Hello, all. I'm Cantus. I'm a fan of Mlp:FiM (just in case the site didn't give it away), and I'm submitting fics, so as to share with the rest of the community.
There are always things hidden from us, people who have gone before us and places that have been forgotten. Spike thinks that his world is over when he is kidnapped one night, and Twilight is left for dead in a burning tree. However, things are not as they seem - who is this strange person? Why is he being so respectful, considering what he's just done? And what does he want with Spike?
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♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪
Well, you shan't have to wait long :)
WHOA!
well, i saw that spike was a prince coming up but WHOA!
didnt see that he was the son of the FIRST king comin.
♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪
Yes, well, Dragon Eggs can last an awful long time without hatching, if they're not properly stimulated. "Stimulation" in this case usually meaning "Fire".
I like the concept of this story but the way you've written it...it's somewhat hard to follow. You've got all of the dialogue jammed together without any pauses or breaks, jumping from one character speaking to another without clear indication who's stopped talking. I would advice an editor to help fix these things. Despite this I recommend continuing this story. It's shaping up to be interesting.
5709 Thanks for the advice. I understand how important it is to be able to comprehend what's being written - after all, if you can't comprehend it you can't do any of the other fancy critiquing stuff (apologies for the buffyspeak) that we all so love.
Anyway, I'll do my level best to, at least, invoke a character's name before giving them the right of speech.
I hope that made sense...
Chap 5 is up. Word to the wise - Chap 6 is shaping up to be long, as in 4000 words long. I could feasibly split it into two chapters, but on the other hand it's so self-contained that doing so might confuse things, and that's not something I want to do. I'd appreciate comments on this, actually. If you have any sage advice on the topic, please leave it here and I'll take it in.
Adios for now,
Cantus
love it
give me a challenge of 4000 words. i need a good long story right now.
just get them up it could be 1000 words or it could be 999999999090 i dont care
Alright, everypony, Chap 6 is up. However, I've got something I need help with.
I sent this to Equestria Daily, hoping that they'd accept it. I'm quietly confident that the writing is good enough to meet their standards, even if i do say so myself
However, I got an email back from them today, telling me that it was too short. They need it to be 3000 words for the first chapter, and 2500 + for each other. I have a couple of options:
1 - Give up. Not going to happen.
2. - Add more words into each chapter. I could do this, but I'm fairly certain that in some cases it'd devolve into padding, and that's never good. I could probably manage it with chapters two through five, but adding 1000 words to the first chapter without going into serious padding would be tough.
3 - Clump the chapters together, such as Chap 1+2 are put into the same file and renamed chap 1. This wouldn't be so bad, although it would be inconvenient to reformat everything.
Any thoughts on what I should do?
What's Gravil gonna do? Also, why does the font go funny every time I type an I?
irony in dashs statement 'Trying to get your own back isn’t the same as attacking an innocent pony in their own home' also ive sided against luna and celestia first time against luna lol
***NOTICE***
TO ALL READERS
I'm re-uploading to EQD, but to do that I need more words in the chapters.
I can't seem to write more into the Chapters (they're fairly self-contained), so instead, I'm going to clump them together.
You will NOT need to re-read any previously read material. However, be advised.
The new Chapter 1 will actually be the current chapters One and Two put together.
New Chap 2 will be current Chap 3 and 4 put together.
New Chap 3 will be current Chap 5 and 6 put together.
And so on and so forth. Using this system, I should be able to get the whole story done in Six of the "Newstyle" Chapters, so I luckily shouldn't need to change too much. This is for your information.
I wish this wasn't necessary, but it seems like the best way to keep my existing readers without throwing away a shot a tEQD.
I hope you all find this acceptable.
The other chapters have been unpublished, but when you see them return it means twice as much Fanfic in your life.
This is good, no?
Anyway, I hope you can all get used to this.
Adios,
Cantus
the hell why was the story restarted
It wasn't. I've just unpublished the bits that are suboptimal until I have them re-edited. Got the guys at ponychan to give me a hand. Well, they will, when they get around to it...
I want to bitchslap Gravil upside his horns and tell him that no one knows what the fuck he's talking about.
Also, if you need someone to look over the other chapters, I'd be perfectly happy to do so.
You'll find out what he's talking about fairly soon.
And no, this isn't one of those cases where the author is all mysterious for a while without actually revealing anything of significance.
After all, I'm not Chris Carter.
I'd value your contributions, but I'm also putting this up on Ponychan for a more wide critique.
I just have to remind myself that the nice people who comment are trying to help me, not hurt me.
That's never easy, but I'll manage it, somehow.
To all those who read this story when it was first posted:
Hey. You might have noticed that things have been awfully turbulent with the chapters - they've been taken down, put up and taken down again, and you might be wondering what in Celestia's name I'm doing.
Well, allow me to explain. I'm trying to get this submitted to EQD, but it needs to be better. I've submitted it for review, and fixed several problems with it, but in the process of doing so I've come up with new ideas that I've put into the fic.
As a result of that, it's taking ages to write everything and update it, and the chapters need to be rewritten from scratch and it's rargglfarglbargl../.,/.le
*pant*
Er, I mean, it's hard work.
Anyway, thank you for reading this and I ope you guys still enjoy reading this.
fake 'n' gay
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My opinion would be to option 3. It seems like the least difficult and for your fans (which you have made me,) so we wouldn't have to skim each chapter again to see what you added, though I would enjoy that. That's my three bits, hope to read more soon!
Ah. Well, thank you.
That announcement is rather old, so the information isn't so terribly relevant any more.
The aforementioned changes have already been made, so no worries.
I'm just glad somepony's enjoying this work of mine.
Anyway, Chapters One through Five contain the entire story so far, so no need to worry about that.
CH Six has been begun, but it probably won't be done for quite some time.
Ciao, Cantus
23785 Heh, sorry I forget to read the date of posts sometimes.
don't worry about rushing, I know how long it can take to write a story. I have trouble even trying to finish up a 3,000 word chapter for my fic 
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Awesome, I really like this chapter, and the pacing is great. A few spelling mistakes but nothing that ruins the story in anyway. I love how you characterized the hydra (or at least I think it is a hydra). Can't wait to read what happens next!
Moar!
Loving this story so far, and I can't wait for the inevitable reunion scene. I imagine everypony will want to bring him home, but by then Spike has started to like this whole King of the Dragons gig. Then, of course, he hits on Rarity.
Can't wait for the next epic chapter! Soon reckoning! SOON! THERE WILL BE RETRIBUTION!!!
An update! yay!
Ho, ho this is interesting. And, um . . . good title choice as well, lol.
Really enjoyed this opening mate, top fucking notch. Your writing style is tolkienesque, but that's okay, considering this is fantasy. The fact that it manages to do that without becoming purple is pretty impressive. Occasionally, you forget to identify the character who's doing the thing that they're doing, but I reckon that's just a mistake made while editing, and it doesn't detract from anything.
Just one thing that doesn't make sense, "It seemed to be fixated on the floor, so he couldn’t make out its face." Surely that wouldn't be a problem for Spike, considering his height? Ignoring that piece of flagrant pedantry on my behalf, it's an exciting, well-written opening.
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Why, thank you for your words.
They're good for keeping up the morale, and as we all know, no morale frequently leads to no result.
I'm glad you enjoyed the opening and hope you continue to enjoy the story. I'm working on chapter Eight right now, although I'm afraid it probably won't be finished for quite a while.
Still, I'll make sure to keep you all up to date.
Ciao
Cantus
Exciting but its so nice to see Rainbow was just gona leave Spike in the burning tree.
Sure she feels bad but i mean thats just cold.
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! i ran out of chapters to read. so fantastic and awsome need more. (i will however say that im dissapointed with how Rarity isn't even acting like Spike has been kidnaped shes so nonchallant about it. blah)
Nice
Damn, Spike is not the only one that's on the edge of the seat
So Spike hasn't pieced together that the story basically came down to "Dragons attempted to commit genocide on Equestria, Ponies defended themselves. Ponies are bad for defending themselves."?
Now I am going to have to step up the pace and update. Great job mate! Best wishes now.
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Yeah, it kinda sucks that the ponies just happened to create Equestria (Hearth's Warming) as the dragons were driven underground. I mean why wouldn't they try to defend themselves? They most likely didn't even know the dragons were there to begin with.
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But also they began to root out the dragons, instead of opening negotiations after the first defeat. However we do know that the specie's lives on, but not as a nation, so rather the ponies decided to destroy the civilization of dragons but spare the survivors. This is speculation on my part, I was never good of thinking things like this. Eitherway there was misunderstanding on both parts.
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oh WOW.
That's solid gold right there. It looks something like a legitimate comment but when you look closer it's something that actually makes no goddamn sense. Well done.
Got rid of it for you.
Now all i have to do is wait for chapter 9....easier said than done
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At last, after all of the promises, and assurances, it is finally done.
Enjoy.
stupid cri-es and also silly wyrm
I really have high hopes for this story, especially hoping in goes into dragons, their culture, and the hatred for ponies gravil seem to have.
I like the story and honestly care more for the dragon parts of this, but with that said.... I really don't think the whole pony said being done fully. There feels to be little to no progression as if your just stretching it out yet nothings happening. No one but rainbow dash seems to be searching for spike at all and thats just once. There so much more I feel you couldve put into int, or left it out and just focused on spike and gravil.
Is spike going to start learning the whole rune magic, the gravil got going on anytime soon?