Yeah, that's going to be awkward.

THAT. was good.

Pure gold. Spike's been watching too much TV obviously, but the comical payoff is hard to argue with.

I liked it.

I like it!

Suggestion:  Could you italicise the parts of Spike's fics?  I got confused when it "transitioned" into them.

Oh dear. I think Princess Stellaista is going to have words.

So someone else chases the Author Spike route? Interesting.

Spike's Writer's Block now has competition!

Write Stellestia's response.

heh this is good

please write Celestia response to this

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Actually, the lack of italicization is part of style, I think. Take Skippy Dies, for instance. Paul Murray includes 2nd person scene where one of the characters is playing a video game and then immediately switches to real life without any transition marks. It just happens.

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Wait, what? I thought they were italicized. They look that way on my screen, and there's bbcode in there for it.

Overall pretty good for a quick, light read. Sort of light on the characterization, though. Owlowiscious was one of the most interesting ones in there, and he wasn't even a main character!

Funny... I didn't know Spike took his style from Pascoite.

>>16394541639454  No!  It's not italicised; I swear!

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Odd.  My Wii used to be able to read BBCode; now it won't.  

EDIT: Nice job getting on EqD!

Heh! Cute, simple, and to the point. Well done, Pasco!

*snerk*

Oooh dear, Celestia's reaction would be priceless. (Can we see it another time? Can we can we can we?)

I was feeling terrible. Then I read this.

I...still feel terrible, but this story made me smile so much that I hardly care anymore! Amazing work, friend. This is hilarious.

Simple, short and humorous. Well done! Now where did I leave that trombone sound effect...

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>trombone sound effect

Man, there are a lot of possibilities as to which one. In any case, touche, sir. +1 muffin to you.

Heh, not bad. I hope you might give us Celestia's reaction some how.

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Tasty, thanks! I found it, by the way, right next to the "iris out to extreme closeup on befuddled character expression" effect.

Seriously, though, this is everything a one-shot should be. Succinct, in character with a simple premise that provides ample room for humor without trying to hit the reader over the head with comedy; it flows well.

Let's see... Pasco and Uma, made EqD, so why did this story leave me feeling so empty?

I suppose I should mention that I don't find Family Guy funny either, and this has much of the same beat-a-dead-horse structure.  Characters merely being bad at something isn't funny or dramatic.  Repetition does not improve the humor.  And the one opportunity for drama, Spike's desire to win the contest (you know, character wants something, foiled by circumstance, tension builds, that whole basic, basic plotting stuff) is wrecked - absolutely wrecked - by keeping his motivating desire a secret.

Merely using something like

> Spike was going to win the heck out of that contest.

as a refrain would help.  A lot.  Motivation (not necessarily the true one, but at least a motivation) shouldn't ever be secret.

C'mon!  You're both better than this.

I was wondering where to leave my comment - to be one of the few actually related to the story on the blogpost, or on here. Then I figured, "I have no shame anyways, might as well do both!" But first off, obligatory "Pasco not doing sad? What?" reaction.

Right, now that's out of the way, remarks!

This was a fun little romp, albeit a little unsatisfying. The twist, while completely unexpected and good, appreciably good in its conception, didn't do much for me in an actual sense. I can't really say why. Supaiku was a good touch, and the bits with Owlo-blah being a throwaway was smart. One way it might have been more enjoyable for me was if Spike's writing weren't so, well, good. I mean, the sad thing is that his (and by extension, your) attempt at being terrible is better than a good deal of authors on Fimfic (oooh). In the context of fandom, Spike's writing wasn't comically bad enough to count as a joke. I mean, I appreciate the spelling being right - thank heavens - but it didn't grip me, and I think it might have if the events of Spike's story were more blatantly contrived.

Something like the multiple "AAAA"s, which got a laugh out of me.

All in all, a fair read.

This is exactly how I write.  Except that the incineration of all my prose is intentional.  No one must ever learn of my incoherent ramblings.

I liked the japanese name (Supaiku) and the instant, mid-fight level-up.  Truly the secret to a banal story.

That was pretty funny. I really hope you do a followup.

Eh, I'm sure Celestia's seen worse. She'll probably get a good laugh out of it. Twilight, though...

In any case, Spike has earned a moustache for being so awesomely bad.

Was a fun read.  Obvious, but fun.

gathering up all the spent waxy stubs and tossing them into a wastebasket.

As someone who's made a lot of fires, I can tell you that that's a really dangerous thing to do.