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Twilight goes shopping, and finds herself curious about the pony who owns the paper store.

A self-insert fic done for a friend as a challenge to get into writing fanfiction, but you might still enjoy it.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 6 )

Nice little story i liked it. Gave a good description of the OC without over glorifying him, and kept Twilight in character for the most part, i thought. To be honest i was reading this as a shameless self-insert ship fic with a mane character, until the twist came, and ended up making the story different from others. May not be the best but worth a read :ajsmug:

(oh and Pinkie kinda derailed me from the story, was rather amusing :pinkiehappy: )

Definitely an entertaining read. I felt that you did an excellent job capturing a love-struck Twilight. I also had a few hearty chuckles throughout the story, especially with Pinkie somehow making her way into the story. All in all, it was a wonderful story, although it would've been wonderful if it were a tad longer. :raritywink:

As a side note, don't worry too much about the assumption that people don't want to hear about your OC. As fun as it is reading about Twilight, it's just as entertaining to see what people can come up with with the various OC ponies that are created. Most of the people that hate OCs won't bother to read things like this anyway. Personally, I hope to know more about the characters that you create and what you're capable of in your future stories.

Looking forward to next time you write something! :pinkiesmile:

What a cute story! Twilight in love is something I don't expect too much, but if she ever were to, I'm sure that is how it would go down. I liked the read, and the ending was seamless and fitting. The ending, for me at least, didn't feel too drawn out or too short, a nice touch of lightheartedness. Its stories like these that are slowly turning me into more of a Twilight fan...

Hoping to see some of those up and coming ideas of yours! :pinkiehappy:

An interesting read that perfectly characterises both Twilight and the Author Insert realistically and without overdoing it entirely. I enjoyed both the depth of description and pace set by the story.

well, that was fun!
short, but still fun.
" I am still not going to write clopfiction for you." THANKYOU!
A good short story.
The OC was rather amusing, <soapbox> most OC's are ok as long as the story does not focus on them too much. As long as they are not too powerful and the focus is not on them as much, they are usually ok.
this was very fun. Pinkie for the win!

Very well-crafted. Appreciate a nice fic like this that avoids the stereotropes without getting bogged down in avoiding the stereotropes tropes.

Kudos on a nice bit of writing. :twilightsmile:

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