GAAAH! I'm really loving this story. Been looking forward to another Trixie and Fluttershy story since Kindness' Reward. And by the looks of it, this is definitely a promising story. Looking forward to the next update! Keep up the great work.
I'm really enjoying this story so far. I love your characterization of Fluttershy, and how she's handling Trixie's visits. Can't wait to see how the two will interact once they finally see each other.
... Yeah, this is how it's done. Thank you, dear author, for keeping things slow, for the most part. No need to rush! That's how most shipping fics mess up. Then again, this isn't most fics, now is it?
Great chapter! Never thought I'd be this sympathetic towards somepony who is refered as show antagonist, but here I am, skipping beats of my heart every time Trixie sees Shy. Can't help almost shouting in my head: "Come out and talk to her! It's perfectly safe! It's gonna be fine!" Alas, this time a timid canary pegasus was more assertive, than an arrogant showmare - isn't that a good example of how it's important not to judge somepony by the look? Almost cliffhanging at the end, can't wait to see chapter four. The scenes and the pace of the narration is fascinating, enchanting - and touching. Have my warm thanks and godspeed - I really hate to leave the world of this story for long, so don't keep us hanging for long! And one more time - thank you for your visions that you share with us.
1453113 Thanks! Heh, now I'm writing the characters I feel like I'm making Trixie every bit as shy as Flutters herself, but for different reasons! As always, I'm really glad you're enjoying the story, and chapter 4 shouldn't be too far away now!
1442690 It's a huge relief knowing most people don't mind the slower pace, actually. I mean, I think my biggest derp by far when writing A Bluebird's Song was to kick off the romance too fast, so I decided to go for something much more gradual with this one. So thanks for the reassurance that it's not a bad thing!
1439637 I must admit, Kindness's Reward is still quite possibly my all-time favourite fic. In my opinion I'm yet to see a story surpass it, and I highly doubt this one will, although hopefully I'll at least not disgrace the legacy!
1463632 Well, slow is realistic. Since we expect fanfics to be more mature/realistic in storytelling and explaining, slower romances are better most of the time because it's realistic, and allows us to savor the journey. (Of course, some of us DO like a fast romance, but there's always people who like something different! XD)
I have an idea why it might turn out to be sad and dark. I don't think, though I could be wrong, that this is headed towards gore, or brutality: considering the slow, psychological nature of the chapters, I guess that the darkness would be the personal and emotional.
Seeing how Trixie, when she is Fluttershy's presence, describes the Primrose Pegasus (great descriptive phrase, though perhaps tone down on it a bit) leaves me feeling uneasy. It is how one might describe a goddess, so nature spirit of kindness and love. A perfect being whose existance offers redemption and hope. A dream and a wish, a fantasy of perfection that, for all that Fluttershy is quite a good pony, she cannot live up to.
Fluttershy is easily embarrased, she is given to fear, to worries, to doubt, she has a tendancy not to believe in herself. The calm and kind goddess might have some resemblance to Fluttershy, but they aren't the same person.
Compare how Fluttershy describes the experience to how Trixie does: Fluttershy is a bit confused, feels sad for Trixie, but...I don't know how to put it, but there's a definate difference in how Fluttershy sees it, and how Trixie does (that is obvious, and what is also obvious is that Trixie sees what she thinks she needs.)
And there is definately (her inner voice outright says it) something stalkerish and obsessive in her, and the third-person thing in the flashback was rather, unnerving. The sexual fantasies portray a Fluttershy that doesn't exist, and that would quite worry the real Fluttershy. Something regal in the kindness, tending to Trixie's wounds, an angel (which is the starting basis for most (only a few out there) TrixieShy stories I've read) who means everything.
That is too much for one pony to carry, a person's every hope of redemption, which seems like that's what's going on (may be wrong on this.) "She could not tear herself away from this mare for fear that it might destroy her all over again." Something is going to break, emotionally, is my guess, and when it does, things will rapidly unravel. I half-hope I am wrong, while the other half, which has darker tastes, emotionally, prays I am even close to right.
Wow. You never cease to amaze me, Ardensfax-sama. I still can't believe just how talented you are with the subconcious voice thing. Also, this an amazing exploration of the inner thougjts of many. Already loving the story, and I'm only on the third chapter!
GAAAH! I'm really loving this story. Been looking forward to another Trixie and Fluttershy story since Kindness' Reward. And by the looks of it, this is definitely a promising story. Looking forward to the next update! Keep up the great work.
Verry good. Uy bueno
Lovely. Shy's characterization is just right, and I am enjoying the weak and powerless Trixie.
Uh oh. Looks like a storm is brewing...literally. I can hardly wait to read what happens next.
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Kindness Reward is still my favorite fanfic even after easily hundred other shipping stories.
The bar is set very high, but I'm sure this story can reach and maybe even surpass it.
Am I the only one who hopes for a twishy and get trixie's feelings get crushed???*smh for just thinking about it*
1439637 I agree on that. 100%.
This is really excellent so far.
I'm really enjoying this story so far. I love your characterization of Fluttershy, and how she's handling Trixie's visits. Can't wait to see how the two will interact once they finally see each other.
... Yeah, this is how it's done. Thank you, dear author, for keeping things slow, for the most part. No need to rush! That's how most shipping fics mess up. Then again, this isn't most fics, now is it?
Great chapter! Never thought I'd be this sympathetic towards somepony who is refered as show antagonist, but here I am, skipping beats of my heart every time Trixie sees Shy. Can't help almost shouting in my head: "Come out and talk to her! It's perfectly safe! It's gonna be fine!"
Alas, this time a timid canary pegasus was more assertive, than an arrogant showmare - isn't that a good example of how it's important not to judge somepony by the look?
Almost cliffhanging at the end, can't wait to see chapter four. The scenes and the pace of the narration is fascinating, enchanting - and touching. Have my warm thanks and godspeed - I really hate to leave the world of this story for long, so don't keep us hanging for long!
And one more time - thank you for your visions that you share with us.
1453113 Thanks! Heh, now I'm writing the characters I feel like I'm making Trixie every bit as shy as Flutters herself, but for different reasons! As always, I'm really glad you're enjoying the story, and chapter 4 shouldn't be too far away now!
1442690 It's a huge relief knowing most people don't mind the slower pace, actually. I mean, I think my biggest derp by far when writing A Bluebird's Song was to kick off the romance too fast, so I decided to go for something much more gradual with this one. So thanks for the reassurance that it's not a bad thing!
1439637 I must admit, Kindness's Reward is still quite possibly my all-time favourite fic. In my opinion I'm yet to see a story surpass it, and I highly doubt this one will, although hopefully I'll at least not disgrace the legacy!
1463632 Well, slow is realistic. Since we expect fanfics to be more mature/realistic in storytelling and explaining, slower romances are better most of the time because it's realistic, and allows us to savor the journey. (Of course, some of us DO like a fast romance, but there's always people who like something different! XD)
I have an idea why it might turn out to be sad and dark. I don't think, though I could be wrong, that this is headed towards gore, or brutality: considering the slow, psychological nature of the chapters, I guess that the darkness would be the personal and emotional.
Seeing how Trixie, when she is Fluttershy's presence, describes the Primrose Pegasus (great descriptive phrase, though perhaps tone down on it a bit) leaves me feeling uneasy. It is how one might describe a goddess, so nature spirit of kindness and love. A perfect being whose existance offers redemption and hope. A dream and a wish, a fantasy of perfection that, for all that Fluttershy is quite a good pony, she cannot live up to.
Fluttershy is easily embarrased, she is given to fear, to worries, to doubt, she has a tendancy not to believe in herself. The calm and kind goddess might have some resemblance to Fluttershy, but they aren't the same person.
Compare how Fluttershy describes the experience to how Trixie does: Fluttershy is a bit confused, feels sad for Trixie, but...I don't know how to put it, but there's a definate difference in how Fluttershy sees it, and how Trixie does (that is obvious, and what is also obvious is that Trixie sees what she thinks she needs.)
And there is definately (her inner voice outright says it) something stalkerish and obsessive in her, and the third-person thing in the flashback was rather, unnerving. The sexual fantasies portray a Fluttershy that doesn't exist, and that would quite worry the real Fluttershy. Something regal in the kindness, tending to Trixie's wounds, an angel (which is the starting basis for most (only a few out there) TrixieShy stories I've read) who means everything.
That is too much for one pony to carry, a person's every hope of redemption, which seems like that's what's going on (may be wrong on this.)
"She could not tear herself away from this mare for fear that it might destroy her all over again."
Something is going to break, emotionally, is my guess, and when it does, things will rapidly unravel. I half-hope I am wrong, while the other half, which has darker tastes, emotionally, prays I am even close to right.
Wow. You never cease to amaze me, Ardensfax-sama. I still can't believe just how talented you are with the subconcious voice thing. Also, this an amazing exploration of the inner thougjts of many. Already loving the story, and I'm only on the third chapter!
She deserves to live suffering in pain and darkness until the end of her days! ... wait, no, she does deserve living like that.
Now that I think about it, I'm left wondering if Zecora has been discretely steering the more dangerous monsters away from Trixie.