanted to do, but soon to find out, him and his friends are part of something much, much larger of a divine plan to shape their destines,
For Better, or for worse...
Author: DJ Scratchjack
Editors and Proofreaders: BlackjackOrBust and Cooperdawg
Check out the wiki for the story!
Inspired by the Works of Somber and KKat, and all great writers of FO:E.
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Thank you!
6.5:4 Like-Dislike Ratio and a sea of deleted comments?
Hoah boy, this can't be good...
How about instead of deleting criticism and your own arguments you try and cope with it to improve? I'm actually going to read part of this now so I can be as critical as I fucking want.
Also,
>Somber
>Great writer of FO: E
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I suppose that's correct for the most part but-
Comment posted by Mr Pones deleted at 7:23am on the 29th of april, 2013
I'm pretty sure it wasn't explicitly stated in the original what year it was, and i'm guessing Equestria has a much different/ distant time period compared to that of our own. I see you've used the year from the fallout series though.
I know, right? This seemed like a kind of odd one-off in joke, because we all explicitly know what's going to happen later on.
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What is with this guy and Octavia/ DJ-PON3? Hes mentioned them twice already. Are they known personally to him or what...?
Because a battlefield where (and i'm quoting you here) "Pony and Zebra carcasses littered the the ground, and blood and viscera was in floating pools and streaks across the walls" is somewhere you can crack a smile.
Oh god what.
Please no.
Jesus fuck man that's ridiculous. The missle can blow a hole roughly the size of a small house?
Anyway, from what i've seen so far IT'S NOT INHERENTLY TERRIBLE, it just could use a lot of polish and a decent editor for the clearing of repetitive words/ grammatical errors. Your rating though... im guessing at some point you pulled a somber and fucked up horribly and/ or messed with the canon in some way.
I'll leave the rest up to someone who has more time to read through.
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Srry bout the deleted comments, They were clogging up my P.O.S. computer! lol! Also, I dont care for the dislikes, I'm doing what I wanted to do for a while and If other people hate for creativness, so be it.
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Deleted comments= clogged computer. srry, not all of us have perfectly working computers. Thank you for the Constructive Crit. I apperciate it alot! Judge after the book is done, things WILL come together, just give it time
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before my editor touched the Fic, The first two chapters accidently got published w/o editing... IT...WAS...BAD... just leave it at that LOL! so, I got Alot of flak and dislikes. oh well! At least I got a few watches and followers and faithful Critisms from fine people.
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I don't want to sound like an asshole, but that's the issue. This isn't very creative.
Fallout Equestria came out some time after the birth of the fandom, and stands as one of the most well-known and one of the best Crossover-esque stories out there (It's also one of the longest).
This is simply a spinoff, which there is far too many of. Especially FE.
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hmm... Not very creative, huh?... Okay, I'll see into that... Thank you for the comment.
and yes, I agree that there excessive amounts of spinoffs of FO:E. But every single one has there own twist to it, which people enjoy or hate on. I'm just doing what I wanted to write since BEFORE Mn7 or Ph even started, but never got the chance till recently.
again, thanks for the comment!
Okay, For all that are reading this fic and wondering "What the hell is going on?!" let me explain...
1. The first 2 chapters were already to be published in febuary. I Didn't have a editor till the middle of march. On the night/morning of the 6th/7th of march, My computer decided to do it's random select box shit and I accidently pressed Publish. I screwed up. Now, I revised and edited (excluding minor problems, which I need to find) Everything through Word.( I know, Not the best idea, but in all honestly, It's all I have.) That is why all 95% of my dislikes are Dislikes. LOL
2. 99% of my book is written on a Windows XP At my High school, so it's not a ideal working station. When everytime I log into Fimfiction and load up My fic and It takes 10-15 minutes alone to load up the comments, its time to get rid of some old ones. I didn't delete them 'cause I cant handle crit., I deleted them so the would stop freezing my computer.
3. I take Critism well, as most people should do. I sit back and think to myself. "What do they mean? How do I make this better?" Then I think up of ways to be more progressive in my books and fics. I'm sorry that if you think It sucks. I honestly think It might suck for the first few chapters for everyone,too. BUT, I Will PROMISE that if ya'll keep on reading, IT WILL GET BETTER!
4. I wrote the backstory for Broken Reign last year, But with complications with the fic, I Had to put it on a halt. If Ya'll want to klnow his back story, I will try to put it on the Wiki ASAP.
-thank you for the reads and the Con. Crit. and giving me a insight on how this all works. To all who have read the fic so far and like it, I thank you. For the people who read it and didn't care for it, still a thank you, Its another tally to my reads. The rest, The critisms and the conclusion-jumpping is a interesting part of my day. I thank you!
--Now, I think I got what I wanted off my head, So BACK TO THE WRITING!! See you all in the next chapter!
start a new paragraph every time you switch dialog between characters, makes the story easier to read, prevents confusion as to who is talking and breaks up walls of text better than a random enter every now and then
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My editor is fixing the dialouge problems and grammer issues. Thank you foe the comment!
Geez... hate much? I don't think I've ever seen a FoE fic get so many dislikes on it's first day after being posted. Really, it's not all that bad after chapter 2. The first couple chapters are a little rough, but that's expected (at least, I've noticed it in most FoE fics, including my own).
As soon as I get caught up enough, I'll start that thing for you.
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nah, i had a little trouble in the beginning with editing. not to mention, my computer decided to post before i was even ready, so it was just a pile of blah.
but now,with my editors, its all clean, fixed-up, and ready to go.
Question: What color is Reign's coat? His mane and tail are red and black, based on this line:
But I can't seem to find what his coat color is.
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this is broken reign before he lost his leg, he is a bit taller than everypony else he knows, too.
you know what Cloud looks like?
it gives the right amount of detail, and it moves along at a steady pace.
it could probably use some rephrasing here and there, but other than that its a good start to a story
honestly this is nice so far mainly because it hasnt turned out to be one of the generic spin-offs that straight up talk about stuff that happened in the original in short this seems more like it's own story.................for now im posting this on chapter 3 so i could be disappointed but whatever as long as it's enjoyable i dont really give a damn
Im sorry i havnt produced anything for a long time. between my internet and my work destroying me, i never had time to sit down and do much.
i'm putting this on a haitus (a short on hopefully) so i dont worry so much about this project, catch up with crap at work, and start a new story. ne that doesnt go to hell as soon as its first chapter come out. lol
hopefully shite gets better. so till then, stay awesome and ill see yall soon.
--DJ
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sorry regolit, but thats what REALLY HAPPENS when fire and alcohol become mixed. and it only takes a few seconds to fatally injure someone. im sorry that you dont like it, and it hurts, but im not changing it. especially the whole chapter over three sentences.
The author is correct. High proof alcohol and flames creates a very hot but short lasting flame.
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okay.... im going to be honest. i have thought on it for a while, and due to work/family/personal issues, i will be ending this fanfic for a while.
for the readers and supporters of this fic, i cant thank you enough. truly. i appreiciate it.
fer not though, ill come back to it later, but for now... its going to be on ice for a while.
i apologize for this.
You know, I read this fic at some point... all the way up to chapter seven... but I even remember looking at it...