A normal day in Ponyville is about to be disturbed when a strange creature comes from out of nowhere. At first he seems to be friendly and can be trusted, but something is bothering him. The death of someone close or somepony.
Celestia sense a new threat from an ancient enemy, something Luna isn't aware off.
Is the arrival of this unknow creature a coincidence with this new threat or not? But one thing is certain, he's the only one who can save Equestria... or destroys it.
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Here we go, my first fanfic ever
I should also mention that I'm not used to write in english and I don't have a pre-reader, if you see any mistakes do not hesitate to tell me
1538950 this is gonna be fucking amazing
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You asked so I will post some mistakes I found. They are in chronological order. Not too many mistakes.
"We knows were we're going, but we still need a finish line." *We know where*
"Alright, but if if one of you two dares to beak my front door...." *break*
'Canterlot Markt' was again taken place in the main streets. *taking*
Luna sighed deeply "If those stories you told me really happend, then tell me one thing." *happened*
"The Weather Team didn't planned this kind of storm in this area. *hadn't planned*
Only Pagasi controls the clouds. *pegasi* silly
Applejack quickly layed down on the ground *laid*
dropped down and couldn’t belive their eyes. *believe*
Did... did you saw that?” *see*
They were standing on a cliff to see what happend. *happened*
“You can stay here if you wan’t but I’m going to look.” *want,* or *want to,*
He didn't response. *respond*
Rainbow Dash didn't pushed him gently anymore *push*
The story starts out really well and the way you have written it is also very good.
I can't wait for the next chapter.
Keep up the good work.
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Thank you for letting me know
The idea...
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Use google chrome or microsoft word. they tell you if you mess words up.
This rocks instant Fav
Good start for your story, can't wait to read another chapter! :D
I like this so far. Keep it up!
Hmm... tracking, but withholding final verdict until I can see more.
Huh, this is pretty similar to my fic, Winged Demon , odd. I still like your fic!
But I like your story more than mine!
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wow, I didn't know that. your story is good but thanks. I appreciate it
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Nice chapter! :D
I like where you're going with this, keep it up.
Moar!
I like it.
1590833 YES MEIN FRUEND MOAR MOAR I SAY
1589736 Thanks for the support
1590833 1592807 And there will be more
1605415 MOAR HAVE SOME PIE
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This is cool can't wait for chapter 3
And then shit got real
Awesome :)
can't wait for chapter 4 keep it going
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do it photoshop
1682168 YOLO *runs at mach 8 speeds*
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BITCH GET BACK HERE!
1682202 YOLO
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*Leaf used flying hug tackle
It was super effective!
1682340 FISH *hugs back* (see my blog for what fish means)
Keep it coming.
You take away vodka from Russian, prepare to die imperialist pig.
1826234 Whaaat?
Looks back at Chapter 3:
God-FUCKING-damnit Applejack! He told Dash his name and she told all of you! Are you just fucking retarded?!
Now Celestia believes that Adam is Byron and attacks him for no reason!
*Claps hands* can't wait for the next chapter
Too much time between posts and too little words to read make me a sad Pinkie.
Damn cliffhangers!
MOAR
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Yeah not the smartest thing to say huh AJ
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WHY U NO LIKE CLIFFHANGERS!
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Alright, since you asked so nicely
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It makes me feel sad.
this.is.AWESOME!
I have noticed a pattern with these stories. GOD DAMN IT CELESTIA STOP BEING SO XENOPHOBIC :fluterrage:
Please continue this story a really like it
