As I stroke each letter key The only thing that concerns me Is that my fingers dance so well To create a perfect story to tell
Rainbow Dash sinks into a state of depression after blowing her chance to win Equestria's Best Young Flyer Competition for the third time in a row. Nopony has been able to cheer her up for the past three weeks. However, a young, not so strong flyer is determined to do whatever it takes to get her heroine out of her slump.
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air and rand like a joyful tune
she expected to be a three-peat was now a constant (add a hyphen)
the organe filly shouted
Other minor grammar and punctuation bits, but nothing spectacularly bad. You have a 'To Be Continued' stuck in at an odd place near the end, though.
So far it sounds like it could make for a rather cute story. Keep it up.
1546269 Thanks Martian! I appreciate the overlook of my work. I should've looked over that one a little bit better. Also, sorry about the weird placed TBC, threw up 3 of my incomplete stories as a way to force me to finish them and get feedback to whehter I'm on a decent track or not. Thanks again!
I was wonderin about that out-of-place TBC lol.
Please do continue this.
Aw, this sounds really cute, can't wait to see where it goes!
Aww Scoot to the rescue