Pinkimena's Breakfast

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Pinkimena Diane Pie. Often a mare of cheerful smiles and copious amounts of sweets, she hides something in her basement, and occasionally goes into it to retrieve a tasty morsel for her breakfast. This is one such of those times.

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SunsetyDays

SunsetyDays #1 · Oct 24th, 2012 · · ·

Nice fakeout ending. It's all going up to her being cupcakes, and then... won't spoil the surprise.

Birivalos

Birivalos #2 · Oct 24th, 2012 · · ·

*Points* See that? I see what you did with it.

Kilokk

Kilokk #3 · Oct 24th, 2012 · · ·

HA! you've earned those. Jolly good show!

Clemerl

Clemerl #4 · Oct 24th, 2012 · · ·

God damn it! I fell for it! I've never even read "Cupcakes" and I still fell for it! You are good at this.

In retrospect, I should have known with the whole 'missing dark tag' thing going on.

charyoshi

charyoshi #5 · Oct 24th, 2012 · · ·

You allllmost got me. I only figured it out towards the very end. Well played sah.

The Cokegamer

The Cokegamer #6 · Oct 24th, 2012 · · ·

I don't want to be rude, but the fake-out ending is starting to get really cliché. I just wish some one would write it straight because honestly, that would actually surprise me. Other than that, your writing is really good and it was very easy to imagine everything you wanted readers to see. Kudos