After the disastrous defeat of Chrysalis' hive at Canterlot Ponykind has become aware of the Changeling race and is on the lookout for them, making daily and nightly feedings much more of a challenge for every Changeling hive simply trying to survive.
One such hive has currently infiltrated the household of Lyra Heartstrings under the guise of Bonbon while her co-owner is out of town for the week. While soaking in her affection for her friend, a book that Lyra has been reading draws the attention of the infiltrator while Lyra is out of the house and she decides to read it.
Later, a younger Changeling that had listened over their mental connection to one another decides to try transforming into one of the main characters of the story, and discovers that while in that form, he is no longer connected to the hive and can think freely and act completely for himself! Unfortunately, free thinking isn't all it's cracked up to be...
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As always, should new characters be added later, their picture-thing will be added as well. We need a 'Changelings' category.
My queen needs a name! Oh yeah, and so does the youngling, though I was thinking about having him choose his own human name instead and skip out on giving him an Equestian name.
Also, seeing as how often this story's pic is used I think I need a better picture, preferably one that either shows a Changeling with a Human shadow on a wall behind it, or the reverse.
Google Images search, why hath thou forsaken me?! *Cries manly, dramatic tears*
Anybody care to help me out with that?
896144 You should go for Chrysailis, if you're talk about the same queen who invaded Canterlot. Or are you suggesting mutiple queens?
Anywho, Twerp sounds like a good name for a little Changeling! If you're set on a human name however, try to come up with something that could be a pony name too, like Chrystal or Butch.
Well each hive of insect has a queen. So why would it be different for Changelings.
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Yes, it's a different hive. Perhaps I was not being bluntly direct enough.
Sure, why not.
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I say Nymph and Nit, because those are fun words.
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I like 'Nymph', but why Nit? Besides it being 'fun' as it were. And what is a Nit?
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nit
Noun:
The egg or young form of a louse or other parasitic insect, esp. the egg of a head louse attached to a human hair.
Also it makes me think of nitwit and chuckle.
How about Barbossa for a name for the younger one
Tweak for the younger one.
Neat story. Please continue.
the 'Bon-bon-bon-etc' bit is credited to, but stolen from TheRobotButterfly from Youtube. I would have asked her permission, but the 'send message' button on Youtube seems to have disappeared with the latest 'upgrade'. Personally, I thought it was fine and functional FOUR 'UPGRADES' AGO!
Another awesome and funny chapter.
Meh, he can put down a handprint.
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Well, there's only 296 views (as of this comment) so it's not like there's alot of people (relatively speaking) that are reading it. Most folk are either lazy, forgetful, or have nothing really to say. I'm kind of used to it.
What annoys me is that even though a few hundred or over a thousand people have read some of my finished fics, there's still less than a hundred comments on (most of) them and (relatively speaking) almost no votes for positive or negative on it.
It makes it harder to improve as a writer when I get no constructive criticism telling me where to improve or telling me what I'm doing wrong. Other than the occasional "you left italics on somewhere" or "this word is wrong, I think you meant" I normally don't get much in the way of self or story improvement.
Just noticed you had updated this thing, and it really caught my eye. Mostly because the genius cover art (creds for that), but also because the story sounded REALLY funny.
I am to busy to read it now, but i am going to read this as soon as i have the time
Mandible, Exoskeleton, Carapace, Joint, Larva, Metamorphosis, Cephalothorax, etc.
Just think of insectoid names.
You lamented lacking criticism, but without reading the story, I can only criticize the wordy description. Shorter sentences communicating the same information would have more impact.
There is a changeling tag.
My story portrayed changelings as a nameless collective until Chrysalis's death. After, I used names like Cassius and Aurelia because Chrysalis is Latin.
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I meant Catagory-wise. There's nothing there. Or if there is, it is not visible to me.
I have removed the comedy catagory-thingie because this story kind of ran away from where I originally wanted to take it. While it may reappear depending on how this goes, for the moment it's gone. Does anyone think there should be something i should add to it?
I just discovered that I'd used Chrysalis' name as the name of the queen for this fic's. Why did no one mention this later on after I named her Nymph? That's kinda a big goof.
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well i am too busy reading the fanfic to comment.
this being an exception and my first comment ever, so nothing more to say really.
I like your Changelings.