the princess has gone to far *burst thought place doors with c4 and pulls out shotgun* walk down the hall burst though the doors to the throne room prepare to die princess *kills all ponies in the room execpt the princess * magic dose not work on me well looks like this pony is about to die *pulls shotgun trigger click* fine the hard way stops the princess from moveing drops a frag grenade good bye *boom* the hell for earth poines is over
While scientific racism may apply to this situation, somewhat, Earth ponies are naturally the most resilient of the three, whilst unicorns are the only ones who can manipulate magic and pegasi at the airborne ponies. I haven't read the latest chapter yet, but I feel as if near everyone commenting about the story, and even the comments of others, has forgotten that and needs a swift kick to the flank to remind them.
Stop being so hateful, genocide is wrong regardless of who it happens to! ( To clarify, so is torture, slavery, mental torture, sexual harrassment, rape, and emotional abuse.)
181240 Not to be a stick in the mud, and this is really a great story, but I think you might have to either remove the option to add a comment (if possible) or just remove these stories from the site, more because of the users it seems to be attracting, and has attracted, rather than the actual story.
116870 Right, just read the chapter. Only one spelling mistake, yay
“You gave me to them.” Applebloom continued paying no attention to her sister’s excuses. “You game me to him.” she emphasized.
easy mistake to make, I suppose, and good job. Interesting chapter, though I've little to say other than what I said previously. So sad, but still well-written.
Your edit updated the story, and I got super duper uber excited, like UPDATES but then there wasn't an update, just Chapter 8. FiMFic has a tracking system that likes to torture me. Rawr.
183125 Thanks for catching that, just updated it. And I completely agree that this story is drawing a crowd of undesirables; however that is expected and can happen to almost any story. Also I'm not going to abolish commenting. I believe that everyone is free to express their opinions; however comments that are extremely offensive I will take down as I have done before. Thank you for you're input though, much appreciated.
183301 No problem. I wasn't trying to force anything on you (Irony, since this is a holocaust-eqsue fic.), and I suppose deleting the extremely offensive comments also works, if a bit laborous.
Wait, you've already deleted the extremely offensive comments? The buck did those things say that made them extremely offensive, compared to some of the still-up comments? Oh, and while I agree that all stories can draw haters (Paticularly shipping fics, a personal favourite of mine ), most things that relate to violence or gore in some way tend to draw the darker side of FiMFic, whereas this story draws both that crowd, and what I assume are people who support the Nazi regime (Premature assumption, I know, but somebody had to say it eventually, may as well be someone logical and reasonable, as opposed to "OMG NAZI!!!!!!11one1!1eleven!!!"), which is combining into some rather unsavoury comments.
I'm an advocate for free speech and free political views, don't get me wrong, I just really dislike having to deal with people that take those privileges to the extreme (Ironically enough, what those people support usually removes privileges such as that, and more.)
I think a holocaust cross-over fic is a fantastic idea, in theory, and I'm tempted to write a Hiroshima/Nagasaki type one myself (Except I'm terrible at anything but romance. ), but because of the nature of these extreme events, extremists will be attracted to such stories, both those who support and oppose the aforementioned behaviours, views, and statements, and they will often incite a large amount of emotion in most audiences, for one reason or another. I commend you for undertaking such a large and somewhat risky task, and I applaud you for doing it so well and keeping the comments and such somewhat clean, compared to the cesspool they could easily become, whilst still allowing everypony the freedom to comment as they wish.
Gee, that turned into a bit of an essay didn't it? Anyhow, good job is the main message, I think.
182953 dude this isnt human i dont think the princess can be killed with the horn but you can try also see why lunars best princess xD also mister athour i like nightflares no shit attuide tbh xD
183866 ... sigh Oh joy, another person going on a rant about how they could beat celestia, even when it has nothing to do with this rather well writtern story. Good day.
184875 Are you joking? Swap out magic with guns/knives/various torture devices, humanize the terms and characters (Earth pony-> Jew, etc.), and it could be a story from a Holocaust survivor.
Cupcakes was (I don't know, I'm not stupid enough to read it) well written, apparently, but it inherently had a lot of shock value, and so does this story, except there is one difference. This story is a ponified retelling of a horrific period in history, and Cupcakes is (hopefully) not a ponified reality, though maybe a fantasy for some people.
If this was Cupcakes all over again, it most certainly would be labelled gore, and I definitely wouldn't be here. This is a ponified holocaust, and the author could change that later, but for now that is all it is. Don't compare a well-written, not-so-bad story like this to Cupcakes, Sweet Apple Massacre, or any of the shock-value, horror pony stories.
Hey guys, I'm working on the new chapter but it will take some time because I'm playing at a hockey tournament this weekend in North Carolina... It will be worth it though I promise!!
193588 i know sweeny todd is fiction that is what the story of cupcakes is based on and 2. i know it's hard for me i have truble im dislectic ok leave the writeing out of this
Firstly : More updates please! Secondly : Good luck with the hockey! Love and tolerate that puck right into the buckin' goal-thingies! Thirdly : 193688 , not trying to be mean/rude here, but the Holocaust actually happened, and this a ponified variation of it. One fictional horror story based off another doesn't really have any value as a justification. P.S I'm sorry for Emberstarfireclan, some bronies can be really fussy about spelling and the like, forgetting that MLP is for everyone, not just English speakers / those without learning disabilities (Such as dyslexia.).
For a fandom known for love and tolerance, we have a lot of people who are kinda... bad at loving and tolerating.
I'm almost tempted to write a side-fic where it turns out that Night Flare is a good guy. He takes certain really attractive girls back to his place and then tells him that if they pretend that he's raping them (and they have to really, really stay in character to avoid suspicion by crying and telling their friends they've been raped, etc.), then that means they'll stay alive for sure -- since his superiors let them fall under his own control. Plus, during the time that everypony thinks he's raping them-- he's actually feeding them, hugging them, comforting them, telling them what to do to help out other ponies, and so on.
But then in the end, he gets shot by rebels and dies like a true hero (e.g. an unsung hero with no hope). Ultimately though, his kindness lives on in Pinkie Pie's heart. I read something about a real Nazi guard who had that life story... I think.
198592 interesting idea but it wouldn't really go along with him ordering the death of the colt in the beginning... by the way everypony, i'm still working on the next chapter, there's a ton of medical terminology....
198676 Now i know i have a bucked up imagination, but that doesnt mean im amused at this torture stuff. *coughmrhappyfacecough* But this is a very interesting(what am i saying(ITS AWESOME)) story and i cant wait to see this next chapter!! (my 1st and 2nd sentence really contradict eachother, i know)
I'm actually kind of glad you're writing your own Angel of Death scene first before I do my thing. Then I can use it for insipration. Thanks.
Because, myself, I don't really know about my own story. I have kind of a general idea of "Luna coltnaps this unicorn and cuts along his sides to put wings on him, which she sawed off of a pegasus, and then Luna uses some evil magic to make him into an alicorn", but I'm still working on specifics. I'll probably borrow a lot of what you do in the next chapters to incorporate into my own fic. That's if you don't mind, of course.
You're right about the whole Night Flare thing, but I don't know. I suppose if I were to write out my ideas then it would be more of a spiritual sequel to your story than a side story (I might even change the antagonist from Celestia and friends to somepony else). I also would want to put in the near ending Night Flare actually seriously falling in love with one of the campmates that he "rapes" (but not really since he's a good guy), and maybe they actually have relations after all (but like husband-and-wife level, tender relations). I really like this idea and so I'll stew it over.
Nutha Bitch got raped! NightFlare is my persnoal Idol.
Why is ever sonnufabitch here supporting the bad guys? It's like they want me to kill them all!
182420
you like raping ponies? cool story bro... I hope you find out why that is so messed up, but for now take comfort in your blinding ignorance foal!
the princess has gone to far *burst thought place doors with c4 and pulls out shotgun* walk down the hall burst though the doors to the throne room prepare to die princess *kills all ponies in the room execpt the princess * magic dose not work on me well looks like this pony is about to die *pulls shotgun trigger click* fine the hard way stops the princess from moveing drops a frag grenade good bye *boom* the hell for earth poines is over
you're just pumping out updates left and right now
Oh god, the horror of these comments.
While scientific racism may apply to this situation, somewhat, Earth ponies are naturally the most resilient of the three, whilst unicorns are the only ones who can manipulate magic and pegasi at the airborne ponies. I haven't read the latest chapter yet, but I feel as if near everyone commenting about the story, and even the comments of others, has forgotten that and needs a swift kick to the flank to remind them.
Stop being so hateful, genocide is wrong regardless of who it happens to!
( To clarify, so is torture, slavery, mental torture, sexual harrassment, rape, and emotional abuse.)
181240
Not to be a stick in the mud, and this is really a great story, but I think you might have to either remove the option to add a comment (if possible) or just remove these stories from the site, more because of the users it seems to be attracting, and has attracted, rather than the actual story.
Seriously, that mrhappyface guy is .
116870
Right, just read the chapter.
Only one spelling mistake, yay
“You gave me to them.” Applebloom continued paying no attention to her sister’s excuses. “You game me to him.” she emphasized.
easy mistake to make, I suppose, and good job. Interesting chapter, though I've little to say other than what I said previously.
So sad, but still well-written.
181240
Your edit updated the story, and I got super duper uber excited, like UPDATES but then there wasn't an update, just Chapter 8.
FiMFic has a tracking system that likes to torture me. Rawr.
183125 Thanks for catching that, just updated it. And I completely agree that this story is drawing a crowd of undesirables; however that is expected and can happen to almost any story. Also I'm not going to abolish commenting. I believe that everyone is free to express their opinions; however comments that are extremely offensive I will take down as I have done before. Thank you for you're input though, much appreciated.
183301
No problem. I wasn't trying to force anything on you (Irony, since this is a holocaust-eqsue fic.), and I suppose deleting the extremely offensive comments also works, if a bit laborous.
Wait, you've already deleted the extremely offensive comments?
The buck did those things say that made them extremely offensive, compared to some of the still-up comments?
Oh, and while I agree that all stories can draw haters (Paticularly shipping fics, a personal favourite of mine ), most things that relate to violence or gore in some way tend to draw the darker side of FiMFic, whereas this story draws both that crowd, and what I assume are people who support the Nazi regime (Premature assumption, I know, but somebody had to say it eventually, may as well be someone logical and reasonable, as opposed to "OMG NAZI!!!!!!11one1!1eleven!!!"), which is combining into some rather unsavoury comments.
I'm an advocate for free speech and free political views, don't get me wrong, I just really dislike having to deal with people that take those privileges to the extreme (Ironically enough, what those people support usually removes privileges such as that, and more.)
I think a holocaust cross-over fic is a fantastic idea, in theory, and I'm tempted to write a Hiroshima/Nagasaki type one myself (Except I'm terrible at anything but romance. ), but because of the nature of these extreme events, extremists will be attracted to such stories, both those who support and oppose the aforementioned behaviours, views, and statements, and they will often incite a large amount of emotion in most audiences, for one reason or another. I commend you for undertaking such a large and somewhat risky task, and I applaud you for doing it so well and keeping the comments and such somewhat clean, compared to the cesspool they could easily become, whilst still allowing everypony the freedom to comment as they wish.
Gee, that turned into a bit of an essay didn't it?
Anyhow, good job is the main message, I think.
Great fic material dude.
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182953 dude this isnt human i dont think the princess can be killed with the horn but you can try also see why lunars best princess xD also mister athour i like nightflares no shit attuide tbh xD
182953
There are no c4 or guns in the ponies lands, magic effects evrybody.
183388
Please stop going on about luna, in what way is that relevent?
Also good story development so far, can't wait for more.
Good day.
Bro, you killed fluttershy
i officaly dont like you
But i will still rate for the fact that you had enough balls to manage to let that happen...
holy fucking shit bro that much rage for earth ponies....
I am now watching you
I like you however so im following XD
HAIL CELESTIA
183398 not me im to powerful and only i do because im chuck norris
183866
... sigh
Oh joy, another person going on a rant about how they could beat celestia, even when it has nothing to do with this rather well writtern story.
Good day.
The official song of Nazi Equestria
this kinda makes me want to make a longer version of my pony WWII story. Our stories are so alike, yet so different.
I can't keep reading this. I don't even care what happens anymore. It's Cupcakes all over again.
184875
Are you joking?
Swap out magic with guns/knives/various torture devices, humanize the terms and characters (Earth pony-> Jew, etc.), and it could be a story from a Holocaust survivor.
Cupcakes was (I don't know, I'm not stupid enough to read it) well written, apparently, but it inherently had a lot of shock value, and so does this story, except there is one difference.
This story is a ponified retelling of a horrific period in history, and Cupcakes is (hopefully) not a ponified reality, though maybe a fantasy for some people.
If this was Cupcakes all over again, it most certainly would be labelled gore, and I definitely wouldn't be here.
This is a ponified holocaust, and the author could change that later, but for now that is all it is. Don't compare a well-written, not-so-bad story like this to Cupcakes, Sweet Apple Massacre, or any of the shock-value, horror pony stories.
184145 sorry i get a little board
185035 just to let you know the story of cupcakes is based on sweeny todd he use to kill them and turn them into pie
so i have to say this
good day
Hey guys, I'm working on the new chapter but it will take some time because I'm playing at a hockey tournament this weekend in North Carolina... It will be worth it though I promise!!
the suspense is killing me continue
How could you rape them?! .........And not give us any of the cloppy details?
193588 i know sweeny todd is fiction that is what the story of cupcakes is based on and 2. i know it's hard for me i have truble im dislectic ok leave the writeing out of this
193660 ugh... because this isn't a clop fic
193949 Oh.... It isn't?
193949
I must apologise on behalf of my colleuge here.
Good day.
Я говорю в воображении!
Firstly : More updates please!
Secondly : Good luck with the hockey! Love and tolerate that puck right into the buckin' goal-thingies!
Thirdly : 193688 , not trying to be mean/rude here, but the Holocaust actually happened, and this a ponified variation of it. One fictional horror story based off another doesn't really have any value as a justification.
P.S I'm sorry for Emberstarfireclan, some bronies can be really fussy about spelling and the like, forgetting that MLP is for everyone, not just English speakers / those without learning disabilities (Such as dyslexia.).
For a fandom known for love and tolerance, we have a lot of people who are kinda... bad at loving and tolerating.
195993
English if you would.
I don't understand that backwards lettering at all.
Good day.
196050 i know it happend i do gcse history plus holocaust is basic ww2 history i know a guy who survived it thanks to my school
196216 It's not backwards it's russian.
196491
Same differance.
Good day.
I'm almost tempted to write a side-fic where it turns out that Night Flare is a good guy. He takes certain really attractive girls back to his place and then tells him that if they pretend that he's raping them (and they have to really, really stay in character to avoid suspicion by crying and telling their friends they've been raped, etc.), then that means they'll stay alive for sure -- since his superiors let them fall under his own control. Plus, during the time that everypony thinks he's raping them-- he's actually feeding them, hugging them, comforting them, telling them what to do to help out other ponies, and so on.
But then in the end, he gets shot by rebels and dies like a true hero (e.g. an unsung hero with no hope). Ultimately though, his kindness lives on in Pinkie Pie's heart. I read something about a real Nazi guard who had that life story... I think.
198592 interesting idea but it wouldn't really go along with him ordering the death of the colt in the beginning...
by the way everypony, i'm still working on the next chapter, there's a ton of medical terminology....
198676 Now i know i have a bucked up imagination, but that doesnt mean im amused at this torture stuff. *coughmrhappyfacecough*
But this is a very interesting(what am i saying(ITS AWESOME)) story and i cant wait to see this next chapter!!
(my 1st and 2nd sentence really contradict eachother, i know)
I'm actually kind of glad you're writing your own Angel of Death scene first before I do my thing. Then I can use it for insipration. Thanks.
Because, myself, I don't really know about my own story. I have kind of a general idea of "Luna coltnaps this unicorn and cuts along his sides to put wings on him, which she sawed off of a pegasus, and then Luna uses some evil magic to make him into an alicorn", but I'm still working on specifics. I'll probably borrow a lot of what you do in the next chapters to incorporate into my own fic. That's if you don't mind, of course.
You're right about the whole Night Flare thing, but I don't know. I suppose if I were to write out my ideas then it would be more of a spiritual sequel to your story than a side story (I might even change the antagonist from Celestia and friends to somepony else). I also would want to put in the near ending Night Flare actually seriously falling in love with one of the campmates that he "rapes" (but not really since he's a good guy), and maybe they actually have relations after all (but like husband-and-wife level, tender relations). I really like this idea and so I'll stew it over.
183398
So does kinetic force.... It's universal.
Nice development.