Hi! I've been part of the My Little Pony fandom for a long time. I've been a user on here since mid 2012.
Twilight is forced to leave Equestria, for it can't stand without the Empire of the Diamond Ponies. When she leaves her homeland, she must find her land's safety. The realm of the Diamond Ponies. [Written in Third Person and my sequel to the MLP episode, ''The Crystal Empire''. This takes place after The Crystal Empire.]
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Pretty good so far, all you need is some more detail. Don't try to rush, I know we get excited sometimes to!
That spelling error..
out of 5!
I like the story!
I give it
Two mistakes that stuck out on a skim:
"'King Sombra has enough power, but not enough to beat the Crystal Heart. After his defeat, a powerful spell unlocked the full power of himself, causing him more power than ever.' Twilight looked outside."
Second, you're using apostrophes instead of quotations.
Seems a bit rushed. You misspelled Sombra a couple of times. All-in-all, a good idea, but take your time with this. The chapter would've been better if it were longer, with more dialogue. And there seemed to be a few OOC moments, like Rarity's yard birds (why all of a sudden does she not only have birds, but birds that can sing as good as Fluttershy's?).
And after a quick google search, the cover art source.
Your Majesty, Hail Amazing Pony The Diamond Princess...
1760169>>1760185>>1760189>>1760239>>1760263>>1760315 Thanks for the comments and criticism, everybody! I'm actually pretty new to writing stories like these and I have a problem by fast-pacing. But thanks, I'm hoping to update soon!
And King Somber has two names: King Somber or King Sombra.
1760593 I've yet to actually read this (though it looks interesting, so I'll definitely do so soon), but it's actually King Sombra. http://www.equestriadaily.com/2012/10/name-clarification-on-new-villian-from.html
1760593 I can see
1761622 Really? Huh, they said it two different ways in the show.
Just to let you know, I posted a story called the Harmonic Oath. The premise of it is different, so don't report me or whatever for repost, becaues I didn't.
2721385 I won't, if it's your image, sorry if I used it without asking permission, I just thought it was the perfect story image for a plot that was in progress.
Actually, your story was out long before mine, so it's more your image.
I hope this story is not dead I want to read more please
i really like this story hope to read more soon
This is a great story.
I give it 11/12
Will this continue it's vary good.
6071758 This will not continue, sorry :(
6071758 Someone else has continued this story :)
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/261153/diamond-princess
6074996 thanks for telling that