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wow... just wow... 5 STARS 4 U!
If you want to go at this pace I don't mind, but after you finish this story it would be nice if you came back and slowed down this intimate senses...for SCIENCE!!
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That is the ONE thing I feel like I really struggle with. I am trying to slow it down in future chapters, and if I have the chance, I will definitely come back and fix it. Any suggestions you can give are more than welcome, and creative criticisms won't offend me.
Thanks for the heads up.
I think Fluttershy was a little more out-going than usual. By this I mean she said things that I wouldn't normally expect to see from Fluttershy, atleast not with out some coaxing from somebody. She also said "if that's o.k. with you..." a little too much I feel. But this does make a good start and leaves many openings to continue the story just about anyway that you could imagine. Keep up the good work and I expect to see more. (hopefully soon
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That is intentional. I am a big fan of Flutterdom, and that ideal will sort of play out through the next several chapters. It gets interesting, because the submissive and dominant personalities will seem to trade off, not necessarily how you would expect. I wanted to sort of layer that in without making it seem out of place, which is why I tried to make Fluttershy seem naive, yet Celestia seem so knowledgable.
Also, I have a lot more planned. (A Little hint... expect some FlutterDash soon.)
A very promising beginning :)
I can't decide if this was cute, hot, or romantic... probably some of each ;)
Slowing down the whole thing would really help all of the aspects above.
Oh, and if you need anything for future chapters, like whips, candles, cucumbers, just ask me
This fic made me cry, i wub you Juicebox
One Down, Four to go !
The princess finished reading the letter, her cheeks a little flushed, she didn’t expect this from the timid little pony. In fact, she believed, based on her previous meeting with the pony, that Fluttershy was not capable of anything this robust and extroverted. The princess looked the scroll over once more before looking over to her sister
“Celestia, I believe this was meant for you.”
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I lost my shit there !
Yeah...When you have had only one princess for so long and then suddenly you now have a second princess it may take a while to learn to be specific on which one you mean when asking someone to give something to "the Princess".
I think this is the very first time a fic has had a letter delivered to the wrong Princess. 5 Stars for this.
181347 I was laughing so hard that my mom was thinking I'm suffocating.
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I actually got my inspiration for this from some draw-ask-blogs on tumblr. I decided it would be a great idea, and would *hint hint* allow me to involve Luna in future chapters.
...darn, i thought this would be an innocent
fic, guess i was wrong 
164062 ummm...You cried at this? Do me a favor and read my little dashie.
Ha, FlutterDash is the most amazing pairing ever. They complete each other!
Oh yeah, and we need more Domishy. That's totally best 'Shy in clopfics.
*hums* Dum du-dum da-dum dum. *tracks*
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I only have one thing to say.....tracked.
This was awesome
Oh my. I must say Rainbowshy is my OTP and while you didn't capture my vision of it, I loved seeing yours. I can't wait to see 'Shy make her rounds through the rest of equestria. Definitely getting an up vote from me. -Shiloh
Woah! Hot and heavy pony lust!
Our first clopfic on this site and it's such a gem! 
You can bet your bits I'll be waiting for chapter 3! I only wish my account would let me vote up more than just the once! 
-Tawny
You're not dead?
Outstanding.
I had hoped you would eventually return to finish this, If only because I dislike seeing a story left untold.
I hope to see more soon.
PS. You might want to update the character tags as you go.
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Characters Fixed! I had to put this up in a hurry, so I didn't have time to do that this morning/
Awesome story, can't wait for more!
The challenge is set, an epic battle of wills. The stakes couldn't be higher! How will Fluttershy ever be able to face this momentous foe? This situation clearly demands daily practice, (and possibly montages,) before the big event!
wow didn't think this would ever update...
Pick a tense.
Stick to it.
more.
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Sorry, I wrote this in like fifteen different sittings, and part of it was a collaboration with a friend. I'll be sure to resolve any tense issues the next chance I get.
I thought it was great. I forgot about this until I saw the automatic email in my drop box but once I remembered I was very happy. Keep it up!
YES! UPDATE!
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But then........
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At first I was like: encrypted-tbn3.google.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcSUdjusw16jLKn1QlsLKsk6JGFsdr8vnIUhDfyVHytk9TJRCUTnMQ
But then........
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Fluttershy? A perv? IMPOSSIBLE! However...............
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And next I suspect will be (drum-roll)
APPLEJACK
I really love the story its good needs to b slowed down. A little and also Derpy Hipster what is the name of that show of which you posted that clip from I'm in to a lot of anime and haven't see
n that yet
Jeez, Pinkie strait up destroyed the 4th wall there huh. Great chapter.
Godamnit PINKS!
1829362 Pinkie Pie is watching you masturbate.
FOREVER.
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Story art is seductively seductive.
What is it with reviving the dead, this time of year. This is the third story that has been dormant for ~so long, then suddenly gets an update, almost a year to the day later.
Not that I'm complaining, mind you.
3655769 Yeah, I've noticed this too, I think its cause of the holiday an the new mlp season, inspiration and rememberance and all that, love the new chapter by the way, loved fluttershy's directness though
It was awesome.
Well, that was the most perfunctory bigotry I've seen in a while. Poor dear was just looking for an excuse to give stallions the flick.
The story is going good, however there's something that has been bugging me.
The characters.
You made Celestia sound like a mare in heat, completely seducted and powerless against Fluttershy, that is not Princess Celestia at all.
You turned the normal Fluttershy into a bold Fluttershy that doesn't care into good modes. Seriously, re-read this:
Seriously? In the first line, it just sounds like she had a mental re-cap and boom bada boom, she's a bold Fluttershy.
The second one, Fluttershy would be COWERING ON HER UNEXISTANT KNEES to ask that question. Seriously, she has trouble asking ponies to make way for her to pass, but she says that line, she asks for a kiss, from the FRIGGIN PRINCESS OF EQUESTRIA without even being dazed! What the hell? (PS. This isn't supossed to sound hostile.
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(Read this in Discord's voice)
Now, now, i know this isn't a bad thing, for it's hard to keep track of character personalities when writing a clop fic, it's just that you made them go a little far off the scales to what they really are.
Buut, it's still good, have a mustache.
3655807 3655769 I'd actually attribute it to the woes of Post-Secondary education. Winter is the only time where college students are really 'free.' Most don't find a job to replace their campus employment over break (especially if they go away to college), and they are generally cooped up with their families, nothing to do while parents go to work and younger siblings go to school, which effectively seems to instill the kind of "cabin fever" that most students need to explore their less-frequented hobbies.
3655851 I had fun with that. I wanted to merge the stereotypical conservative farmer trope with the concept that Applejack's friendship was more powerful than her beliefs. That being said, this wasn't near a serious as I could have made it, and maybe a little bit trivial in actuality, but I like subverting the status quo. So I did, kind of.
3656528 About that... When I first started writing this, I really didn't think about it. In retrospect, Celestia is probably about the most OOC the could be, and Fluttershy isn't any better. Now I'll apologize for not portraying Celestia's character right, but for Fluttershy I'm only sorry I couldn't make my point more effectively. I like to think that Fluttershy has a more dominant "bedroom personality" - when she is with other ponies, her shyness gets lost to all of the hormones and feels, and she experiences bursts of confidence. I regret that I wasn't able to portray this very well in the first chapter, but I believe that you'll find that as you go (and as my style evolves) this might be more understandable. That being said, I appreciate the commentary and will definitely look into this going forward. Please let me know how you feel about this if and when you get to the latest chapter.
3656528 I edited the first chapter on a whim, hopefully making the somewhat unconventional personalities attached to my characters easier to understand. It may seem as if I didn't completely nail Celestia's personality, but believe me, you will understand eventually. As for Flutters, I tried to isolate the two personalities a little more, so her confidence will be more specifically relegated to certain events.
Well then.....
I just cant get behind flutters being eldest of the group....Generally my mind goes to either AJ,Rarity or Dash for that title,As while yes
is older than 
.......Honestly,I can see pinkie being the youngest if not second youngest in the group (Twi might be),So being a year older than pinkie doesnt hold much for me......But its your fic,Not mine,So go please your fetish
There are times I really wish I didn't read the Author's notes...
