• Published 5th Oct 2012
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The Story Behind the Rose - Faust Fan Five



Can Roseluck win the mare of her dreams?

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The Novel

Chapter 2~ The Novel

Rose ran faster. She needed to see Diamond again, for fear that she was just an illusion; a stunningly beautiful one at that. She picked up the pace, not really concerned for how lost she was getting. It almost felt like if she stopped thinking about Diamond for more than a few seconds, Rose would forget she even existed.

What if she doesn’t remember me?’ Rose’s panicked mind told her. ‘You only spoke with her for a few minutes... she’s probably forgotten you even exist.

Rose stopped suddenly, breathing heavily, desperately trying to catch her breath. Rose’s head was suddenly plagued with doubts that weren’t there a few seconds ago. She tried to continue running, but found herself unable to move. Her heart and mind are at war, both fighting for control over her body. Rose tries to move forward once again, but she’s lost control over her limbs... she can barely breath.

You don’t deserve happiness,’ her mind tells her. ‘Why would a girl like her stoop to your level? You’ve always been alone... a simple crush won’t change anything.’

Rose crumples to the ground, tears forming in her eyes. She simply laid there, paralyzed with fear, pain and loneliness, her warring emotions fighting for control.

And then, it snapped.

She snapped.

I’m done with this... I can’t keep going on like this, being afraid to try, being afraid to walk out the door every morning. I’ve lost so many opportunities in the past because I am such a wimp... a coward. Well, not this time.’

She got back to her hooves, slowly. She could feel her resolve hardening. She knows what she has to do and how to do it. Rose starts running again, faster than before. She could see Diamonds house-actually, mansion or castle would be more fitting terms.

The place is huge. At least fifty feet tall and constructed of mainly cobblestone walls and marble columns. Rose entered the abode through the massive wooden-probably oak-front doors.

The inside of the fortress-er, house-is even bigger than what you would think looking at it from the outside. There is a high-vaulted ceiling and portraits of Diamond and her family everywhere.

She could hear a radio playing in the room right in front of her. Curiosity piqued, Rose walked forward and in the room she found-

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Rarity yawned as she put the book down on her bed. She patted Opal on the head casually as her cat slept on her lap. The book she had been reading had been recommended to her by Roseluck, who had said the book would be right up Rarity’s ally. Rarity would hate to admit it, but she was enjoying the novel...scandalous as it was. But hey, everypony loves a good scandal now and again, right?

Rarity yawned again. It was fashionably late, but she had to finish the chapter. She just had to know what happened next. She picked up the book and continued reading~

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Rose opened the door and found the love of her life, Diamond Snow, in.... the shower. She was taking a shower.

If the color of Rose’s coat hadn’t been naturally red, the scene before her would have made it permanently that color. She blushed profusely and attempted to leave the bathroom without being discovered. However, in her haste, she knocked over the radio, slipped on the wet floor, and bumped her head on the ground. She quickly lost consciousness, but not before she heard the water in the shower stop and a beautiful purple maned, white coated unicorn looking down on her with those breathtaking blue eyes...

Rose?’

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Rarity put down the book once more, yawning even louder this time. She resolved herself to finishing the book later, or else she wouldn’t have enough time in the morning to properly style her coiffure. And then there was the lunch date she had with Roseluck tomorrow as well.

Comments ( 15 )

I'm sorry it took me so long for this ;(
I am sick today, and I don't know why, but I decided I've left you all waiting too long and published this. Let me know what your thoughts are about the chapter, and I apologize once again for taking so long...
And about the beginning part: It is my personal view of myself a little. I used to think I was pathetic and didn't deserve happiness... but I think differently now, thankfully. I hope you all enjoy!
Wow...should've made this chapter longer.

For such short chapters, you're amazing at this! I hope Rarity makes it with Roseluck. (not in a gutter way)

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You.... you think I am a good writer?
.... Thank you, my fellow brony.
Also, it was actually your comment that made me decide to put out the second chapter today, though I probably should've made it a little longer....
Anyway, thank you so much for the praise and I hope you have an awesome time with...whatever it is cool people do these days.
~ Faust Fan Five

2398007 Aww...come on, you know what cool people do, you are one! I hope you can summon up the courage to keep writing.

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As long as people enjoy reading what I write, then yes, I shall gladly continue to write. Goodnight my good man! If you are a man, I don't even know...:twilightsheepish::facehoof:

finally:pinkiehappy:
its short, but things are starting to heat up... in a good way, of course:twilightblush:
well, hope you get well soon, rest up, take care of yourself:raritywink:
hope to see more soon, i'll be waiting:rainbowdetermined2:

2398224 ....man? You thought...that I was a man? :fluttershyouch:

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Wow. I am an idiot... I'm sorry pegasister! It's just so uncommon to see them around, you know? That is a terrible excuse...

i.imgur.com/XVNVUrp.gif Does this make up for me screwing up?

HOLY SCHIST, FINALLY!!!
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Dude. Wimpy. I desire moar. MOAR. There aren't enough RariLuck stories as good as this. I sicced my followers on you! Yet your story remains disappointingly unfinished.

JK, take your time.

2398696 That's so cute! Okay...you win. :pinkiehappy:

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Thank you, Mr. CanterlotGuardian! I have no idea why you would bother to read my story, but I'm glad you enjoyed what I have so far:twilightsmile:

Wow. Short, sweet, and still great quality. I'm impressed.

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Why thank you for the very thoughtful comment. I will get back to this story when I can, but it might take some time....
Also, I see that you are fairly new. I would love to welcome you to FimFiction!:twilightsmile: May your times here be a joyous!

MOTHER FUCKIN MOAR!!!!!!!!:flutterrage:

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