When Twilight Sparkle finds herself getting increasingly stressed out due to her always busy schedule, she decides to take her friends up on an offer to travel to Canterlot for a group vacation. Her inner voice becomes increasingly vocal, only solidifying the notion that she really could use a break. If only she knew then that the voice had a will of its own, along with an elaborate plan for her and her friends.
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Twilight has schizophrenia.
Hm, this comment-section seems so empty? Why? Are the comment's Ive seen around here that if you post a fic during some special hours, it wont be as noticed? (Time-zones and stuff like that)
Well, anyway, I felt like I should leave something here at least, I mean, this seems to be becoming a great story
Im not sure what to make of this story. It seems great, and therefor Im kind of sad to see that It hasnt got more recognition yet. Well, lets hope that it will come soon :)
(Minor spoilers)
I do enjoy reading these fics where someone gets posessed/cursed/anything by something evil. And this fic is no exception. Thing is, you have done 10k words already, and that a great buildup. This buildup has shown the blob-thingy to be something cruicial. And, eventhough I have my guesses, I wont go there, waiting for you to continue the story instead ^^
So, well, as I said, wanted to leave a short comment here to cheer you and this story on. No idea why it hasnt got more recognition, but, eh, well, it deserves more.
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Thanks for putting it up for everyone to enjoy, and good luck with continuing this (or doing something else, your choice after all
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possibly.
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Honestly since it is my first story posting here I wasn't entirely sure what to expect, being an unknown author and what not.
So long as somepony out there finds some enjoyment out of it, it's all good.
Chapter 3 and 4 are both already in the works. Things should start to get a bit more interesting soon.
the lack of comments on this story is a tragedy. A tragedy I say! Definitelyliking the story. I'm such a sucker for a good twilight gets targeted by evil thing. Is it bad that I was laughing at the antics of the black sludge? It was so adorable in its attempts to be menacing.
Looking forward to more from you. Have a like!
Insanity mode activated.
Well done cliffhanger, and I'm enjoying the mind games a lot, looking forward to the next chaoter were I'll give you a review not on my phone.
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VENNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM DUN DUN DUNNNNNNNNNNNNNN!
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It was pretty Funny
That's a heck of away to leave us hanging. Very suspenseful... if kind of weird with how she got the elements. It definitely makes me wish I found this story later.
I do enjoy Luna though, you characterize her well, and she makes for a good character.
The pace of this chapter was well done, and where as last chapter, the mental games were good, the suspense really hold this one together. Very graceful writing.
. Can't wait to see what comes next.
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Even if the story is meant to have a mostly dark tone to it, I like the idea of sprinkling in a few funny/silly things, gives the reader a break from all the gloom and doom.
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and maybe a bit 
. We haven't quiet gotten to the part were we start to figure out the 'why' behind what's going on yet.
Yeah that particular chapter is kinda meant to leave you going
Thanks everypony for the kind comments. I hope to have chapter 5 finished up and ready to post fairly soonish. Hopefully it doesn't disappoint.
Its getting interesting.... and I'm not sure I like the Celestia/Luna drama you have going on.... it feels kind of meh... overused and overdone.
Twilight however was done super perfectly. I loved her in this chapter, and thought that you wrote her amazingly. While I'm slightly disappointed we didn't get to see anything that happened with the others, I'm sure it'll be interesting when we get there.
Heh, this was your first fic you say? Wouldn't guess so , even if I got infinite guesses
Nice storyprogression, read chapter 4-5 now, and you are really making things interesting now, looking forward for your continuation
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And, just some very minor things:
Chapter 4:
I think whatever is one word, no spacing
Chapter 5:
Im guessing that should be 'murderer'
Those are two very minor things that caught my eye, not important at all, but, well, something
Thanks for putting this fic up for everyone to enjoy!
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Next posting is going to have some good action in it. I got a good number of hours to sit back and work on it this weekend and typed out like 30 pages of text. Still gotta fix it up quite a bit though so I imagine It'll be later this week when I post.
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Oops, yeah my editing didn't catch those.
Fixed and fixed.. be gone typos!
I have done a few other fics in the past, just not pony fics. This is my first stab at a FiM based story, and the first fic I've written about anything in a few years. I just got the itch to write it after I discovered this site and started reading some of the other awesome stories on here. The FiM universe really has some nice characters to work with.
Make a sequel please
Not realy sure I like the whole Bat wings part, it sort of creeped me out, but I guess that was the idea. Overall I enjoyed it. And im realy enjoying What Didn't Happen at the moment. Cant wait to see more from you. Keep it up.
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This one was my first pony fic. I hadn't written anything in years, and I feel I was a bit rusty when I did this one. I think I may have rushed it too, since I did it all within two weeks. I'm taking more time on What Didn't Happen because I want it to be awesome.
Thanks for checking out my other stories.
2599345Yeh it dose seem at bit rushed to be honest, but its still good. And by the way I can tell you are getting better at writing. Your new story defiantly feels more professional.
I was waiting for Luna to come out and put Twilight at ease in her nightmare.
But since that didn't happen I'm guessing that Luna cannot enter her dreams(nightmare) cause the black thing is blocking her. Or you forgot about Luna being able to dream walk 
, who knows now on with the story. 
I have not yet read this story, but I gotta say Zeg, you are great at descriptions, you already have me hooked from that alone
Quality of the story aside, you desperately need a different proofreader.
I mean, it has been a while since I've seen someone use defiantly incorrectly in a non-ironic manner.