No comments? We can't have that! This is a nice opening for a story. The 'usual' problems of Sugarcube Corner and some 'new' ones like broken machinery to add to the stress. Cup Cake sounds extra bitchy in this one and I've yet to see a hint to as why that may be. Nonetheless, I like your take on Carrot Cake. He seems to be the calm pole between all the problems around him or something like that.
The story is good so far... Flawless grammar and whatnot, so i don't see how this is getting so little attention. The only thing is, it does seem a bit depressing at this point. Or perhaps 'grim' is the better word. But it's entertaining and the chapters are very short, so it's not like i'm investing a ton of time.
We'll see about the next chapters.
Edit: Oh, i see. All the comments were on the last chapter. Anyway, after finishing what there was of it, it really seems like this story needs a sad tag. Right now, it's seems the Cake's marriage is falling apart, and things aren't looking like they are getting any better.
Wow, what a well written chapter, Pinkie is of course true to who she is athough I love the take on Carrot and Cup Cake, I had been wanting to read such a story in FORVER and thank the Gods that I now have a chance, you done well for this, great details, not rushed and keeps us a bit in the dark, oh yeah, I'll be readong more
Well, I decided to give this a once over from the beginning since you said it had had rewrites and one thing stuck out to me that I couldn't remember being mentioned, brought up again or resolved.
The emergency fund being depleted and Cup Cake being all nervous about it.
I'm sure if it was mentioned I forgot about it, but dammit, this annoys me now. The hell was she spending on?
No comments? We can't have that!
This is a nice opening for a story. The 'usual' problems of Sugarcube Corner and some 'new' ones like broken machinery to add to the stress.
Cup Cake sounds extra bitchy in this one and I've yet to see a hint to as why that may be.
Nonetheless, I like your take on Carrot Cake. He seems to be the calm pole between all the problems around him or something like that.
The story is good so far... Flawless grammar and whatnot, so i don't see how this is getting so little attention. The only thing is, it does seem a bit depressing at this point. Or perhaps 'grim' is the better word. But it's entertaining and the chapters are very short, so it's not like i'm investing a ton of time.
We'll see about the next chapters.
Edit: Oh, i see. All the comments were on the last chapter. Anyway, after finishing what there was of it, it really seems like this story needs a sad tag. Right now, it's seems the Cake's marriage is falling apart, and things aren't looking like they are getting any better.
Wow, what a well written chapter, Pinkie is of course true to who she is athough I love the take on Carrot and Cup Cake, I had been wanting to read such a story in FORVER and thank the Gods that I now have a chance, you done well for this, great details, not rushed and keeps us a bit in the dark, oh yeah, I'll be readong more
is this at all based on American Beauty ?
Well, I decided to give this a once over from the beginning since you said it had had rewrites and one thing stuck out to me that I couldn't remember being mentioned, brought up again or resolved.
The emergency fund being depleted and Cup Cake being all nervous about it.
I'm sure if it was mentioned I forgot about it, but dammit, this annoys me now. The hell was she spending on?