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  • 50w, 2d
    (Spoilers) TGnPT discontinued, story reveal megapost

    I basically don't have as much interest in MLP as I used to, so I am not really motivated to complete the fic anymore.  Sorry. :(

    I know some people would be interested to know how the story would have ended, were I to have written it out.  Unfortunately I can't give a clear answer, as a lot of the specific events in the chapter get inspired as I am planning and working on a draft, and the story has changed to be quite a bit more than I had originally thought when I first started writing it.  What I can give are some planned ideas and inspired snippets of scene and dialogue.  If people have questions about specifics (like the dream scenes) or if anything I missed in this journal, then I'd be happy to answer some questions about it.

    - - - - -

    Chapter 7

    All my chapters tend to be emotional rollercoasters, but this one was going to be more a hopeful up-turning before the final chapter.  Sweetie Belle's secret plan at the end of chapter 5 was to take Trixie on a picnic in some remote scenic location, on the day of the Running of the Leaves when most ponies would be elsewhere.  The two would relax, eat the food made by Sweetie Belle (with AJ's help), and cloud-gaze.  Trixie gets to relax and ponder her feelings, and share some wistful moments with Sweetie Belle.  Sweetie Belle would have brought along the windchime, now another personal treasure and memory of her accomplishments and growth.   This event sort of heralds the end of the fic, as Trixie knows she has to leave based on previous events (the fight with AJ, knowing she can't magically fix everything).  Sweetie Belle knows this too, despite being a child she is not stupid.  She knows that Trixie won't be able to stay and had lied to her so to not make her sad, but Sweetie is pretending not to know so she wont break the illusion.  Trixie doesn't show despair however.  She knows she can't change what happened in the past, only try to change her future.  Tender, but with an underlying tinge of bittersweetness.

    I was unsure how, if at all, I would be including Rarity and AJ in this chapter.  One of the problems with the fic in general is that I did not know how to 'redeem' Rarity from her initial image as a horrible parent.  I sort of hoped that by the end, the reader would be able to take a step back and see the whole fic as a small snapshot as life than as a story contained in the moment, thus avoiding the 'Rarity-awful-pony' problem.

    I initially had an idea where Trixie returns later that night to retrieve a forgotten item from the picnic site.  This was originally from a time where my idea for  Trixie had her much more fixated on her hate of Twilight Sparkle, where she would muse on Twilight's destiny to be favored by Celestia and image as a hero, and her own to suffer as an orphan and a hated villain.  This ended up not playing as significant a role in the story, so I had not yet come up with a refined way to adapt the idea.  Seeing the full moon and stars, Trixie recalls the decorated night sky of childhood bedroom.  She laments her fate and that her life could not have been different.  Another scene tug at the heartstrings.

    Chapter - 8

    As you have seen, I like to open my chapters with moderately lengthy introductory scenes.  This one I planned long in advance, being only as follows :

    I’ve gone to Everfree forest.

    Don’t follow me.

            -Trixie

    Following this would be a number of scenes.  

    Trixie, characterized with emotions of stoic, understanding, hope, and resignation, would meet with applejack to say goodbye, and to thank her for her hospitality.  I tried very hard to make the reader notice that in fact, AJ, Rarity, Trixie, all share similar painful pasts.  Namely, their parents are all dead.  Sweetie Belle being the youngest is in a similar, but not yet tragic boat.  In line with AJ's inner musings in chapter 5, here AJ would express her regret to Trixie that had she acted differently at their first meeting (meaning in the fic, not in the episode Boast Busters), and had not lied at the start in order to hide her presence in Ponyville and instead tried to help, that maybe she could have been able to stay.  Trixie would say something in the feeling of "Maybe, but what is done is done and nothing can change the past."

    Here I would want AJ to say that maybe someday, Trixie could come back, and that she thinks Sweetie would like that that a lot.  But at the same time, I also wanted Trixie to wish Applejack farewell, and that they would not meet again (Easter egg: If you've played SotN you should recognize this as Alucard's last line of dialogue in the game).  These two ideas clashed a bit, one being hopeful and the other being somber.  I wasn't sure which I was going to pick.

    Sweetie Belle's initial panic at finding Trixie suddenly missing without her being able to say goodbye would lead to her meeting with AJ, and AJ telling her that she had gone and wanted AJ to tell her goodbye.  Sweetie Belle would not accept this, and charge off to Everfree.  She would meet Trixie there (either because of Trixie's lingering or a close time window between the events).  Sweetie would ask why she was leaving when she promised she would stay.  Trixie would repeat what AJ told her at the end of Ch.5, that she would have to leave when Sweetie returned to Rarity.  Sweetie would pressure why, and Trixie would say that she was not a good person in the past, and had hurt a lot of people, and that she would need a lot of time to make up for it.  Sweetie would say that she doesn't care and wants Trixie to stay, and Trixie would say that she is sorry, but she can't change it even though she desperately wants to.  Sweetie would start to say she would run away with Trixie (in that desperate wishing sense, but knowing she can't), and Trixie would say no, they both no she can't do that, because Rarity would miss her, and besides, she's still got growing up to do, and even Trixie does too.  She promises to come back some day, to see Sweetie's special talent once she finds it.  Sweetie Belle asks her to promise, and Trixie promises.  Sweetie agrees, and asks Trixie to take with her the crayon drawing the two of them drew together.  Trixie tearfully agrees, and in exchange puts her wizard cap on Sweetie's head, and tells her to keep it, and that she'll be great at magic someday.  Sweetie, asks about the photo of her dad, Trixie says she doesn't need it anymore, and that he'll always in her heart, just like Sweetie will.  The two hug, and Sweetie Belle watches as Trixie walks away into the Everfree forest.

    The last scene in the fic, about a day later.  Sweetie Belle waits at the train station with Applejack and Rarity.  Applebloom and Scootaloo come off the train, finally returned from their summer vacation.  Scootaloo has a broken wing in a cast, in reverse of her earlier enthusiasm in the first chapter she injured herself and had to sit out all of camp.  Similarly, Applebloom is gushing over the great time at Appleoosa, being endlessly spoiled by Big Mac during her visit.  Here we see a full circle of the joke I started in the first chapter.  Remember where AJ told Big Mac to behave himself?  Applebloom would be gushing about her wonderful time after... "I found Big Mac and Braeburn bucking apple trees in the orchard after midnight, but they said it was okay because they were cousins but I had no clue what they meant.  But they took me to dinner and shows and stuff every night after that!"  So yes, I had a homosexual incest joke between Brae and Big Mac  planned from the first chapter.  I'm funny like that.  xP

    So anyway, after that AJ would give Big Mac the glare of death and the three crusaders would reunite.  Scootaloo and Applebloom would ask the glum-but-happy Sweetie Belle if she was okay, but Sweetie would just say that she missed them and give them both a big hug.  RD would escort Scootaloo away and AJ would take charge of Applebloom and a very embarrassed Big Mac.  Sweetie would return to Rarity (the two now made up at this point), who asks Sweetie if she's ready to go home, Sweetie would agree, hug rarity, and there ends the fic.

    - - - - -

    So there you have it.  If you have any questions on specific scenes, please, feel free to ask me.  I'd be happy to answer as best I can.

    In the meantime, here’s the little playlist I built of the most iconic, inspiring songs that helped me write this story.

    “You’ve Got Growin’ Up To Do”, by Joshua Radin

    This one basically characterized the entire ending with Trixie accepting that she has to part ways and leaving willingly.  The section of lyrics  “And this old corduroy coat, its not keeping me dry” made me think of Trixie’s sentimental attachment to her iconic hat and robe, and inspired the idea of her giving the hat to Sweetie Belle at the end.

    “Empire State Of Mind (Part II) Broken Down”, by Alicia Keys

    I don’t listen to pop music, but I heard this on the radio in a friend’s car and the tone of the song felt right so I looked it up when I got home.  The song lyrics seem to be one of praise, but the notes give me a melancholy feel, as if it is for an anthem of something hoped and longed for that will never come true.  Although I didn’t write many scenes about it, this characterized how I felt about Trixie after her tragic childhood but before the events in Boast Busters, struggling to continue her life without her father.

    “Story Board”, by The Album Leaf

    (The speech you hear at the talk is actually part of the song)

    Remember that painful stabbing in your gut you felt over Trixie’s past during the interlude chapter?  This is that song for me, a recollection of all the painful things that came before.  A number of other songs by The Album Leaf helped me write along the way, but none so much as this one.

    “Exile Vilify”, by The National

    You know this song as it was popularized by Portal 2.  I am not the first person to see the possible connections between the lyrics in this song and with Trixie, but I felt the need to give it the tip of the hat.  It works very well.

    “Stay Right Now (This Song Does Not Exist)”, by Allison Weiss

    Mediafire link

    (This version of the song is from an older mixtape CD that isn’t available for sale anymore, and isn’t hosted on youtube or any other site I could find.)

    I’d owned this song for awhile but hadn’t listened to any music by Allison Weiss in awhile. I just happened to go back one day while writing and realized how perfectly this fit.  This is my song for Trixie, as if sung by her.  The lyrics referencing ‘A lifetime full of liars’ is spoken as if to her father for dying and abandoning her, to herself for every lie she tells herself to keep going, and everyone in her life that has shunned and rejected her.  The line ‘Its okay, and I’m fine’ feel to me as if spoken in a knowing lie, because things will not be okay, much like how Trixie would lie to Sweetie Belle to not make her sad and keep the illusion that everything is alright.  Lastly, ‘And for the first time in my life, I can’t sing what’s on my tongue’ is about her feelings for Sweetie Belle.  A very sad song.

    “when frailty fails”, by Proem

    Everyone tells me this song is odd or creepy, but to me it feels melancholy and the lyrics are as if from someone who has been abused.  The line ‘I will not complain or fight with you / to save you from your life’ characterized how I approached AJ and Trixie’s past.  The lyrics on the internet are not entirely accurate I think for some of the lines.  

    Hope you enjoyed reading this post and my story, even though I did not complete it.

    Thanks to everyone who helped out, and to everyone who followed along.  Seeing my reader’s reaction and hearing your comments really made it all worthwhile.

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  • 88w, 2d
    Chapter 6 apology

    Its been in editing hell for a long time and I just kinda rushed it out a little bit in the last few days.  There are some parts I blatantly don't like the wording of, but I decided to not strain myself too much over it.  I may go back and edit it a little bit if I find something to fix, you'll be able to tell because I'll update the version number.  If there's some quality lacking its because I didn't give my normal agonizing and didn't harass my editors over every little thing (they really are too kind to me, especially BrokenHero).

    I dunno when I'll start writing the next, as always.  Again, I'm really sorry for being such a flake. :/

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  • 92w, 3d
    Happy birthday.

    Feb 13th.

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  • 101w, 1d
    Probably okay

    I am probably not going to be evicted at the end of the month or in the near future, but the possibility of complication is still there.  I will try to devote my free time mostly to this fic to get that extra bit out.

    Sorry for being such a flake. :/

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  • 102w, 5d
    TGnPT on hiatus

    As I may not have a place to live at the end of the month, I think I need to put my fanfic on hiatus.

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Sweetie Belle, alone and dejected, comes across The Great and Powerful Trixie, who was ostracized for her prior misdeeds involving the Ursa Minor. Trixie becomes Sweetie Belle's tutor, giving Sweetie (and perhaps herself as well) both the guidance and companionship she needs.

This is a S1 fic.  Events take place before 'The Return of Harmony, pt 1'.

Writing for this fic began before Season 2, so events do not match canon storylines.

This fic was featured on Equestria Daily on Oct 18th, 2011

Title art by:

http://acesential.deviantart.com

Fan art:

http://fav.me/d4ghb33

First Published
17th Oct 2011
Last Modified
13th Mar 2013
#1 · 166w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I Really liked this story, cant wait for the other chapters!

:derpytongue2:

#2 · 166w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I like it! :D

#3 · 166w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

This is totally awesome and I'm totally gonna read the rest!

:moustache:

Also, Moustache

#4 · 166w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Woot already I can tell this is going to be a great fic. You set the scene nicely with rich detail and the characters are once again spot on. Keep it up.

#5 · 166w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

looks interesting. :trollestia:

#6 · 166w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

#7 · 166w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Spiffing good show, if I do say so.

#8 · 166w, 11h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

This seems like actual dialogue from an episode! Really good storytelling. Puts you in the scene. Look forward to what's next! :pinkiesmile:

#9 · 164w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Well, like I said in the IRC, I really appreciated this bit of story. It flows smooth, and the conversation is believable - plus it is very amusing to watch Trixie paint herself to a corner like this. Both Trixie and Sweetie Belle seem very in-character.

The fight between Sweetie Belle and Rarity was probably the best bit (and not only 'cause Rarity is the best pony) - it was in-character, believable and touching. Pretty much how I'd imagine two sisters fighting I guess.

#10 · 162w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

This story has a LOT of potential, and I can't wait for the next chapter! That out of the way, it's been a month since you wrote this. As we say on touhou-project.com: "Get back to work, n*****."

#11 · 162w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>12535

I am a slow writer, and in between this first chapter and the impending second I acquired a tablet and starting trying my hand at art, and also had essentially a week vacation out of town.  I want to present a well-refined chapter, so please excuse how long I'm taking.  I'll try my best to keep going. :twilightsmile:

#12 · 161w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I came to this story intrigued by the novel combination of protagonists. Now, I'm intrigued by where you plan on going. I can't say I entirely like the idea of Rarity as a physically abusive guardian, but the dynamic between Sweetie and Trixie is fascinating. I look forward to seeing what happens next.

#13 · 161w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>13901

:raritydespair: will be featured in Chapter 3, so hopefully that will address some of your feelings about her role in the story.  Thanks for your comment!

#14 · 161w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Now this is going to be an interesting storyline I mean Trixie a teacher, and a great and powerful one at that. this is going to be good. :rainbowlaugh:

#15 · 161w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Excellent as usual.

Also.

:moustache:

#16 · 161w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

:pinkiehappy: Love this story.

#17 · 161w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>13901

"physically abusive guardian"

Ummm? I may have missed something, but I don't believe Rarity was ever stated as being abusive?

Anyways, great story! I love how Trixe is portrayed with some actual depth, just be careful not to give her so much character progression that she stops being Trixie. :twilightsmile: :trixieshiftleft:

#18 · 161w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Ugh... Not going to repeat one's really long comment that just got deleted, so here's the tl;dr version: Great job, love the story, but find a pre-reader. Spotted a few grammar mistakes here and there (Only minor), and you called SB a he at one point. (Ctrl+F FTW!)

Keep up the amazing work! Loving this fic so far!

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

#19 · 161w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>14902

I have several pre-readers, but things slip through the cracks sometimes.  Thanks for pointing it out.

#20 · 161w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I want to make love to this author.

Keep up the excellent work!

#21 · 161w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

tracked, favorited, and loved it!

keep the good job, I'm really loving this story! *-*

#22 · 161w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Interesting.  I'll be following this great and powerful story, I think.  :trixieshiftright:

#23 · 159w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Once again, AJ is the best pony. :ajsmug:

#24 · 158w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Sisterhooves Social kind of ruins that little bit of Rarity's and Sweetie Bell's parents death  lol

#25 · 158w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Glad to see that this is being continued. It's got a much different feeling to it than other Trixie stories, probably because she's been placed in a position of responsibility unlike anything she's probably ever experienced. It's sweet and touching to see Trixie take this seriously and unwind from her normal persona.

Also nice to see Sweetie Belle get some loving from the fan community. I'm looking forward to how she'll change with a different parental figure taking care of her.

Heh, I can tell this was written before the latest episode aired. Rarity having living parents suddenly showing up messed up quite a few stories out there. But, that's no big deal as you can always claim that this is a alternate universe. Author's creative license at work here!

Looking forward to more!

#26 · 158w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

#27 · 158w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

You have a great setting between two characters, trying to work together... Sweetie Belle learning from the Great And Powerful Trixie.

I heartily approve!

#28 · 158w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

i really liked this chapter, continue the good work :)

#29 · 158w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Don't worry about canon conflicts, all you have to do is say two magic words"Alternate Universe"

#30 · 158w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

beautifully written, i'm anxious to see your take on the arrival of the rest of the mane 6...

Fin
#31 · 158w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Sisterhooves Social Broke a lot of fic's....

But that is okay I'll just imagine its a different universe.

Anyway write more plz!

                                               -Fin

                                    

#32 · 158w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>28701

Unfortunately, the rest of the mane 6 will not appear in this fanfiction.  The characters listed in the story details, namely :unsuresweetie::trixieshiftright::ajsmug::raritydespair:, are the only ones which will be featured.

#33 · 158w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

That's nice. I love how Trixie responsible and caring one here, and Rarity... well, not very good sis. Can't wait to see Rarity\Trixie confrontation (I do belive that Trixie much more powerful that Rarity, but would she use magic on Sweetie Belle's sister?). Applejack very good here, just right amount of agresstion, understanding and honesty. Please continue)

#34 · 158w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Sweet! Every chapter I have read had always made me tear up. This one was no exception. I love the sisterly bond between Sweetie Belle and Trixie. Trixie's becoming one of my favorite ponies because of fics like this. I can't wait until Rarity and Trixie meet face to face with Sweetie Belle in the middle of the confrontation.

I can relate to Trixie as I feel weak compared to my family. I seem to can't find out my talents. And while my friends knows what they want to do, I'm left behind still wondering what to do......And it gives me a hard time when I sleep and feel alone....:fluttershysad:

I was reading this while I was listening to the Turnabout Sisters Ballad Theme from Phoenix Wright. The scene with Rarity/Applejack and near the end of Chapter 3 with Trixie/Sweetie Belle made me tear up a lot. :fluttercry::raritycry::pinkiesad2: That's how much I love this. I can consider this to be one of my top favorite fanfics tied with Feathers and maybe A Dash of Inspiration on this site.

I can't wait until the next Chapter to be released. Hopefully since it's a holiday this week, you'll have more time with the fanfic. :heart:

#35 · 158w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

hmmm...

i hope none of Trixie's... personality rubs off on sweetie...

Still, I am interested!

#36 · 158w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

awww...

also!

“I’ll move my royal guard here, capturing your other pegasus.  And um... checkmate.”  this... would be very fun!

I was kinda hoping for some interaction between :twilightsmile: and :trixieshiftright:, but alas, it does not seem likely...

still, a good, fun fic.  

i personally would like the fic to become a tad darker, but that's just me...

and my gloomypants...

#37 · 158w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>28788

Although I haven't read Feathers / Dash of Inspiration, I'm flattered you would compare my work to fics with so many views and high ratings.

These kinds of comments are things I like to see.  I'm glad to hear people have had the emotional reaction I hoped my writing would be able to elicit.  As far as music goes, it has a monumental impact on the words I write and the feeling that goes into my fiction.

My life is actually likely to get MORE busy in the near future rather than less.  I've had a bit of a reprieve from my normal activities over the past week or two, and as I have said before in these comments I am a horribly slow writer. :ajsleepy:

>>28797

There will be no direct interaction between the two in this fiction, I am afraid.  The only major characters to appear are those listed on the titlecard.  I do however, have a sequel of sorts planned in summary, which will hopefully be written someday.  I have another fic I would very much like to write after the completion of this one, so it may be a long time.

#38 · 158w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Very beautiful. Trevor has been waiting for this fic to update, so thank you for not abandoning it! One liked the song, though more the instrumental first half than the actual song. One was GOING to suggest that somepony do a cover of it, but the lyrics in the second half kind of make that difficolt. *Sighs*

Also... Trevor was wondering if that wasn't why Rarity... Yeah... One can understand that almost TOO well... While it was very moving, what made it even more so was thinking back to 'Simply Rarity'. That fic TOTALLY blows this chapter out of the water for sad Rares, but then again, that's the ENTIRE point of that fic, rather than the central aim of this fic. It enhanced this chapter, rather than take away, thinking back to that feeling of loss and tragedy in that fic, rather than make this seem weaker in comparison. Beautifully done...

Trevor eagerly awaits the next chapter patiently!

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

#39 · 158w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>28972

Dammit Trevor, why did you have to remind me of 'Simply Rarity', it's bad enough that I have Grave of the Fireflies standing on my shelf, begging to be re-watched. As an big-brother, there is a limited amount of younger sister sadness my heart can take before it breaks! :fluttershbad:

Anyways, the fic is awesome: It's good to see some steady character progression for Trixie.

#41 · 158w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

I love this fanfiction and I must say the dynamic between Sweetie and Rarity is much better than the in cannon familial antagonism. Rarity is actually growing to be my favorite character in this story.

#42 · 158w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

You have three very strong protagonists in this chapter: Trixie, Sweetie Belle, and AppleJack.  I deeply appreciate the white-versus-gray morality conflict in this story.  

Darn it, you've made me FEEL for Trixie!

Well done!

#43 · 158w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>28972

I apologize for not updating very fast.  If I ever put the fic on hiatus, I will mark it as such and make a blog post, but I don't intend to.  I haven't read Simply Rarity, though I have heard of it.  I will have to take the time at some point to read all these fics people mention in relation to mine, although my queue is already at 100+ unread stories that I would like to read eventually.

>>29209

I'm glad you enjoy it.  I very much tried to write Trixie as an actual character with thoughts and motivations, like an actual person and not a storybook villain (just like AJ said in chapter 2).  She is probably one of my favorite side characters.

#44 · 158w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

My D'awwwwwwwwwwwwwwww-ometer is pegged right now. :pinkiesad2:

#45 · 158w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

This story is wonderful.  I'm so glad that Trixie is keeping her promise, and being mature.  

You're writing not just good fanfiction; you're writing good fiction.

#46 · 158w, 16h ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

I'm loving this fic a hundred fold. And we can make your story canon again if we change the official lore of the MLP universe a bit making it so Rarity's parents in Sister Hooves Social were actually....ghosts.:trixieshiftright: See, now your story is canon again.

#47 · 157w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

This fic is so far very, very good.

I have this amazing mix of feelings right now, somewhere between nearly sobbing but still a smile on my face. The story did touch a few personal heartstrings of mine (in a positive way though).

I'm not sure if I have the words, or if I should just proceed to drawing fanart of the brushing scene because I frakkin' loved it...

Eh. Poke me later on in the IRC if you want any sensible criticism, right now I don't have 'em due to emotional overload.

~Arto "FoxOfWar" M.

#48 · 156w, 13h ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

This fic is fantastic, man. Keep it up!

#49 · 148w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

I know it's on hiatus but I just have to say, I read the first two chapters a few months ago and I look forward to any more chapters if you decide to continue the story. It's well written, IMO. :twilightsmile:

#50 · 148w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>144591

I've got 3.8k words written for the new chapter 4, and what was going to be chapter 4 (and is now chapter 5) has a chunk of work done on it too.

So soon!  I hope.  Maybe. :applecry:

(Also looking back over my writing it seems so terrible, I struggle with it a lot whenever I'm writing new stuff. :rainbowlaugh: )

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