A person wakes up in the Everfree Forest to find himself as a pony in the world of MLPFIM
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beirirangu
lived in Germany until i was 8, then moved to Russia until i was 17 where i was moved to Florida of the USA for these last few years. So sorry if Gramatically I not very good
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This is quite interesting so far. I shall read the rest of the chapters in a while.
Tracking the hell outta this.
aaaahahhh hitting on rarity in french? got that balls man.
damn.smooth talkin champ.
Intresting story
TRacking 
Overall, pretty well written. There was some spelling and grammatical errors here and there, but still pretty smooth. I would happily edit your story if you'd like. It'll making the whole story more streamlined and smoother and a better reading experience for the Grammar Nazis.
Looks okay, but felt a teensy bit rushed.
Then again, Kiroberos has spoiled me with Memory Pending, so now all crossover stories enrage me if they don't match his or do better.
Still, this is definitely a good read, well done for putting it together
You get a yay!
Nice story, though there are a lot of typos and run-on sentences. I suggest you check your work a bit more.
Still, like I said it's a nice story, so I'm tracking
well i hate to be a grammar nazi but
i loved it and all and i really hope it continues but...do you need like a proof reader or something? because i saw quite a few typos...not to offend or anything just asking to help
>Take your time and slow down. Set the scene. Immerse the reader in the world you've created.
As overdone as the HinE genre is, this is a good start. I'll keep track of this and see where it goes.
The number of typos and misspellings is a bit distracting. Overall the writing style is nice, but I worry about the 'Gary Stu' effect showing through so blatantly. So far he's a quick study, natural magician, multi-lingual, well read, highly social, and more..
Translation -
"How about attaching a length of purple in the style of Watteau Pleats using a point of catching it." I Stated, noticing the dress and What It Looked to me like it WAS missing.
"Oh yes, thank you thank you! It would be wonderful!" She exclaimed as she Lifted a purple cloth and sew it onto Began to the dress.
"Why's you speaking in Two fancy? I can not understand a word of it!" Applejack exclaimed.
"Oh, sorry Applejack, I just needed to finish this dress ..." Rarity started to say Before noticing me. "Are you the one Who Said that?"
"Yes, my name is Bailey, but I am often called Beirirangu. And I guess you are the great Rarity."
"O ye flattering, I must say that you speak the language beautifully."
"No ... my French is not as good as my English."
"French? English? It Canteras."
"My apologies. But where I come from, it is called in French and is well known as the language of fashion."
164847 Wow your sad...
This story isn't too bad, its like gentle reading for me.