The back story behind Rainbow Dashes filly life is a mystery, until somepony asks her about it. This fic was inspired by a picture I saw on google from searching, my little pony friendship is magic cute pics... I thought it would make a good story, so I took it into my own hooves.
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This story could be a little more descriptive. I'll admit, I found some bits of of Chapter 2 a liiiitle boring. Maybe work on setting the atmosphere a little more? Second last paragraph of chapter 2; IMO, you rushed into the sonic rainboom bit a little too quickly. You could've used another few sentences or so to set the mood.
But anyway, overall, this sounds quite promising. Track+ 4 Stars! :D
I'm not really a big fan of short chapters, but hey, maybe that's your thing. It'd be great if they could be longer though. This is definitely something I'd wanna be reading into the wee hours of the morning.
Good story! I would have to agree with Price. Maybe a little more description would be good, but overall the story is great. Can't wait to see more!
Fallout much?
Nice!
this story is cute already
frist?
wait... how did you do that chapter 4 thing... its not posted yet lol
I bet it's Rainbow Dash... CALLED IT!
Nice chapter, but there is only one teensy weensy little thing you could fix, the length.
Try and extend 'em out longer, add in more description and action, it'll keep your viewers, er, viewing...
Thank celestia I went and proofread this, it looked bucking terrible!
I will patiently wait for more
Overall a great story, at first I thought the chapters were too short but now they seem to flow along nicely. I especially like where the story seems to be going, and it was slightly humorous when dash felt like she pulled a fluttershy. I really enjoyed it and I hope for more soon.
Also my other alias is cross off of everfree radio chat.
Wait, what's with all the commas?
Punctuation was discovered?
Anyway, I couldn't read this for the comma spam, try to get that fixed, will ya?
NONONONONO... Her Mother is FIREFLY from g1. lol.
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I based it off of my favorite FIM FIC, I put the browser info, at the bottom of the page. Once again, it is called mothers, by nightmysterio