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Frozen Icewind


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Ice... Why is it there? To let you know it's cold enough to freeze water? To tell you that it's too cold for you to stay outside? Well, for one pony... It's all he's known. Recently a pony moved into Ponyville, living on the outskirts of the small town. On days when he would come into town to get supplies, the pony wore a cloak and pulled the hood way down over his eyes. When he talked to somepony, his breath could be seen and the temperature would drop around him. Who is this mysterious pony and for what reason does he have in Ponyville. A trio of young fillies followed him around to find out.

I got a little help from Chocovich, A big thank you to him for doing the Cutie Mark Crusaders dialogue.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 18 )

This is quite an interesting concept and story, I expect great things to come of this story, as long as you keep doing either this good or better than this.

I like the imagry you gave with the words, and the flow of the story so far, you have given us a nice amount of information without giving to much away, and I kinda lost my steam... crud.. i'm to tired to finish this review >.< sorry, i'll finish it the next chance I get, but rest assured I truly liked the story and there were only a few concerns I had. So keep up the good work hun :twilightsmile:

Sorry about the length between chapters... Not easy trying not to make the Mysterious Stallion sound so Gary-Stu.

I would like to see what happens next:pinkiesmile:

This is a promissing story.

I will say this "I like this storys OC" because he likes the winter just like me.

Pax

1739205 YOU WILL BE EXTERMINATED FOR CORRECTING ME AND MAKING ME LOOK INFERIOR!

1739206
Bring it on! Allons-y! *brandishes a Sonic Screwdriver*
(Besides, all I said was "Yes, I do have Skyrim.")

Pax

A SONIC PROBE? IT IS HARMLESS. ALSO, I AM S-S-S- I APO-APO-. YOU GET WHAT I'M TRYING TO SAY.

1739225
It's not a probe, it's a screwdriver.
(Man, I can't believe you watch Doctor Who and play Skyrim.)

Pax

1739237 I NEVER SAID I PLAYED SKYRIM. ARE YOUR HEARING FUNCTIONS MALFUNCTIONING?

Not bad! Need an editor?

It's a nice concept, but you may be rushing things a bit too much.

1810029 You're right... But the 2nd half of chapter 2 will make up for that.

1810037 I'll be waiting! And if you need an editor: Feel free to ask me! Although I don't have all the time in the world at the moment.

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