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The Celestia Cross

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BR #1 · Apr 29th, 2012 · · · Introduction ·

Wall of text.

Waffleman205

Waffleman205 #2 · Apr 29th, 2012 · · · Introduction ·

514697
You do understand that a story is comprised of text right?

Pegasususussu

Pegasususussu #3 · Apr 29th, 2012 · · · Introduction ·

514732 He means should space out the paragraphs more to make it easier to read.

Waffleman205

Waffleman205 #4 · Apr 29th, 2012 · · · Introduction ·

514836
Well then he shouldn't be so vague. It's a quick fix. i will do it right this second. Thanks for your help

BR #5 · Apr 29th, 2012 · · · Introduction ·

514732 I mean, if you fix it, then it has potential. Seriously, just add spaces between dialouge and scene changes.

Waffleman205

Waffleman205 #6 · Apr 29th, 2012 · · · Introduction ·

514857
I just did that this second

BR #7 · Apr 29th, 2012 · · · Introduction ·

514866 good job! *likes*

Waffleman205

Waffleman205 #8 · Jun 5th, 2012 · · · Chapter One: Duty Above Life ·

Rating changed to mature due to violence. It got worse than what I was expecting. Don't know why A war fic would be teen in the first place but whatever.