2173792 Twilight does Sparkle in her own way, she's not as conventionally beautiful (or stereotyped) as the others. I mean put her next to the cowfilly, the tomcolt, the filly next door, the party filly and the fashionista... it's very easy to be overshadowed.
2175781 Well it's not really rape if it is magically induced by the victim. I mean Twilights alicorn fluid is an impossibly strong aphrodisiac, capable of breaking through almost any mental barrier. I think Twilight would have been better had spike just took care of her rather than getting others involved.
And thus, Twilight Sparkle single-hoofedly brought about the apocalypse.
Other than the odd spelling error here and there, this fic is very well-written. One thing I will point out though, thus far you have referred to at least two characters as being "light grey" in color. Rarity and Nurse Redheart are not light grey. Their coats are white. Light grey is closer to Derpy's color.
Keep up the good work, and good luck with the next chapter.
2175781 I won't say something inane like "consent is overrated," because for obvious reasons, it's not (unless it's a ravishment fantasy .) Also, if I can guarantee that if a girl isn't interested, she isn't interested. What occurred was an unscheduled medical procedure performed by licensed and accredited professionals. That there is some unusual effects where magical backlash (or is it?) is concerned is par for the course (haha, I just realized what I typed there.) Anyway, the procedure normally would have consent by the patient, or in this case, close family/friends. With no DNR in place, the medical professional can make decisions in dire need...
2176728 The story is roughed out and there are plans for some M/S, M/M/S and M/S/S but no more than four... does that make any sense? Aaaaaaand maybe a chapter with S/S. I know S/S for some can be squicky, so I'll provide a warning in the Author's Notes in the prior chapter. Unfortunately, I expect that chapter to be very hard as I have noting to hang that particular hat on.
2176763 Oops! Haha, I will sift through and try to edit those out. And thanks!
I think equestria's screwed if you know what I mean
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Twilight does Sparkle in her own way, she's not as conventionally beautiful (or stereotyped) as the others. I mean put her next to the cowfilly, the tomcolt, the filly next door, the party filly and the fashionista... it's very easy to be overshadowed.
2175781 Well it's not really rape if it is magically induced by the victim. I mean Twilights alicorn fluid is an impossibly strong aphrodisiac, capable of breaking through almost any mental barrier. I think Twilight would have been better had spike just took care of her rather than getting others involved.
2176311 I'm with ya there. though things are really going to degrade down hill once Celestia arrives.
Before I even begin.... Will there be males? And, by males, I mean will there be males with any mares?
And thus, Twilight Sparkle single-hoofedly brought about the apocalypse.
Other than the odd spelling error here and there, this fic is very well-written. One thing I will point out though, thus far you have referred to at least two characters as being "light grey" in color. Rarity and Nurse Redheart are not light grey. Their coats are white. Light grey is closer to Derpy's color.
Keep up the good work, and good luck with the next chapter.
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I won't say something inane like "consent is overrated," because for obvious reasons, it's not (unless it's a ravishment fantasy .) Also, if I can guarantee that if a girl isn't interested, she isn't interested. What occurred was an unscheduled medical procedure performed by licensed and accredited professionals. That there is some unusual effects where magical backlash (or is it?) is concerned is par for the course (haha, I just realized what I typed there.) Anyway, the procedure normally would have consent by the patient, or in this case, close family/friends. With no DNR in place, the medical professional can make decisions in dire need...
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The story is roughed out and there are plans for some M/S, M/M/S and M/S/S but no more than four... does that make any sense? Aaaaaaand maybe a chapter with S/S. I know S/S for some can be squicky, so I'll provide a warning in the Author's Notes in the prior chapter. Unfortunately, I expect that chapter to be very hard as I have noting to hang that particular hat on.
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Oops! Haha, I will sift through and try to edit those out. And thanks!
I just wanna see chrysalis get bonked by Twilight.
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Please keep up the good work
2177383 I don't care about S/S. And yes, it does make sense. I shall not be reading, though. Mare/Stallion is no good. Good luck nonetheless.
Nice.
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THAT WAS SEXY!