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  • 1w, 4d
    You Can Call Me...

    Dr. GrassAndClouds2.

    I.e., the PhD thesis defense went well. :-)

    18 comments · 63 views
  • 2w, 3d
    Rejected Video Game Titles

    Five Nights with Fluttershy

    Rainbow Dash Six

    The Legend of Zelda: Twilight Sparkle Princess

    Amnesia: A Machine for Pinkies


    Luna: The Blue-ish Star


    Dragon: The Bruce Cheerilee Story

    1 comments · 48 views
  • 12w, 1d
    Afterlife With Archie

    ...continues to be awesome.

    That is all.

    (Oh, and really looking forward to the forthcoming "Betty: RIP" arc!)

    0 comments · 104 views
  • 14w, 3d
    JULP Update

    After review by the Lunaverse Quorum, Just Us Little Ponies has been approved for Lunaverse-canon status! Woohoo!

    Thanks once again to everyone, including RDD, Emeral, and Fizzy for reviewing it, and Talon for being an incredibly helpful and supportive beta. :-)

    6 comments · 93 views
  • 17w, 6d
    I Don't Get It

    So, I listened to a couple episodes of Welcome to Night Vale. And... I'm not feeling it.

    I mean, I get that it's funny for maybe fifteen minutes to have a stereotypically deep voiced radio announcer talking about various horrible things as if it's mundane. "And, next Tuesday, the secret police will be executing citizens who failed to take out the garbage! Oh, those cads!" But after that fifteen minutes, I don't get what else there is of interest. That kind of story, to me, could use either a plotline about exploring the town and actually trying to solve its mysteries, or a plotline about fighting the various depravities of the town. As it is, there doesn't really seem to be a plotline, except for the recent 'vs Strex Corp' thing... which doesn't work for me, because they could have done a vs plotline with the Town Council or the Sheriff's Secret Police or any other of the fascist or monstrous things in town; it feels manipulative to suddenly say, "Wait, they really are heros! Look, here's some brand new bad guys whom Cecil and the others will oppose!" when they haven't really done anything heroic in the past.

    What's frustrating is they have Carlos, the scientist character, and I feel like a much better story could be told if Cecil were instead made a field reporter and permanently attached to the science team. Then you can have a consistent plot, exploring the mysteries one at a time, maybe even solving one now and then, and slowly filling out the world in spare moments. Instead, the episodes I saw were shotgun blasts full of random worldbuilding details, with no buildup to anything and no indicator that the story is progressing.

    But it's crazy popular. So I guess I'm asking, to any fans of the series... what am I not getting?

    7 comments · 137 views
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Cherilee takes the foals in her class on a trip to Canterlot. Unfortunately, several of them are soon split off from the group and begin wandering around the castle! How will the guards, staff, nobles, and even princess react to the antics of the Ponyville foals? Lunaverse story.

First Published
30th Nov 2012
Last Modified
1st Dec 2012
#1 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·

Here's that story I wrote a while ago, substantially reworked but still funny! (I hope).

This takes place sometime in the first season of the Lunaverse, between 'Carrot Top Season' and 'Foalish Misadventures.' I see it as a webisode or tie-in, not a full episode.

#2 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·

>>1709348 *Cheerilee :twilightsmile:

#3 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·

>>1709383: Fixed, thanks!

#4 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·

Oh, god... *Punches Blueblood in the face* Anyone objecting to that bit of ultra-violence? :pinkiecrazy:

Anyway, really funny. :D I love this. Poor, poor Cheerilee. And even poorer Heavy Roller when Cheerilee and Applejack get through with him! :twilightoops:

#5 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·


#6 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·

:ajbemused: Ah Blueblood. You always get the short end of the characterization stick, don't you?

#7 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·

Tailor should have thrown Blueblood out of the room.

#8 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·

At the current rate, they will become the first tour group to be chained together, along with their teachers and guides, before being dragged out of the castle.  And *still* they're going to lose one before they get outside.

Are you sure Discord has not returned, only in 20 little bodies?  :pinkiehappy:

#9 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·

>>1709457 That's not ultra violence. *revs chainsaw* Now this, this is ultra violence.:pinkiecrazy:

Rule number 1 around me: Don't. Hurt. Children.

#10 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·


Are you kidding? Blueblood is probably one of only three ponies in all of Canterlot who actually wears clothes on a regular basis.

#11 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·


I don't know, most of those ponies in Sweet and Elite seemed to be well dressed all the time.

#12 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·

>>1709865: Heh. Sure seems like it sometimes.

>>1709727: But he has money! The tailor likes money! It can be exchanged for goods and services! :-)

>>1710186: Well, of course. A pony like him must have the most stylish duds. (Seeing as how he himself is something of a dud).

#13 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·

Good start! :rainbowlaugh:

#14 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·

FINALLY! I've been waiting for this story ever since I heard of it!

Ad Heavy Roller, is that anyway to show you're a good stallion? For shame.

#15 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·

>>1710300: Heh. He got distracted with his joke. Anyone could get absorbed in a joke!

And no one, I'm sure, can stop Scootaloo when she's determined to cause some mischief. I think that's her special talent. :-)

#16 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·


She gets that from her mother.

#17 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·


I object!

You didn't hit him hard enough. :trollestia:

#18 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·


Hold on, let me get him into the bear-trap first.

#19 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·

Special Messes Team of the Canterlot Castle janitorial staff
now there's an interesting spin off for the cable networks :rainbowhuh: the bit with the bakers was hilarious.

This is promising. I think it could work as a full episode if you work Cheerilee's characterisation enough.

I think fitting the opening song after the foals barge in on Blueblood would work perfectly.

Also it's 'aquarium' not acquarium.

#20 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·

>>1710862: Glad you liked it!

I imagine the Special Messes Team has a lot of entertaining stories to tell. Most of them relating either to foal shenanigans or noble shenanigans. They'd be entertaining to follow around sometime. :-)

I don't know if there's enough material here for a full episode, but I'll see how it plays out.

And I'll make that edit. Thanks!

#21 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·

...Well, this was the laugh I needed.

No, seriously, this was hilarious. Blueblood being a narcissistic moron? Cake catastrophes? Not to mention the foals blatantly abusing their family relations to get where they want. I think I see a breakdown in Cheerilee's future...

Keep up the good work. :raritywink:

#22 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·

it was well written Cheerilee's imagination was amusing and I desperately want to hurt Blueblood or I at least hope that tailor sticks him full of pins, like a vodoo doll.

But I smell a "GGs great" story coming on :trixieshiftleft: that and I've just never been much for foal episodes same for CMC, this has nothing to do with your writing though, that's just me.

that or it'll have Luna in which case it will almost certainly be awosume and or cute, though be careful not to make whom ever finds the kids do so because of plot convenience. or not it's your story.

#23 · 98w, 3d ago · · · Separation ·

Don't worry, Cheerilee! No matter how badly this goes, it can't be as bad as the school trip was in canon.

This is really cute. I have a lot of admiration for authors who can actually write foals convincingly, because I really can't. I look forward to seeing just how much trouble they get into!

#24 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Separation ·

>>1711477. IAH isn't complaining, but actually loves a story? :fluttershbad:  It's the end of the world! Everybunny run around screaming in circles!

#25 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Separation ·

Watch this; they get home and Rarity chastises them for daring to talk back to that dreamy Viscount that her blubber-skulled clinginess helped drive away.

#27 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Separation ·


:rainbowhuh: I actually like quite a few Lunaverse stories. Why do you think I hang around here to begin with? :twilightsmile:

#28 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Separation ·


Only been here a little bit, mind you, but would I be correct in guessing you enjoy the more slice-of-life stories, and less the darker Night Court scheming and Tyrant Sun rising stuff? Correct me if I'm wrong on that, but even so, I think it speaks wonders about a  universe that people with wildly different tastes in stories can enjoy, and if there's no disagreement in a collaborative community, then there's no real collaboration. The devil needs his advocate to make sure things don't get out of hand and turn into a circle-jerk, so try not to get too down on yourself :twilightsmile:

#29 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Separation ·

>>1713195 Well every review I've read has been almost entirely negative and filled with disdain.

#30 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Separation ·

>>1714788: No fighting here, please. There's threads on the board and stuff for this.

#31 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Separation ·


Sorry, bossman. :fluttercry: But seriously, I can't wait for the next chapter. :twilightsmile:

#32 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Separation ·

>>1714798 I was just fooling around.:twilightblush:

#33 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Separation ·

One thing I didn't mention that I wish I did: I love the fact that you had Scootaloo asking about her mom. That just seems so.....cool.

I really hope she runs into someone who actually does know Nocturne.

#34 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Dispersion ·

>>1715469: :-) I tried to work something like that into the latest chapter a bit, let me know what you think.

#35 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Dispersion ·

Next time: Will Scootaloo succeed in sneaking onto the Night Guard training course her mom designed? If so, will she survive it? Will Sweetie Belle be banished into space? Will Dinky discover what mud-based villainy Greengrass is up to? All this and more in the thrilling conclusion!

#36 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Dispersion ·


I'm guessing 'yes' to all those questions. :pinkiehappy:

#37 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Dispersion ·


Loved it.

Now all we need is the night guards to give Heavy Roller some crap.

#38 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Dispersion ·

I am just loving this story so far. Oh, you adorable miniature equines and your propensity for wacky hijinks! :pinkiehappy: Seriously, this is one of the funnest stories in the Lunaverse in a good while. Each of the stories has its own dash of cutesy hilarity, and the imagine spots have all been great. My favorite so far is Greengrass' plan to hold all of Equestria's mud so he can prevent ponies from getting facials. (Wonder what his real plan is...)

Keep going, my good man!




Oh, and how dare you bring up L!Twilight again and why is Greengrass here and blah blah blah insert endless whining here.

#39 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Dispersion ·

I just realized Scootaloo was the voice of reason at the beginning of the chapter there.


#40 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Dispersion ·

Ooh...plot hooks galore.

I wonder what Luna needed the dress for...obviously the mud in Greengrass' office, on the other hand, was meant to go to his secret hideout.

#41 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Separation ·


That's not ultraviolence either, that's a jpg.:ajbemused:

#42 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Dispersion ·

>>1717248: Hideout supplies probably wouldn't be sent directly to the hideout; Greengrass wouldn't want random delivery folks to know there's anything more to that spot than a disused building. But they would be sent to a drop off point much closer to the hideout than the castle, which is a fair distance across the city from it. That way, the Duke doesn't need to lug it as far, and there's less chance of someone seeing the Duke with a big box and getting suspicious.

#43 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Dispersion ·


It's a group of Space Marines armed with bolters and power weapons.

They are about to CAUSE ultraviolence.

#44 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Dispersion ·

And Twilight's stupidity (and Trixie's default loutishness) keeps on paying dividends; that's because the younger generation think that her whole blistering family wants to kill them.

#45 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Dispersion ·


I know. I guess nearly killing your teacher on accident really grows a pony up. :twilightsmile:


Ultraviolence? Pah! NIGHTMARE! is where it's at!

#46 · 98w, 2d ago · 1 · · Dispersion ·

Luna loves foals! Luna loves foals! We all need to think that very loud so that Luna remembers.

Seriously, this is adorable. I truly love the idea of Scootaloo getting picked up by some Night Guard who worked with her mother. It has the potential to be awesome and tragic and heartwarming and all those good things.

So Luna actually owns dresses? She's doing better than Celestia, in that case.

I think this will be our opportunity to see that although Greengrass is a manipulative, scheming and self-centered politician, he's not actually a dreadful pony. That should be pretty cool. Either that, or he's going to put Dinky into an easily escapable deathtrap involving an overly elaborate death, watched over by a single inept guard. I'm up for either.

#47 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Dispersion ·

Not a bad chapter, overall I liked Luna's introduction, though Dinky's flashback seemed off, and yeah blah blah don't wanna see GG, Sorry.

I can't decide whether I like crazyleee or not (that's cheerilee and crazy combined) :raritywink:

#48 · 98w, 2d ago · · · Dispersion ·

I'm curious about what Greengrass is up to with this mud. Maybe it's for his garden, who knows? Or maybe he really is planning to steal all the mud. :pinkiecrazy:

Either way, this story is great so far, and I can't wait to see the thrilling conclusion! :rainbowlaugh:

#49 · 98w, 1d ago · · · Dispersion ·

The Great Mud Conspiracy is going to be one for the history books.

I'm really loving this. Poor, hilariously unfortunate Heavy Roller.

#50 · 98w, 1d ago · · · Dispersion ·

right behind it was a stunning dress with diamonds and pearls studded in a deep blue dress
Uh :unsuresweetie:


And even if he is a bastard, "See, I found the missing foals! Here they are, safe and sound, and I definitely didn't try to pry any juicy gossip out of them, no sir!" still seems like the right move.

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