Epilogue
"Do we really have to do this?"
"Yes, we do. It's like Pinkie always says. You need to learn to face your fears!"
"Wait, I thought it was her Granny Pie that always said that?"
"Oh, well...whatever."
"I still don't see why this is necessary."
"You told me you didn't believe me when I told you about it."
"That was, what, seven months ago? I take your word for it now, honest!"
"How am I supposed to believe you?"
"What? You don't trust me?"
"Don't you trust me?"
"...I hate it when you do that."
"Oh, don't be so grumpy. I promise nothing bad will happen."
"Ugh, I just hope that- Oh sweet Celestia, there it is!"
"Ah! Hello, little guy!"
"L-little? Are you serious!?"
"What? He's just big kitty, aren't you?"
"I-i-it's licking your face!"
"Oh, don't be so scared. Look, I think he likes you!"
"GAH! S-stay away from me!"
"Don't be like that, he only wants to be friends!"
"I, uh...ugh, fine...H-hey, big fella! D-Don't eat my face, okay?"
"He would never do that!"
"How am I supposed to know! I mean, look at him!"
"You shouldn't judge a book by it's cover."
"Ugh, yeah, I know, I know. I learned that lesson awhile ag-"
"..."
"..."
"Do you trust me now?"
"...Of course I do. I always will."
"I love you."
"I love you too."
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great fic !
Well, I feel this made a nice story about romance and its obstacles. I only wish it was a longer, even if I am completely satisfied with what you wrote. It was a very good story and I want to see more like it.
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Glad that you both enjoyed it!
If I tried to make it longer, I would end up punching a baby or something.
"..................... What the hell just happened?
367291 he met the manticore who picked up the boulder and moved it off his legs.
In least Twilight knows to not go with Russ, not now not ever.
here is what my reaction be if i got to go live with fluttershy
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Pomf
This story has just one thing that bothers me about Russ aside from his Facebook-crappy quality friend status.
What happened to him after the initial lash out of "you" at him?
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I suppose I just sort of left it to the reader's imagination to wonder what happened with him. All I would say is that he just skipped town.
He won't be returning in any future stories I write, I'll say that much.
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By the way, if you haven't yet, USE THIS SITE. It is immensely inspiring as it lists absolutely EVERYTHING that can be included, happen or make people react in a story.
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Good lord, FINALLY. Someone acknowledged that and is a fan!
YOU, sir, deserve the highest degree of 'staches.
Good story. Enjoyed the feelings of betrayal even though I would hate for it to happen to me.
OMG BEST STORY EVER!!!!!!! YOU GET THE SEAL OF APROVAL
That is the single greatest 2nd person Fic I've ever read. On my top 5 overall. Fantastic, absolutely.
I told you nigs it was too late.
Yes, I will admit that Scorched was MUCH better, but hay! Everypony starts somewhere, and this was STILL a good fic!
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NO
NO IT SHOULD NOT
RUN AWAY NOW
they are either talking about a manticore or his penis... I'm confused
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I told myself I would stop reading and go to be "after the end of this chapter (Ch.6)." My laptop battery died at exactly 1:01 AM, coincidentally the exact same time that I finished chapter 6. However, I did not go to sleep. I ran to where my charger was, plugged it in, and finished the story. I read this story, or began to, the same day that I finished "scorched," which also blew me away with (as I said in that comment). It is now my intention to read each and every one of the stories that you've posted. This story was extremely well done, though I agree that it isn't quite as good as scorched, it was still a great read. Please keep making these stories; the format is original and well done, the plot is perfect, the timing is (usually) exceptional, and the final product is without compare. My only drawback for this one story was the main character, "your," idea about what Fluttershy was planning was so lame. It was still very good, and the backstory was compelling, I just felt that it "she wanted me to pay a bill" really wouldn't stand up to any kind of scrutiny after 3 months of very personal/intimate care. One more fan to add to what I'm sure is a very lare collection, and I'm sorry for the wall of text.
Kody910 you really know how to bring out a readers emotions, i swear to Celestia i wanted to literally cut myself when i heard well... "me" being mean to Fluttershy.
A: Good story.
B: I am not gonna sleep tonight just becuase I wanna puch that protagonist in the face for doing that to Fluttershy.....Did I mention it was a great story?
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me and you both
Still great a month after my first read
Well tht was a great story.
It took me a while to find it.
That was a fun read! Thanks for that man.
I've no idea who what voice is >.<
1901513 OOOOOOOOOOOOOOH NNOOOOOOOOOO!
1901626 BOHM BOHM BOOOOH BOOOHM, BOH BOB HOB BOBO BOOOH
ffffffffffffffffffffffffahk, that was beautiful. Especially chapter six, that brought my heart to warmth.
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First sentence is "you", second is Fluttershy, third is back to "you" again, so on and so forth.
I'm guessing... They met the manticore?
Overall I liked this story. I don't like how he hurt my favorite pony fluttershy, but It was a good story overall
If I can sum this entire Story. Beginning to end. Out of every single word in existence, I would have to say that this story was truly and absolutely...
Fantastic.
In the reader's place, I probably wouldn't have hurt her like that-
rather I probably would have returned home with her, said, "Okay, now that I'm no longer your dependent, what is it that you want? Have at me. I don't know what kind of repayment you want, and I have to say, given how much I own, you've made a poor investment choice. My house will barely cover the hospital bills, and I don't know if the rest of my possessions will pay for your 'services,' but I am willing to pay off the rest as your servant- I wouldn't have anything left to do, anyways."
That's how it would have ended up if I wrote the ending after the party. 
She would be very confused as to what I am saying, and a long-winded explanation including the drug thing would have had Fluttershy insist that I owed her nothing. I would return to her house, already preparing to be her servant for life when she decides how I really CAN serve her.
And then the story descends into a shameless clopfic.
Of course that wouldn't have the heartbreak and tension that this one holds. I usually don't like that kind of stress on the relationships like that
6368628 OBJECTION!!
I have no idea why Fluttershy cares even a little bit for this guy. I mean, if you literally owe your life to someone and they give you a bill, buckle up dude. Oh wait, she also took care of this guy very closely, meals, housing, physical therapy, so yeah buckle the f*** up. I guess what I'm trying to say is that the main character here has no redeeming qualities whatsoever. All he was throughout the story was a load on Fluttershy and the most regular joe ever. Anyway, read this https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/570705/it-feels-rapey-three-horrible-mistakes-to-avoid-when-writing-romance
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What was this? And what was the point of it?
That was a great fanfic and damn that stallion is stupid but I can also understand why he thought it