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After Applejack and Spike's run in with the timber wolves, Twilight writes to Celestia about their adventures. Celestia sends a return letter, asking Twilight to find out more about the wolves. Twilight turns to Fluttershy and Zecora for help with her task. The trio head deep into the Everfree Forest, and discover that there is much more to the timber wolves that anypony ever would have thought.
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Great story!
I liked this story
. Will there be any more?
hmm not bad i like it
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Grammar (out of 10) 10
Pros:
Interesting and original premise.
A smooth and natural flow of dialogue.
Good characterization.
Cons:
The story feels like it is from a longer story.
When Fluttershy speaks about getting braver from their adventures, it seems out of place*.
The bit with Angel bunny, although funny, feels a bit like headcanon.
Notes
*Usually when Fluttershy is brave, she isn't conscious of it. She will go out of her way to deny she was ever brave. She is much more likely to talk about someone else's bravery. Just a little something to think about.
headcanon isn't always bad, I'm just prejudiced. And, besides, I was scrambling to find a third 'con'.
This feels like the first chapter of a longer story. I don't know why, it just does.
I look forward to any further projects you choose to post.
Enjoy your review! If you feel like it, you could help me by checking out 'The Dragon that came to Tea' or my one-shot 'Everything is Just Peachy'
Interesting. sure. I'll bite. NO, NO, NOT MY EAR YOU STUPID TIMBERWOLF AAAGHH!
2135049 Thank you very much! Right now, I don't have a sequel planned. I tend to write one shots or stories with only a couple of chapters. However, I have a couple of ideas floating around in my head that might turn into indirect sequels.
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Thank you all, very much! I will admit that "Spike at Your Service" was not my favorite episode of the series, but it really got to me think about the timber wolves. I wrote this as a way to explore what the timber wolves might actually be, and as an experiment to see if I could handle an adventure story.
Nice story.
2209381 Thank you! This story was a bit of an experiment, and I'm glad that you liked it.
I liked it. It's a nice bit of examination of the nature of some of the most mysterious creatures in Equestria. Maybe they're related to dryads in other fantasy worlds, but take on animal form because they don't have humanoids around to influence their appearance.
A very cute fic. It feels like it belongs to a larger piece but that doesn't overly detract from the story. Twi feels a bit OOC trying to bully Angel like that which was a bit grating but still enjoyable.
That said...Twilight framing the piece as a friendship letter felt really forced. The lesson felt a bit hamfisted and oddly specific and like she was taking a huge leap.
As well it gave the impression she was incapable of writing to Celestia in any form other than friendship letters which I think is inaccurate for her character as it's oddly limiting.
Either way a very fun and appealing piece exploring the nature of the world. Well done n_n
Your writing about my pack members DO NOT MESS THIS UP!!!
You portrayed us nicely human thank you
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I think the timber wolves have all kinds of potential and secrets that people do not think about. I am glad you like my spin on the timberwolves. I just cannot see them as mindless predatory things, or Ponyville would have been in deep trouble. Thank you for taking the time to read it.
6095045 your welcome
I like this, it was nice.
I found this to be a rather delightful short read. It's nice to see someone take one of the lesser used characters and run with them, mostly because we see so little of them in the show. That means there is so much room for creativity and I enjoy seeing what writers can bring to life, which is what you've done here. Keep experimenting and exploring your skills!