Kinky.

Finally! Prepare for a review after the read.

YES

Loved the original

dashfire clop equals best clop

What about dash and spit get into a verbal shouting match that turns ugly and into a mare on mare hoof fight ?

I came. I'm a girl, so I feel you deserve congratulations for doing what most guys(I assume you're a guy) don't have the patience for...

at least you're bordering it at Rainbow Dash and Spitfire...

also, unused emoticon time!

Happy..Dash..X..Spitfire?
That is not even CLOSE to done enough. :D

Not a bad clop chapter, although it did go a teensy bit quick. The build up to it was good with both mares having thoughts of the other, but not wanting to be the first to put themselves forward; it's cute when you get to see that slightly self-conscious and uncertain Dash through the layers of bravado.

Since you're doing a romance story here, the clop scenes could use a bit more care. Slow down with them and focus on the feeling of the scene and the sensations of the ponies. The point isn't solely to get them off, but to build their connection while you do it.

I do have a little grammatical gripe, since it's one of my pet peeves and you make the mistake a few times in each chapter.
"then" is used when describing time or order; "First the pair has to move the boxes, then they can have wild and passionate sex."
"than" is used when comparing things; "Spitfire and Dash had more sex that day than any other pegasi in history."

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Behold, The Mustache of Power. Well done my friend!!! Can't wait for the next chapter, although you could use a little more emotion in the clop scene and possibly try to drag the pleasure out a bit for Dashie and Fire. I mean other than that I really had no choice, but to give The Mustache of Power to you. It is worth 100 out of 5 spike staches!!!

*Clap Clap Clap*
Whoops, wrong one.....
*Clop, Clop, Clop*

Awesome story, and I always liked dash/spitfire/soarin (if he will be included, we will see) will be eagerly awaiting a new chapter.

Yay so awesome! Loved the original, when's the next chap?

I like. A lot.
Please accept these five moustaches for a job well done.
The pairing is very original and you handled it well, I also felt you stayed true to the characters, based on what little we know of Spitfire. It also has a decent plot (not THAT kind of plot)
All in all, I like it a lot and I'd really like to see more of this fic.

This is GREAT! Please, please please keep them coming!

Great job!! Though you better post a new chapter soon :)

The amount of enthusiasm you put into that authors note blew me away.

"Woo, clop chapter!"

Great story, I love it.

Hey are you making more?

This is an interesting PLOT development.

please continue