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    Absence and Brotherly Bonds Recorded Reading

    First things first, I wanted to apologize for my lack of activity on this site as of late. It's been a hectic few months and I haven't had time to really sit down and go any further in my 'Sour Notes' fanfic than I am already. I could you post the half chapter I have right now but you guys deserve better than that, so I will find the time to really sit down and work on this fanfiction! Just hang time and keep looking out for other great stories. If you look through some of my favorites, they'll be some really good ones to read until I finally get the ball rolling again.

    Secondly, i was messaged by Aramande who showed me a reading he had recorded. His very first recording and he chose my 'Brotherly Bonds' fanfic as his first story. I was really honored to have someone want to do a reading of my story and record it, and so I have to share the link and hopefully get him some more views and comments! Here's the link and I hope you enjoy it!

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  • 142w, 4d
    Brotherly Bond on EverFree Radio

    Brotherly Bond Review on EverFree Radio

    Had no idea my story got reviewed by the folks of EverFree Radio. They say it was meh.

    Meh to them as well :P.

    Seriously, I'm happy that they took the time to review the story, even if it didn't really wow them. It means something when someone will take a full 20 minutes to describe your work to others, so big thanks to them for doing that!

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    DerpyGate 2012 - My Thoughts

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  • 143w, 6d
    'Twilight's Guilty Little Pleasure' Post Comments and Next Project

    I had to wait awhile for it to set in but I think this pretty much sums up how I feel right now...


    I had NO idea that this random short story was gonna be such a hit! Thank you all so much for all the comments and faves and thumbs up! You all effin' rock so much! It made it EqD and folks have been referring it on blogs and forums, it's just amazing! Again, thank you all for everything!

    I had this idea stuck in my head for quite a while and I really wanted to get it on text. It was tough trying to match up Twilight's dancing with the music and I ended up listening to the song countless times to get it as close as I got it. But it's an awesome song, if you haven't listened to it on Youtube or iTunes, go do it now!

    As for my next project, it's currently in the works. The idea popped up literally a day after I posted Twilight's Guilty Little Pleasure on FIMfiction, and I hope it's gonna be another good one. If you want an idea of what to expect, I leave you with this video.

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  • 147w, 1d
    'Brotherly Bond' Post-Comments and Thanks

    Figured that since it’s been a while since I finished Brotherly Bonds (not counting the extensive typo corrections) I’d figure I’d just give off a few author’s notes and some big thanks to some of the commenters and folks who helped out with this story. It may be a long blog, so if you don’t feel like reading it all, please do see the special thanks section at the very least.

    First off, the inspiration behind this story came from two things. The first one was reading a story called Pipsqueak the Valiant a while back. It was a very well written and very enjoyable story that I would definitely recommend to everyone! If you liked my story, then Pipsqueak the Valiant is sure to entertain you as much as it did me!

    The second one was the low amount of Pipsqueak stories out there on FIMfiction. I think he’s a great character and needs a lot more love! As sad as it is, I don’t think he’ll be making another presence on the show, so fanfiction may be the only way to keep him around in the ponyverse. There are plenty of good ones that feature him, especially DawnFade’s Pirates For A Day and Eternity stories. More recommended reading from yours truly!

    Brotherly Bond was a lot of fun to write and I’m really happy with how it turned out and the amount of praise it received. I didn’t expect so much love and man tears to come from it, and it was a real joy to check my mail when I wake up in the morning or get home from work and see some tracks, faves, and comments in my inbox. If you star’d and/or commented, thank you so much for making my day!

    Now for the critique it’s received. I do appreciate the constructed criticism and will keep the advice in mind when I write future stories. That being said, I went into this story with it all planned out and told myself not to change a thing about the overall plot because of what someone else had said. I do understand the whole ‘not pleasing everyone all of the time’ so I focused on just making a story that I liked, hoping that others would enjoy it too. If at any point in the story you felt let down or disliked it, I do apologize if I wasted your time. However, I’m very happy with how it turned out and it seems that plenty of others feel the same way. Again, if you stuck through it to the end but didn’t like how it turned out, I still thank you for reading!

    One thing I did leave out was music cues. I love reading and writing with some mood-enhancing music in the background, but unless the sad songs from Kingdom Hearts and some tunes from Yu Yu Hakusho are your thing too, then my selection for some scenes may not have suited your tastes. If anyone is interested, I may post the songs I listened to while writing some of the scenes in another blog, because this one is getting long already. I might as well be typing out another story!

    Now for some recognition!


    Your Antagonist (VegaKS03) / Midnight Legend Press – It was awesome getting praise from one of the writers of the story that inspired this one! Really did keep the writing spirit alive and well in me! Thanks for the comments and thank you for your story! Hope I’ll be seeing more from you and your crew!

    Spazkit – Pointing out the whole y’all and ya’ll confusion made me go back and change it up. I’m not too good with dialect other than what I use myself on a daily basis. I think the story looked a lot better after that slight change. Thanks for that!

    Alexstrazsa – Before reading your comment on Equestria Daily, I honestly had no idea that you were the pre-reader before this fic made it onto the site. Your advice really helped me get this story looking better grammatically and in its presentation and it would have never gotten the boost of exposure without you! Thanks for the praise and for getting this story onto EQD!

    Cloudhammer, Equestrian Deadpool, Tonto the Trotter, NecromancerX69 – Some folks who left multiple comments and in some cases, a stream of manly tears! Thanks for all the praise, you all were a big part in making this story worth writing!

    MaverickVox – Thanks for sticking to the story to for as long as you did! I know that the direction it went may not have been to your liking, but your praise and the confidence you had in the story was really awesome! Hope the ending made up for the sudden twist, but if not, I still thank you!

    That’s about it. If you have any questions about the story you’d like answered, do feel free to ask here in the blog comments!

    Next story is on the way. All I can really say that it was inspired by a little song by Incubus called ‘Here In My Room.’ You may already have an idea of what to expect.

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  • ...

A year after Pipsqueak loses his brother in an accident, he is now living in Ponyville and approached by the CMC to join their Camping Crusade for cutie marks. Despite his apprehensions, he joins them, while the memories he and his brother shared plague him. Can Pipsqueak get over the pain and have fun with his new friends? And when danger approaches, will he have the strength to get himself and the CMC to safety?

Recorded reading by Aramande here! (

A/N: The huge inspiration for me writing a Pipsqueak story came from reading Pipsqueak the Valiant ( If you did enjoy this story, jump on over to the link and give it a read. A must read for all Pip fans!

Last note: I understand that in DawnFade's story 'Eternity,' there is a character named Patch. As much as I enjoyed that story, the Patch in this fic is not a direct reference to his story. I actually had this story up before his, but due to my extensive editing, it shows that this story came after his. Also, his Patch is not a reference to my Patch, this was just a case of freaky coincidence. Do read his story too, ( it's another great Pip story that you are sure to love!

First Published
4th Jan 2012
Last Modified
12th Jan 2012
#1 · 150w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

My name is Unicron and I approve of this


#2 · 150w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Not bad, not bad at all.

#3 · 150w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Awesome. Tracking this.

#4 · 150w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Beautiful, glad to see Pipsqueak's getting more love:pinkiehappy:

#5 · 150w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I second Dayland's motion! Awesome; tracked!

#6 · 150w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


And five stars of course.. Eh heh...

#7 · 150w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

yes i agree very well written!!!!! so beautiful i almost cried!!! thats how good it is:yay:fluttercry::pinkiehappy:

#8 · 150w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

This is a good start and I really want to see it do well.  You really get the idea down that the adults know he needs to talk about the incident to get over it, but the youngster doesn't understand it yet.

However, I have one minor concern.  I worry that Pipsqueak is going to come off as too sad.  I know that's because he's being thrown into situations that remind him of what happened, but I feel like if he doesn't show a brief smile or something soon, the story's gonna go into "Batman Meme" mode.  You know the one.

I don't really rate stories until they're mostly done, but right now, this is definitely in the 4.5-5 star range.  Keep it up.

#9 · 150w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Awww, poor Pip. *Hugs*

I've been in Pip's hooves. It sucks royal.

#10 · 150w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Good Chapter. So this takes place after Lesson Zero but before Nightmare Night Correct?

#11 · 150w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>111531 Indeed. The idea popped in my head midway through typing this chapter out.

#12 · 150w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>109725 Glad you're enjoying it so far! I'm trying my best not to keep Pip in a total depression. I'm midway through chapter 3 already so I'll definitely keep that in mind while I'm working.

#13 · 150w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Track+5 Stars.

This story is too legit to quit.

#14 · 150w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Sorry, but this is just jumping out at me.

“Maybe I should do as that dragon that was holed up in that mountain!” Scootaloo proposed. The do should be go. I don't know why, but it just really stuck out to me. :applejackunsure:

#15 · 150w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Other then that, great chapter.

#16 · 150w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>112964 I missed that during my proofread. I went ahead and made the correction. Thanks for pointing that out!

#17 · 150w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Never a problem good sir!

#18 · 150w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·


#19 · 150w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

aww, poor Pipsqueak, almost had a manly tear fall for him

#20 · 150w, 17h ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

This is a fantastic story definitely tracking now :twilightsmile:

#21 · 150w, 2h ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Confound these emotional pony tales. They drive me to cry manly tears T_T

#22 · 149w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

I'm one of the writers from Pipsqueak the Valiant, and I'd just like to say your story is inspiring ME to write some more fanfics, keep up the good work bro, I'm really enjoying this story:pinkiehappy:. That being said.... MOAR NAO:flutterrage:!

#23 · 149w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

Ah, my old nemesis... Cliffhangers...

Excellent work friend, looking forward to the next chapter :twilightsmile:

Manly tears were shed at Pip's flashback

#24 · 149w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

I hope you don't take this the wrong way, but you were so close!  You could've ended it there and it would have been a perfect story.  The emotional punch was excellent, you got me into Pip's story, it was believable, well-written, in character, you resolved the conflicts perfectly!

And then the wolves showed up out of nowhere.  I'm not gonna call it a complete shark-jumping moment here, I don't know how you're going to handle and resolve it, and it could be great.  The way the rest of this story is, I would be shocked if you didn't pull it off.  But from a pure storytelling perspective, you didn't need to bring the wolves into the picture.  You had a conflict, a resolution, a conclusion, you had it.  I'm curious to see what happens now, but to me, it's not needed.  You had a great emotional drama, and now we have an unneeded action sequence.  It's a complete 180 in tone, and it doesn't work for me.

Again, I don't want you to feel insulted.  This has been a great story so far, and I've loved it.  Just take it as a bit of constructive criticism for the next time you write a story.  Sometimes, when you think it doesn't feel "epic" enough, that's kind of a trap.  Not all stories need to have an epic action moment, and to me, this is one of those.

#25 · 149w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

PipBloom shipping? *Checks tags again.* Dang'it!

#26 · 149w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

>>120857 I know you mean no kind of insult at all. I do appreciate you keeping up with the story thus far, as well as the constructive criticism. It is something that I will keep in mind in the future rather than go forth all barrels blazing or M.Night Shyamalanin' it. This is my first published story in a good 6,7 years, and before that I was doing all action stories (fights, blood, swearing, all that rot). This is the first primarily emotional fic I've ever written, but it seems to be a huge step forward than how I normally had written in the past.

I have had this fic planned out from start to finish before I even started writing it, and I do intend to finish it as I had thought it out. Hopefully, the conclusion will clear up any disappointment I had caused you, but rest assured your advice will be kept in mind for the future. Again, thank you for your praise and the advice!

#27 · 149w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·


:flutterrage: Madness!!! There are only Timber Wolves in that Forest!

:moustache: I am EVIL!!! don't pay me attention and please keep up the good work my good sir.

#28 · 149w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

I actually shed tears at patches death:fluttercry:... Why Patch, why?:raritydespair:

#29 · 149w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

And for the record: CURSE YOU CLIFFHANGER:flutterrage:!

#30 · 149w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

manly tears were shed, an excellent chapter

I'm also annoyed that despite me clicking 5 stars, that it somehow drops from 4.8 to 4.7... dumb math. You got 5 from me even if the website says otherwise :twilightsheepish:

#31 · 149w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

So much dawwww. :pinkiesad2::fluttershysad:

#32 · 149w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

:pinkiecrazy: Yeeeeeeeeeeeeeesssssssssssssss

:moustache: please keep up the good work my good sir.

#33 · 149w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

even "MAN TEARS" cannot describe how good this fic is. I applaud you sir/madam  

#34 · 149w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

Wonderful story, really well written and executed.:heart:

#35 · 149w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

Excuse me for a second... :fluttercry:

#36 · 149w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

Thank you for this chapter I really mean that. I was in somewhat of a quitter's slump earlier, and then I read this. This completely 180ed all of that pessimism and now I just want to create. Thanks for this.

#37 · 149w, 11h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Sorry, it just popped out at me but “Ah’m really glad ya’ll can make it, Pipsqueak.” Apple Bloom said as she walked over to him.The apostrophe should be before the a (Y'all) not after it (ya'll) and it should be you anyway. (Y'all is you all so thus isn't used for one person)

Other than that I'm realllly enjoying it! :pinkiehappy:

#38 · 149w, 10h ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

>>133481 You'll see it quite a bit then I'm afraid... I tried to catch the Apple Family dialect into this fic, and up until now I never used the words "ya'll" or "y'all" in any form of writing. I'll be brushing up on other fics before I start the next one to get a better idea of how it should be typed in situations like this. Glad you're enjoying it! Thanks for the comment! :twilightsmile:

#39 · 148w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

That was a beautiful story. You really expanded on Pip's back story and family, which was amazing to read. The whole tale was tragic, sweet, and wonderful to read. I'm still amazed as I type this. Seriously, 4/5 stars - 5/5 if you go back and fix some of the problems. This has honestly been the closest to tears a story has brought me too in a long time. Just incredible. I'll look forward to seeing this on EQD.

#40 · 148w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

>>137572 I am in the process of getting this on EQD and had a pre-reader help me out with some suggestions of how to correct my work. I just finished fixing up the story a bit so hopefully it won't be long until it'll be on their website!

#41 · 147w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

This is the most I have cried in years...  Not lying...  And I can't tell if it is from sadness or happiness or the bittersweet taste of bittersweetness...

#42 · 147w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

:fluttercry: :raritycry: :applecry: SO SWEET!

#43 · 147w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

I don't know why and I don't know how, but someone fics just don't seem to get man tears out of me, though this one came close.

No, I'm not lying.  Stop looking at me like that :ajbemused:

xD j/k

You did a really awesome job here.  I hope you keep writing, you've got talent!  :pinkiehappy:

#44 · 147w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

Manly tears.

They have been shed.:pinkiesad2:

That was stupendous.:yay:

#45 · 147w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

So far it's a winner ^.=.^

#46 · 147w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

I didn't cry during My Little Dashie. I cried during this. Congrats.

#47 · 147w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

:raritycry: curse thease fan fics they cause my mascara to run!:raritydespair:

#48 · 147w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

That was pretty awesome internal angst and coming of age right there.  Bravo. :scootangel:

That said... I kinda feel like the "ghost/memory of Patch" was overplayed.  Less is often more, and I think one or two key moments where the ghost helped would have been a more powerful story - because Pip could look back later and realize he'd done something amazing, just like Patch knew he could.  As it stands, his overreliance on the ghost makes the coming of age diluted.

But overall... :pinkiehappy:

#49 · 147w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

Well dayumn! :heart:

#50 · 147w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

I know I cried when he was telling Apple Bloom about when they found out about Patch. Ah, the heroic sacrifice. Nothing more noble, and nothing more heart-wrenching. Beautiful piece.

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