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  • E Teacher's Pet

    Fair or not, most classes have that one perfect student, that one little flower that the teacher can't help but adore. Cheerilee's class is no different.
    3,259 words · 3,684 views  ·  449  ·  3
  • E The Gift That Keeps On Giving

    The Princesses' birthday celebration is here again, and Mayor Mare needs a scapegoat—er, trusted citizen—to handle Ponyville's gift. Deciding what to get for an ancient ruler who's seen everything will be a piece of cake.
    5,155 words · 2,578 views  ·  405  ·  3
  • E Canon

    Partway through her morning practice routine—and routine it is—Octavia seems to have gained an audience. Well, if that mare wants to listen, she'll get a good show.
    3,489 words · 2,414 views  ·  326  ·  2
  • E A Hiccup in Time

    Twilight Sparkle definitely learned her lesson from her last time-travel experience. This one's not her fault. Really. Sometimes nature can be... annoying.
    4,508 words · 4,661 views  ·  684  ·  9
  • E Friendly Correspondence

    Twilight Sparkle always wrote to Princess Celestia about her lessons in friendship. Sometimes, Celestia wrote back. Even if Twilight didn't know it.
    2,618 words · 2,430 views  ·  377  ·  5
  • T He Kindly Stopped For Me

    An accident leaves Scootaloo fighting for her life. While everypony tries to help, a few in particular discover a few new things about what exactly it means to be a sister.
    16,950 words · 3,945 views  ·  407  ·  6
  • T Ragnarok

    As many such things do, it all started with Discord trying to help. And now Fluttershy can't escape the apocalyptic proclamations. Next time, she'll try the trick of wishing for no wishes.
    4,538 words · 1,416 views  ·  175  ·  1
  • E A Taxing Situation

    When Derpy fills out her tax return, she finds that she owes quite a bit of money. However, she seems to have an alternative way of settling the debt. She might even have fun.
    6,382 words · 1,804 views  ·  256  ·  3

Blog Posts19

  • 1w, 2d
    Another Reading!

    Goombasa is doing a reading of Duet in the Folk Style!

    He's definitely one of the top-tier readers around, so it's an honor to have him choose one of my stories. Here's Chapter 1. Check out his other stuff while you're there! I'll blog agin when additional chapters go up.

    0 comments · 39 views
  • 4w, 6d

    So, yesterday I rendered my thousandth story verdict for Equestria Daily. When I joined up over two years ago, I never thought I'd see that high a number. We had a lot more people on staff back then, and I didn't need to be more than a minor contributor to help out. I usually did three reviews a week. Later, we went to reduced feedback and this year to straight yes/no (any additional feedback at the reviewer's discretion). Now I do about two or three a day. And the queue length, which drove us to the yes/no system in the first place, has come way down from the 170 we had then. These days, it hovers around forty.

    I don't have anything too deep and philosophical to say about it. I do have one point to make though: the fandom seems to care less and less about quality writing. Whenever a story is rejected, we provide links to recommended reviewing help. But fewer writers are taking advantage of that. A smaller percentage of rejected stories come back than ever before. The two former mainstays of author help see little traffic anymore. The Training Grounds on ponychan barely sees a review request once every week or two. I'm a member of WRITE but not a mod, so I don't keep tabs on the overall traffic, but it is down. I used to get an assignment regularly every three weeks with the occasional request to take on an additional one in between. My last review for them was nearly seven weeks ago, the one prior to that another twelve weeks earlier. That's depressing.

    Why does it happen? I suppose I could poll the authors and see, but not many would even see my question. Plenty of the stories we receive give credit to editing or proofreading help on their front pages, so maybe they're just seeking it from private sources now, but the quality's always going to be hit or miss with those unless you can link up with someone who has a well-established reputation. These groups exist for a reason. They're good at what they do. I wish more writers would take advantage of them.

    Another has to do with where the writers congregate. Long ago, almost all fanfiction went through Equestria Daily. If you wanted publicity, your story had to be good. I'm not ready to call Equestria Daily dead quite yet—in my own experience, a feature there usually generates 1-2k views, while a story I post to FiMFiction only will get maybe 500. But with FiMFiction becoming fairly self-sustaining, more authors seem to submit stories to Equestria Daily as a "why not?" thing, because they've learned that fame and popularity no longer require quality, so why spend time on that? And it's true. I can't necessarily fault writers for doing that, though I'd rather have a small group of readers whom I know to have higher standards than a large anonymous crowd chanting, "Moar!" To paraphrase something one of the other pre-readers said (Alexstrazsa, I think): most fanfiction readers don't care if it's good. Even other groups set up to feature good writing don't get much attention. A feature on The Royal Guard only brings me about fifty readers, for instance.

    But if I can convince just a few writers to care, then it's worth it. There was a push a month or so ago where some pretty prominent reviewers made public offers to help authors. Kind of an open invitation—authors have to realize we're very busy people and can't necessarily take on any project at any time. I was hoping my other reviewing work wouldn't continue drying up, so I didn't join those folks at the time, but now I should.

    Yes, I'm busy too. I give private reviews to 4 or 5 people whenever they ask, though I only get regular requests from one or two of those. I also do a ton of reviewing work for Equestria Daily, and in the middle of all that, I try to work on my own stories. But if you need help, it never hurts to ask. I'll tell you if and when I'm available and whether I think I can give your story the attention it needs.

    I prefer comedy, slice of life, and sad. I'm neutral toward romance and dark. I tend not to like crossovers, human, sci-fi, grimdark, and adventure. I don't review mature-rated stories. And I tend not to like taking on stories more than 10k words or so. I'll take most any story under consideration, but if you stick with what I like or can tolerate, you'll get a more effective review, since I can focus on it more than just trying to endure it.

    With that, I'll go back to the titled topic and end on some statistics.

    I've heard estimates of EqD's acceptance rate anywhere from 7-17%, but it goes back well before the spreadsheet, and I really don't know what the correct number is. It's probably in there somewhere.

    My own record:

    Stories rejected permanently (to the sun): 27. These are almost always for content against our policy that would substantially alter the story to remove or for things that aren't actually stories.

    Stories given a standard rejection (to the moon): 887.

    Stories rejected for minor revisions (to Mars): 43. These are given encouragement that they're not far from being accepted, and it's particularly frustrating when these stories don't get resubmitted.

    Stories accepted for posting: 50.

    43 comments · 383 views
  • 7w, 16h
    Another fic reading! And it's a good 'un!

    My compadre Present Perfect has been involved in a reading of one of my favorites of my own stories and kept it secret for months. And it's a Scribbler performance, so you know it'll be good. Really, she's the top for dramatic readings, and she's doing dark fics all month, so head on over, enjoy her talents over all the recordings she's made, and give her some love in the comments!

    0 comments · 97 views
  • 8w, 1d
    Duet in the Folk Style

    I don't normally blog when I release a story, but Duet in the Folk Style had a big effect on me. It started out as a completely different type of project a long time ago, one which I had to abandon for lack of direction. Then it got a thorough overhaul of the original four chapters with an actual ending in mind. After writing the last two chapters, it made it very difficult to do my final editing sweep. It's just one of those stories that has a very different feel to it after the first read-through.

    It's also my first chaptered story I've published since my first fanfic three years ago. I haven't been in this position in so long that I don't really know what to expect anymore. I won't ramble—I'll save the reflective thoughts for the author's notes at the end of the last installment, and even then, I'll keep them relatively short. I just wanted to say here that I've developed an extreme emotional investment in this story, I loved developing and writing the characters of the three listed as main characters, and it's been a rough last couple of weeks while I put the finishing touches on it. I think it does some things not often found in the romance stories in this fandom.

    As I said in the synopsis, the story is complete. I decided long ago to finish a story before posting any of it, if I ever wrote another chaptered story, because so many things can pop up to sap my motivation to work on it. But if I complete it first, there's that drive to the finish line without anything negative holding me back. So here it is. And as a little bonus for those who read the blog, here's the full schedule:

    Sept. 28> Chapter 1: Overture

    Oct. 5> Chapter 2: Crescendo

    Oct. 12> Chapter 3: Divertimento

    Oct. 19> Chapter 4: Elegy

    Oct. 26> Chapter 5: alla Rustica

    Nov. 2> Chapter 6: Toccata

                  Epilogue: Encore

    4 comments · 96 views
  • 10w, 4d
    My Domestic Equestria

    So I posted this story earlier today, and it's an odd bird. More a peek at my home life with a budding MLP fan. As such, it's nonfiction, which surprised me a little that it passed moderation. I figured it'd be called too meta or something, and that I'd have to do it as a blog post instead. So here's a blog post to signal-boost what might have been a blog post.

    By the way, my wife just baked some cookies for real tonight. My son always helps with that, and this time he asked if Pinkie could help, too. Everypony got to share a cookie with him! I hope everyone finds this a cute window into a child's perspective on the show, along with a few of my own thoughts sprinkled throughout.

    2 comments · 129 views
  • ...

"Strong" is definitely a word that describes the Apples, and their family bonds are one of their biggest strengths. But Applejack will need to show her vulnerable side to get the most out of this day.

With her friends' help and a few cracks in her armor, Applejack is going to make this Mother's Day the best one yet.

Featured on Equestria Daily!

Cover art by Conicer

Thanks to Cassius, Filler, Corejo, Uma, Dublio, and Compendium of Steve for reviews/feedback.

First Published
30th Nov 2012
Last Modified
30th Nov 2012
#1 · 103w, 4d ago · · 8 ·


#2 · 103w, 4d ago · 2 · ·

sad story is sad :fluttercry:

#4 · 103w, 4d ago · · ·




#5 · 103w, 4d ago · · ·


Spambot. Ignore.

I'm glad to see this up.

#8 · 103w, 4d ago · · ·

Overall a nice touching story. Revealed a lot of Applejack's character.

I really want to know what the inscription reads. In some ways it is perfect that we don't find out.

I got caught when I reached "itailian." Took me a good 30 seconds before I realized the joke.

Nikola of Tesla

-Head of Applied Magic, Canterlot Institute of Technology

#9 · 103w, 4d ago · 2 · ·


>I really want to know what the inscription reads.

See story title, which also implies another phrase. The full quote would be, "Many women (mares) do noble things, but you surpass them all."

#10 · 103w, 4d ago · · ·

Awwww. :fluttercry: Stupid Applejack fanfics, making me cry . . .

It's really well-written. Nice. :twilightsmile:

#11 · 103w, 4d ago · · ·

And I was naive enough to think that this would be one fic in which Applejack's parents aren't dead...

Well, never mind.

#12 · 103w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1713752 Dude, high five bro hoof extravaganza

Anybody who can work Proverbs into a pony story get's props from me. I'll read it when I get home.

#13 · 103w, 4d ago · · ·


Oh come on, show some respect for the story, man.  :ajbemused:

#15 · 103w, 4d ago · · ·

yep i cried and congrats on EQD

#16 · 103w, 3d ago · · ·

Predictable yet endearing, and deserving of its EQD feature. Well-written throughout and characterized just right. Thumbs up for you!

#17 · 103w, 3d ago · · ·

Fantastic work! One of the best and most well written fics I've read, and very emotional. My hat off to you :ajsleepy:

#18 · 103w, 3d ago · · ·

I has a sad nao... I should really do something like this to remember my mom >.<

#20 · 103w, 3d ago · · ·

I'm going to go be sad now and think about life ;_;

#21 · 103w, 3d ago · · ·

Bawling like a filly now! :fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry:

#23 · 103w, 3d ago · · ·

A good sweet story, with a happy.sad feeling to it. :pinkiesad2:

#27 · 103w, 3d ago · · ·

Good story. :raritywink:

Don't know why, but I kept thinking this was gonna end up revealing Applejack to be Apple Bloom's mother.

I clued in right before the reveal about AJ's mom and thought,

"Why didn't I see that coming sooner?"

I didn't get teary-eyed or anything, but I did enjoy the bittersweet feels at the end.

#28 · 103w, 3d ago · · ·

:applecry::fluttercry::pinkiesad2::raritycry:Beautiful story, I cried.

#29 · 103w, 3d ago · · ·

Right in the feels, man. I've had a few friends go through losing a parent. Thanks for writing this. :ajsleepy:

#30 · 103w, 3d ago · · ·

Dear lord the FEELS:fluttercry::raritycry::raritydespair::applecry:

#31 · 103w, 3d ago · · ·

Oh man that was so bittersweet I loved every minute of it though. You captured Apple Jacks character wonderfully, wonderful work dude wonderful. I'm in tears :fluttercry::fluttershysad::

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#33 · 103w, 3d ago · · ·

I've waited far too long for this.:fluttercry:

#34 · 103w, 3d ago · · ·


This story is beautifully written, and gives a nice view of AJ's mom and dad.

I believe  that Mr. Backpack said it best.



#35 · 103w, 3d ago · · ·

Cute story, and very well written. I love bittersweet.

#37 · 103w, 2d ago · · ·

How to say absolutely nothing in eight thousand words. This isn't a sad story, it's better titled: "Applejack goes grocery shopping."

#38 · 103w, 2d ago · · ·

you amazing writers must be quite the adventure with your imagination, keen observation and sensitivity.

the story is also awesome  :pinkiesmile:

#39 · 103w, 2d ago · · ·


Such is the nature of a character study. Sorry you didn't like it.

#40 · 103w, 2d ago · · ·

Why am I a sucker for these stories?:raritydespair:

#41 · 103w, 2d ago · · ·

I knew exactly how it was going to go right from the get-go, and I still got teary-eyed at the end.

Cool story, bro. It was truly beautiful.

#42 · 103w, 2d ago · · ·

A word of advice, delete Regidar's comments. You have he power, use it. Any mod will agree that it is a rightful use of your power.

#43 · 103w, 2d ago · · ·


While I do agree to some extent with LunaUsesCaps, you could comfortably make the argument that showing a bit of her daily routine on Mothers' Day actually hammers home the routine of preparing a memorial lunch. The casual acceptance of it almost makes it even harder to accept because it's so rote for her that she has to force herself to stop and think about the mare she's remembering.

That said, I do think you went a bit too in-depth--there were plenty of interesting characters, but after getting 5k words in and still not reaching the main event of the story things started to drag a little bit.

#44 · 103w, 23h ago · · ·

This was absolutely beautiful. It was very well written and it avoided stating the obvious ending. All the the characters played their roles they way they should. Nice Job and Well Done!:pinkiesad2:

#45 · 103w, 17h ago · 1 · ·

You've got a good talent on the written word, there's no denying. But there's a good deal of very unnecessary scenes, dialogue, description and events that just don't need to be here. In writing, its called "deadwood". You could've reduced the grocery-shopping scene to a mere paragraph, and gone through the errands in short order as well. The focus of this story is exploring the bittersweet celebration of Mother's Day for the Apple Family. Yet, we spend about 3/4's of it following Applejack around as she prepares for the event. As readers, most won't care, to be honest. If you cut this down, it would have been Twilight learning about the odd traditions, and then the feast scene and headstone scene. There's just so much here that adds nothing to the story and the reason for the story's existence, we get bogged down and forget why we're here. Its not as sad and meaningful as it could be, because we spend half a page arguing over the price of food (i.e. What does this have to do with the price of tea in China). This had wonderful potential, but its just poorly done. :fluttershyouch:

#46 · 103w, 17h ago · 1 · ·


Well, I'm sorry you didn't like it. There was more to it than Applejack's journey, as you've indicated, but if that didn't connect to you, it's neither here nor there. Not everyone likes every story. Along those lines, I would encourage you to temper such statements in the future:

>This had wonderful potential, but its just poorly done.

That's much different than saying, "I didn't like it." One would clearly be your opinion. The other presumes to be everyone's.

#47 · 103w, 17h ago · 1 · ·

>>1736276 Very well then.

"I didn't like it."

#48 · 102w, 4d ago · · ·

I sort of agree that the story should be shorter, but there is something to be said for the juxtaposition of the mundane and the tragic.  So maybe...

20% shorter to make it 20% cooler :rainbowderp: ?

I still liked the story.

#49 · 102w, 18h ago · 2 · ·

I'm not sure why everyone feels that the story needs to be chopped down, quite honestly I thought the story needed to have Applejack going about all her shopping. It shows exactly how much work she puts into celebrating her mother's memory on Mother's Day, and clueless Twilight was somewhat adorable/somewhat painful because I kept wondering if she'd realize somewhere along the path that it was a very personal day for Applejack.

All in all, I think this is an excellent story as it is. Thank you for uploading it! :heart:

#50 · 99w, 3d ago · · ·

Not much of a shocker, of course, and it treads familiar ground, but it does so very, very well.  You've got a really good grasp of the canon character voices and their presentation on paper, something that I always seem to have trouble with.  Nicely done.

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