I love both reading and writing fan fics. Most may be about rainbow dash or Vinyl scratch because I love both of them :D
The mane six find themselves in the middle of a brand new world with no knowledge of how to return.
Awesome title I know. Even better description but give the story a chance. My second fic so don't expect anything wonderful. Also I would appreciate some constructive criticism if anyone is willing to give it.
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To quote a great minecraft video:
"BECAUSE IT HASN'T BEEN DONE BEFORE!"
I like the premise. However, there were some slight errors in the typing that could tick some grammar nazis off.
Hmm. I like the idea, but I've seen so other PiM (Ponies in Minecraft) fan fics around this site. You'll want to make this interesting and brush up on a bit of your grammar skills.
1619113 I find that making the stories interesting and engaging usually wards off the Grammar Nazis.
Speaking from experiences and encounters with Grammar Nazis.
I've added this story to the leading Minecraft group on the site. Look through the stories for some pointers, as this particular crossover is tricky to pull off effectively.
My first thought was, "PONY MOD!!!"
That's what happened when you go to the void
How did Applejack get used to this world so easily? How did she know that she can break blocks? How did she know to attempt going into the inventory? It could be from skill/luck, but she got there waay too quicky. Try and slow it down in later chapters.
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Mine little pony. BEST. MOD. EVER!
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-Kiryu
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"Bring me dat ass!"
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i lost a minecraft story and cant find it, it was called...my little minecraft, and i cant find it again, do you by any chance have the link to it?
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Then you obviously have never met me...
Hey. Hey bro! PM me, remind me to edit this after school today, alright? I'm gonna be awesome. If I like it (I find it very difficult to edit fics that I don't enjoy, damn you ADHD) and you're up for it, I might end up editing this entire story. Just PM me so I remember to do it, alright? Alright.
This isn't really done all too well in my opinion. It goes way too fast, has quite a few grammar issues, and is one of the least interesting stories I've read. I usually don't leave a story hanging on the first chapter like this, but I doubt I'll hang around for this one.
1619062 You mean... this one?
Okay, here's my thoughts.
The story is well-paced, sort of. And the grammar is Ok too; sort of. This story have a few issues that kind of bug me, and one of them is the discovery of the world the mane 6 is in. I find it fine to do it like this with Applejack, because she's a clever pony and has dealt with much more than just being in another fantasy world, but for the other ponies to come it shouldn't be as natural, and I doubt any of the other ponies would just accept a giant spider running at them. Also I'm not sure how to imagine it, for example I don't know if the ponies have been transformed into a pixelated version of themselves, (Mine Little Pony mod.), or if they're bodies still look like a cartoon. The concepts are a little flawed, and I think it would be a lot easier to explain the inventory with a saddlebag, rather than telekinesis nonsense.
Other than it's minor flaws, this story is great. You might want to add a prologue, or at least a better explanation of how Applejack got there. The story is great all around and I REALLY want to see more.
1619939 "I didn't mena no harm!"
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I've attached this story to the Minecraft FIM group. Look it up and you'll find two "My Little Minecraft" stories.
This is awesome. Please make more...
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I noticed all that after I finished writing just got super lazy after -.-
Make steve!
Hmmmmm...
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No humans will be in this fic
Heh, I love Minecraft.
I'm probably getting an account later.
Wait... Are you including Creepers and Endermen?
Cause Creepers are cute... 
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Creepers and enderman will be included
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Yeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeessssssssssssssssssssssssssssss!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Yay an actually GOOD minecraft x MLP crossover!
Okay, so each one knows how to do a different aspect of MInecraft. Applejack is digging, rainbow dash is fighting, and I don't know anything else.
This is a GREAT chapter! Hope to see more!
Get steve and he will teach them all about minecraft!
Grievances:
The chapter name should be "Rainbow Dash" instead of "Rainbowdash".
Again, same thing.
*excited
Double period there.
Is that supposed to be "we" instead of "she" or am I missing something?
*familiar
You forgot your closing quotations.
I saw quite a few places where you messed up you're/your or didn't put apostrophes in contractions.
Praise:
One hundred percent original cross-over, interesting and believable characters, good story, good description, etc.
If you need a pre-reader/editor, I'd be more than happy to help.
I swear twilight will probably be the ethoslab of this story. mindcrack reference.
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No references will be made in this story.
Okey then. Good.
...do you understand what the reference was to?
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Yes. I have heard of Ethoslab but never watched him.
Ok cool. Watching the mindcrack stuff made me really want to play mc. Sooo that's why I brought I up.
Cool, I have a story with the same name! I'll see how good this one is, and maybe give my support with it.
I've read this story, and so far pretty good! Although I put a different aspect on things (mine was written first, I only had one idea of what would happen...), the basic elements of Minecraft are secured within your grasp. Maybe when you edit it sometime, you can put just a little more detail for some of the paragrapgh. Plus it won't hurt to make the chapters a little longer. I'm giving all of my support with this story, and I hope to see more of what's to come
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TOO SHORT, I LIKE THIS STORY!
This came out when i refreshed
CAN YOU INCREASE STORY LENGTH? IT TOOK ME APPROXIMATELY 0.125 RELS TO READ THE ENTIRE THING.
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Sorry I must have forgot the K ^.^||
YAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAY!!!!!!!!!!
a bit short...... oh well Its still awesome.
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I plan on making the next chapter much longer.
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1818462 meh im more of a B-Team person but etho is entertaining
I LOVE MINECRAFT!!!!!!!!!!!!! But there's a few things that kept me from liking this story:
1. You really need to work on your grammar. I mean, sure, you don't need to use so many commas... But you hardly used any in your sentences. Commas count as grammar, too. And you forgot periods in some places... AND at some points you forgot to finish the dialogue with the ending " mark, so it confuses some people. You also forgot some capitals.
2. You misspelled a lot of things! I actually don't care much about grammar, unless it's not decent enough to read. But you really need to brush up your spelling. Like, "Dashi" is actually spelled "Dashie" (you kept calling poor Dashie that
), "new" was meant to be "knew", etc. Also, Rainbowdash is actually Rainbow Dash.
3. You need to make your story just a bit longer. I myself am trying to work on how I pace my stories, but yours really needs some work on the pacing.
All these problems can mean that you need an editor/proofreader. I will be happy to edit it for you if you can't find somebody who will. I am a Super-Minecraft-Fan, I play Minecraft 2 hours every day! I have my own account...
~Amazingpony
(P.S., I suggest a few Minecraft servers you should try: Meepcraft, EpicMineTime Blue, EpicMineTime Green)
(P.P.S., I mostly go on EpicMineTime Green, even though the other 2 servers are better.)
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Although I would love to have you as my editor, I am thinking about abandoning this story :/
It was an over used idea, with short chapters and horrible grammar. Also I can never seem to get any actual work on the story done. I have been really busy with school, work, and many other things I am currently trying to balance. Sorry to disappoint
I might check out those servers sometime ;)